Working through editing Episode 6 atm and there is particular point where my editor (tagging you @Fiogan so you can elaborate your point ) isnāt keen on a part of the episode and although I can see where they are coming from Iām doubtful others would see it as how they see it. It might even be a cultural opinion, so before I make a decision about whether to remove or keep it I thought Iād post it and get some opinions from my female readers as this is something that only happens to a female protagonist. Just have a read and just tell me what you thinkā¦
For clarification this bit takes place between a female protagonist and their younger brother. The point my editor has is that not all girls would mind being called big especially if they are a more physical player. From my pov and the intent of the scene was a female protagonist would simply be saying to their brother that not all girls would like being called big not the protagonist herself.
My choices are;
1)Leave as is.
2)Alter the text to say āFor future reference some girls donāt like to be called ābigāā¦ā
3) Delete it.
[Also when the brother says big he means in general its been a LONG time since you last saw him (over ten years so he last saw you at the age of 8 and now your 19-20]
He stares up at you. "This is weird!" he announces suddenly.
"What is?"
"You're big!" he says, impressed.
*if (female)
You hit him lightly.
"What was that for?"
"For future reference that isn't something you ought to say to a girl..."
"Fine, still true," he replies cheekily.
If this is what you are getting at, then heād be more likely to say:
This is with the brother being a young adult himself ā¦ if he was 8, then the āYouāre big!ā would be ok ā¦ but even by 8 that is a little iffy imo.
Your editor is correct that not all girls would mind being called ābigā depending on the context.
The editing is nearly done now. So Iāll be looking for some beta tester to test the new and revised content soon. If youāre interested please let me know and Iāll add you to the list, If you beta tested it the first time and are in the last pm thread about it Iāll post the code to access the beta there too
Does anyone know how to start a relationship with Scarlet? I did it accidentally the first time and I canāt do it again. Knowing that her surname āTepesā means she is descended from Vlad or not doesnāt boost it or drop the relationship bar.
Okay, finally finished the edits now. It passes quicktest and its now going through randomtest.
so its time to betatest the new content (including new scenes, revised scenes and a new nonbinary option for the PC.)
So if youād like to beta test the new and improved of season one let me know here and Iāll add you to the testing group tomorrow.
Thanks everyone for your patience and a big thanks for @Fiogan for going through it all (sorry for some of my bad writing habits!) and @defenestratin for doing a fantastic job with the new cover.
) isnāt keen on a part of the episode and although I can see where they are coming from Iām doubtful others would see it as how they see it. It might even be a cultural opinion, so before I make a decision about whether to remove or keep it I thought Iād post it and get some opinions from my female readers as this is something that only happens to a female protagonist. Just have a read and just tell me what you thinkā¦
