First of all thanks to @AlexCosarca to host my demo and his help. If i have a pc probably will be almost ended but i dont have pc is coded by hand without text editors and auto test. The demo has a lot of errors but i post it with the hope some one like it and want to help to plasm in choicescript because i cant do it alone.
https://dl.dropbox.com/u/95587456/Mara%20SDK/index.html
Why is the hermaphrodite automaticaly a sterile girl and then you die? Why can’t it be a choice between identifying as a male hermaphrodite and then die? Or not die at all by finding a way to escape? Discrimination against the third sex XD. It’s awesome there is finally a herm choice in one of these games though.
I’m afraid English not being your native language will prove to be a terrible disadvantage in this endeavour.
its good the style looked nice how did u change the color of the text???/ i only know how to change the background
yeah there were some mistakes but it made sense to me. i do not care about the spelling and all in a story i just look for a story line so urs is pretty good
Thanks @Drazen for your support? Or critic I do what i can i try to see people who yelling about no natives write a game in another lenguage also i need a editor
Really nobody give me any feedback? Moderators please close this post X(
Give it time.
I like the background of the story, it is a cruel world and it seems that main character will have the option to fit in to that world or to fight against it…what is something that I really appreciate
It’s hard to judge from a short demo, only the future will show how the final game will look like. Your English is a disadvantage but I think you can overcome it. If not by yourself then with help of others.
I agree with @ViliamFiedler
Plus, futuristic worlds always seem to have an interesting catch-some sort of harsh reality or cruel secret-which is always something I like in a game or story.
And what do you mean by editor, as in you want someone to go over your grammar and spelling? I wouldn’t mind helping with that, being a native English speaker myself.
Yes @LOR an editor and maybe someone with a pc to do the autotest i habe to try error by myself all the variables
I agree that some editing by a native English speaker would do a world of good, but that aside, I absolutely love the concept! Is the game going to focus on the test to determine if we live or die, or is there more after that? Either way, it’s a very interesting civilization that you have. I look forward to exploring it more. 
The demo continue before the first exam until the second when you discover your power adquire the inmortality and choose your name.
The game will have 3 principal paths and very long probably 1000 years of Pangea time.
It seems pretty interesting so far I like games in futuristic settings.
Also I found an error when I picked the option that I was stressed for the test.
And another when I ran from the pig guy.
Yes i got problems with fix errors i havent a pc for try and error Alex cosarca is helping me
Ah, I see there was more now. I just got stopped at a few errors before the test and thought that was all there was. 
Alex Cosarca is helping me right now i need feedback with the polemical Female path
Content updated and error fixed with Alex Cosarca help
Great story, an editor would be best, but I’m loving so far and I always have a soft spot for Steampunk.
Cyberpunk not steampunk
Steampunk is a abanced tech society but based in past centuries more common Victorian age steam come from the victorian steam machine who moves that tech,
My story is based in a far future so cyberpunk XD