Thanks!! It’s been a fun process so far!
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This is giving me so much nostalgia right now. I do love a good revenge plot!
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Hehehe 
Time for me to put my scheming writer’s hat on and think about how I would get back at all my frenemies…
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Hey everyone, i’m currently working on my first ever IF which is called Bloods Melody. Although i’m not going into much detail at the moment as i’ll post that in the near future, i can say that it’s very rich in fantasy, as there’s many vampires elfes werewolves ghosts and even a phoenix in human form. And once thats posted i’ll look into releasing a demo.
But right now i just wanted to ask something, as i currently have only four ROs. One female, one non-binary, one male, and lastly the fourth which changes depending on the players choice. But i thought that might be a bit to little, as i can still weave three ROs into the story if needed (one of each gender). So, would you like more ROs or just leave it to four?
- Four ROs
- Seven ROs
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Well, it looks like i’m keeping it to four ROs, thanks for the help everyone 
And as i said, i’ll post more information about my game into this thread in a couple of weeks.
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Actually far better than most of the 90’s. Post 2001-2 we start to finally see some more daring and figure hugging male outfits again, instead of the horrible baggy, sagging “walk around in your crappy underwear” shit, ugly 3/4th shorts and ultra chunky trainers of the 90’s. Then again I have only ever been interested in men’s fashion, so it could well be true on the girl’s side of things. 
Of course those are just the general trends and more daring kids can always join a subculture or defy the prevailing trends with their own eclectic and bold styles (my personal favourite in all era’s).
Paritcularly since this is their last year and the mc is already the school outcast it probably won’t get worse and only better if, money permitting, the mc throws caution to the wind in their final year and just wear what they want to.
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I do have to say that clothing has been one of the hardest things to research for the MC. (What classifies as outcast clothing???) 
I have been watching the early Fast and Furious movies, and those guys’ early 2000s fashion? Whew. (Not that I’m using car movies as part of my research or anything… hehe.) But, the ladies’ 2000s fashion… whole other situation 
But, this has been so fun to do, ngl.
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Brian/Paul Walker always dresses atrociously during all his parts in the series…so I wouldn’t want him to be the example for my male mc. 
Vin Diesel/Dom actually has his own style, but it is ultra buff/masculine and really only works if the mc is packing both a significant amount of muscle and attitude. But it is certainly much better than Brian’s.
The Asian kid villains of the first movie really did have their own style too with the shorter cousin wearing the era’s risque/sexy masculine club clothing as streetwear, definitely a bold, risky move but one that also requires a significant of money. Though yes, I would love to do that for the mc, it really would be a big fuck you to the small town and its bigots, assuming of course the mc has the body and the money to go for it. The main villain had his own take on the classy preppy style too.
If you want another car/crime thing of the era for inspiration for male clothes/costume I would suggest Fastlane (though I really watched that one only for a young Peter Facinelli). In contrast to Brian in Fast and Furious who was always by far the worst dressed male member of the main cast Facinelli’s character dresses much better while still being mostly within the mainstream for white guys of the era, except for the occasional leather pants…which I did like quite a lot.
Whatever a particular outcast wants and/or can afford. This one really in the simplest to answer. 
Unless how they dress really is why they are an outcast they have, ironically, more fashion freedom than most of rest of the cast.
That’s what I was thinking… Who was his dresser? Or was that just his character type? 
The other male outfits in the films are very interesting and good in their own way, and I have been using them as references for my male characters. And, yes, I do think money does have a big factor in what the main character can wear… but (!) I am trying to eliminate that factor, allowing the MC to splurge on something that they want.
Also, I will def check out Fastlane for research, haha! Thank you for the suggestion!
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Oof I’m not sure if this is the right thread, but someone said they’re working on a phantom of the opera story. Does anyone remember this? Or know anything?
Hmm…well maybe the mc somehow gets a really good side job for their age, although this is much more difficult in a small town then the big city. Another one could be that they come into some inheritance, but it would probably be one their parents/guardians can’t squander themselves hold back from them until 21 or so. Meaning it would have to be one administered by a law firm, instead of mc’s parents/guardians with conditions and a living stipend until they are met. Most common of those conditions is turning 21, or more rarely 25.
Even a couple of hundred of dollars a month can make a big difference towards acquiring their own (used) vehicle and a better wardrobe and grooming products, if the mc did not have those things previously. 
I think so, as his costume designer in the first film at least is the same as the one for most of the rest of the main cast. I think it was meant to be generic straight white male street style with a bit of 90’s throwback, which indeed was not the best back then.
What I find a bit of an oversight in that case is how living with a wife/girlfriend between movies 5 and 6 did not impact him style wise. Or maybe that is mainly a K-drama thing where wives girlfriends make the male characters dress better? Not that an approach such as that doesn’t have its own drawbacks mind you.
I have a story concept, all that is to really know about it at the moment can be read in the demo I made, I feel as though it is too short to have it’s own page, and this is more of a taste tester then a full on demo.
https://dashingdon.com/play/top-hat/genesis/mygame/
if the link doesn’t work then I’ll fix it, anyway peace, I need to continue working on it
News Update: after sorting out my terrible code, I have added the first and most important choice, your name.
News Update number 2: going to start working on appearance tomorrow, I just finished writing some “future content” I say that both figuratively and literally, let me know if you want me to update it after I finish the appearance section.
News Update number 2.1:
I added the stats, as of now it only has the name you pick.
News Update number 2.2: couldn’t work on it today, will work on it tomorrow if I have time.
News Update number 2.3: I will stop the news updates as of now, updates to the game will take longer, but I don’t plan on stopping right now, I haven’t finished with the appearance, but will continue to work on it.
This is a news update, and not an actual update for the game, I will continue to add them here until the game gets big enough for it’s own page, at some point I will update the game when I have sufficient content.
Game Update 0.1: updated the story a little, you can pick your name and gender.
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I hardly even started reading it yet so i can’t say anything about the story, but i just wanted to say that it shows this…
…if you click the show stats button.
Sorry, i didn’t know that.
I haven’t made any stats yet, so that is to be expected, and thank you for your feedback.
as I said though it’s more of a taste test then a demo, and I can also understand why you’d not have any opinions on it, as if I were to read something that short I also would have a hard time having an opinion based on such little information.
actually I give some info on where this idea came from, so just a couple hours ago, I was watching youtube, and came across a song, the name of the song stuck out to me, and the whole story came to mind.
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As it is, with only being a single page long and no stats, it’s difficult to grasp what this story is about or what it’s intent is. The little blurb at the front while welcoming, still doesn’t make it clear to me what genre this is, but by based on the vats and man in apparent lab coat, this does strike me as a sci fi genre game to me, though not made explicitly clear.
The writing isn’t bad, but suffers from the problem I had when starting( And seriously? I still do.) is that too many grammatical errors can distract the reader and take away from focusing on the material. Taking the time to edit those things carefully is important for anybody.
Aside from that, without really seeing more of it or having any choices at such an early stage, it’s too early to really comment on my personal feelings to the direction and idea, since with only one page, I’m honestly not too sure what it is.
I’m not saying this to be deliberately negative, or critical. The only point I have to give is that it’s difficult to even have any evaluation, positive or negative, without seeing enough of it to even give a summary or thoughts towards. That doesn’t mean, it’s not an idea worth pursuing. It just means that’s it’s still in such an infant stage, so how it will grow or what any of my thoughts should be or what I’m supposed to feel, isn’t an easy thing to comment on or observe, if that makes any sense.
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Thank you for your feedback, I have fixed some of the grammar mistakes, and though my grammar isn’t the greatest I tend to strive for more complex wording, which has has become a habit and can be quite bad for a story if no one knows what those words mean, so if you find yourself reading it and can’t understand what I’m trying to say, please let me know
another reason why I only did a “taste test” was because it’s been 2 years since I last coded in choicescript, so I’m reading my other works code to freshen up a little bit, lucky my code was absolute garbage and I need to decode what I was trying to do, I could have actually coded everything in a much simpler way, but it seems as though I grabbed the word simple and scrambled it to such a degree it makes over engineering seem simple, most of it seems to have come from a lack of knowledge so I tried to fix issues by making it more complicated and in some cases it seems to have actually worked somehow, anyway I’ll be working on this for awhile.
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Wow it’s been almost a year and I still have no public demo BUT I started a dev log/tumblr for it https://deceit-if.tumblr.com/ for anyone still interested.
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Don’t stress too much about not having a public beta or taking a year to make a game.
Seeing all the demos in the forum may give the impression that they were made overnight, but I assure you, many of the authors behind those public demos have been writing them for a year (or more!) just like you.
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That is definitely interesting, will be waiting for the demo!
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I’m in agreement that
You should definitely start looking into improving your grammar and spelling. Get a trusted adult to proofread your work.
Aside from that, the game is introduced with a giant block of text telling us that you’ve abandoned multiple previous projects and you’re not confident in your abilities. That’s not a great first impression and it’s totally unfair to yourself! I’d strike that whole first page from the record and just let your story speak for itself.
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