So I finally decided to work my lazy ass. So here it is! A brand new story. I will be updating this project until I finish chapter 1. I’ll just pray that I won’t suffer a painful headache this time.
Summary
In a world where there are red blood and blue blood, fighting over for centuries. You, however, have violet blood, the proof that your parents were of different blood.
You play as a young villager who has yet to reach adulthood, with a terrible secret that you must hide from other people no matter what.
FEATURES PLANNED:
Little mini games that will add and test your stats.
Relationship are very important here.
A lot of intrigue.
Be ready to be a spy for the kingdom you’ll choose.
6 romance options.
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Characters
(The characters here are the important people introduced so far. More characters will be introduced in the future)
Maria - Your mother. She has lived in the village for all her life.
Clyde - One of your friends. A rascal boy who loves risky adventures.
Alyssa - The village chief’s daughter. A sweet and kind girl.
In terms of actual comments, I feel that the opening pages are a bit too expositiony. Most of what’s told there could happen when the MC is thinking about their own blood a few pages later, in a far more natural place.
Also, I did notice a few places where you slip into the past tense. This is very easy to do, but it pays to be on the lookout for such occurrences.
Hey Sophia!! Glad to see you back, gracing our lowly thread with your everlasting creativity and awesomeness nobody can match! Just hope you stay a lil while longer this time xDD
Like others, there no part where it’s mentioned MC strip his/her clothes. I don’t even have choice to whatever keep it on or not, unlike if we choose to play along. I choose “It’s just water” choice.