@Silverstone woot woot 
I actually didnt notice a difference, and wouldnāt the kids holding you down get electrocuted??? lol
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Yes a true gift! I am the most powerful!!! Bow to me! I am a god!!! Muahahahahahaha!! 
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Rebellion anyone?? 
I will reclaim what is mine! And nothing can stand in my way!
Must be a pretty comfortable rock you have there 
In all seriousness though, if you donāt pay attention to PC RPG gaming you will find it very easy to miss the whole Fallout phenomenon.
@ChimeraLord sorry I didnāt update the link yet. I want to add in some more to the story for age 10 first. 
YES!!! I like that. Iāll use āThe Giftā. Goes with the theme and storyline 
@Abyss lol love the enthusiasm! 
@LordOfLA 
I like to think of my rock as more of a cave. And yes, it is quite comfortable the only rpg type games Iāve played in recent years would be black ops 2 and the fable series. Not really sure if fable falls under rpg but I liked them anyways.
I donāt think COD black ops 2 counts as an rpgā¦
@faewkless lol your probably right its probably more in the first player shooter games? How about the final fantasy games?
Ahaha completely off topic^^
Iāll update soon. Probably within the next few days.
Final fantasy = turn based rpg (mostly)
Call of duty = first person shooter
You should totally check out fallout 3, it is actually an amazing game.
@ballmot true, i like Final Fantasy ten. yeah everyone keeps telling me to check it out. I fully intend to after I finish writing this.
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How about āEspecially Giftedā or something? 
Keep up the good work. 
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Thatās gold too!Hallo! I started playing and thought Iād note any errors I came across! I didnāt finish the game, but I was sure to try and mention anything I saw up to that point!
Near the beginning, when MCās being moved to mingle with other the other wings, thereās a typo:
āHis birght red plump cheeks wobbleā
The point of view switched after this to past tense, which was kind of confusing? I forgot where exactly it happened, but it was sometime after West Wingās going to join the North Wing for Recreational Day, I believe.
When MC turns 6, thereāre two typos:
Looking up she seems to realise your still awkwardly standing there staring at her.
the first should be realize, and the second should be youāre
One who controls all others in their given field and [I] I will be this person for the medical scientists"
Iām not sure the [I] I thing is supposed to be like that? Also, there should be punctuation before the end quote!
@Coyoteclaw11 thanks for taking the time to read it. Firstly Iāve found and edited ābrightā in the version for upcoming update, but thanks for pointing it out anyway. Iām not sure which part your referring due to having recently edited parts within Recreation day, Iāll have a read over agin anyway.
About using realise instead of realize. Itās not actually wrong, Iām Australian and either spelling is acceptable here but Iāve always reinforced the preference of s over z as itās the way I was taught to spell. As with the word ācolourā youāll notice in my WiP I donāt spell it as ācolorā.
Thanks again for picking out the āyouāreā grammer error. I seem to do that a lot lol.
I think thatās an error in coding, itās not supposed to have that capitalised I in brackets there. Iāll edit it. Iām unsure which punctuation you want there? The quotations are there as Anna is supposed to be talking and then she looks off distantly afterwards rather than me constantly writing he said/she said. Did you mean a comma after the quotation?
I didnāt even notice the colour one since Iāve seen it around a lot, but Iām not as familiar with ārealise.ā I get it now. c:
Ah and by the quote thing, I did mean a comma! Iām pretty sure all quotes have to include punctuation, even if theyāre in the middle of a sentence (at which point you use a comma.)
Iām always pretty pedantic about the tiniest grammar issues omg, Those things just really stick out at me (whereas other people probably donāt even notice.) Good luck on your game! Hope everything goes well!
Thats okay, I didnāt know about the comma before the end of a quotation. Thereās probably loads of specifics in gramma out there, that we donāt know about.
Lol, I know what thatās like. Iām particularly picky about the use of tenses. I know that one can be a little difficult considering people sometimes forget how they originally wanted to structure the sentence.
Thanks, the updated parts are taking a little longer to finish than I originally thought. Probably another day or so before I change the link. Even then Iāll still have loads left to write
Depends 
I spell it with an S here in the UK 
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so apparently āThe Giftā is already a movieā¦ donāt think I should use that then. Also āThe Giftedā. Also apparently āEspecially Giftedā is a bunch of gift shops. Anyone else got some ideas for a title that doesnāt come off as someone elses work 
How about THE LIFE OF AN ESPER. ESPER is the condensing of the phrase āesp usersā
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