[WIP] Discovering : Book One (Back with a update !)

Got a key cap remover? A keyboard can have the caps removed to clean the contact point where the key presses down to activate its function.

There’s a chance the key itself is just a bit dirty. Unless there’s a warranty to respect, it is perfectly safe to clean it yourself usually, as long as you make sure to read up on advanced care methods for your particular keyboard.

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Well I don’t know how but I just went to sleep and when I turned on my computer, it was working again, it might be my computer that decided to not make it work x) But thank you !

At least now I can work freely on the game ^^

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Hey there again ! Need advices !

I am starting to work on the choices of the species your character could be aaaand…

To be honest I want to put a LOT of opportunities to give you the choice to go further into the race of your character, so I was wondering… Like I want to give you a lot of choices about it, do you think I should create a lot of variables before coming to the finality of your race ?

For example the first choice would be just pointy ears, fangs, horns or other things (or no change)

Or if you have any other ideas, let me know !

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What is the order of these choices? Do you pick a species, then choose how human or inhuman you look based on what features are lore-friendly?

This is just a highly specific example to see what you’re thinking so giving feedback is easier.

For example, being a “dog-person” if not fully human. No matter their actual name, would someone like this have a dog’s mouth? Would they choose different mouth shapes like Afghan vs Pug vs Bassett? Or would they have a human mouth with maybe different types of dog ears instead of human ears? Maybe a full coat of fur instead of just naked skin on the human features.

Would a player be able to pick whether they even were a dog-person before choosing these dog features? If they don’t choose whay species they are first, it might be strange to look exactly like a dog-person, but be something very different because the player decided after choosing how they looked that they were a lizard.

I would probably order it: pick species first, then pick from a pool of features this species of character can have. :thinking:

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It will be more the contrary, the features lead to the species you want.

At first it will be more like, for example with the pointy ears, like that’s a features of a lot of species, I would like to make the game know that you could be a elf like you could be a demon (because yes personally for me, demons have pointy ears-)

But it will be specified when you will make a choice about what your characters features will lead to wich species… It’s the most difficult choice I will have to code, because how I imagine it, the code I want to do will somehow sort the available species with what features you choose- I don’t know if I explained it well ^^’

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You explained it very well. :smile:

It sounds a bit like a score system where each choice adds to a total, and the highest one is the species chosen. Not sure how you would mitigate a tie, but it can be done within the scope CS.

Like given “pointy” +1 to Elf, and Demon but “round” could be +1 to Human, Dwarf and such.

The breakdown may get complicated if there is too much overlap with two, or more species, though it is simple enough to make your own decisions in the background of things.

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Well I never did a score system before, is there something about it in the wiki ?

Also, there will be like huh…at least 8 species for sure, I don’t know yet how many, but anyway.

And what do you mean the scope CS ?

“It can be done within the scope of” is just a phrase that means “it is possible” / “it can be done” based on the abilities of CS. “CS” is just the shorthand for Choice Script, the code base you use to make your game work. You know, the reason you need all those *if and *goto prefixes.

I’ve seen a few examples of being able to add points to a total in CS, so it should be fairly straightforward to look up. It is similar to, but not the same as, adding points to a hidden statistic tracked in the games that use this method.

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This has potential, but their are so many grammar mistakes and poor formatting of sentences, it makes it kind of hard to read and the way the characters address the mc feels unnatural and while walking through the streets suddenly? the info-dumping about where we are is kinda unnatural.

Keep up the hard work, but maybe put some time and effort into cleaning up what you currently have written. I understand English isn’t easy for everyone to understand, but their are plenty of wonderful people who will be more then willing to help!

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@Aethelric

Well, if you have any suggestions about how to make the writing in my game better, I will gladly read it !

Even in my native language I’m not really a good writer sooo I am trying to do what I can x) Sorry if you have difficulties to understand the story and all !

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Oh okay sorry, I didn’t know about the meaning of this words, thank you for explaining it x)

But anyway, I will try to find someway to take care of the races ^^

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Well a good idea might be putting out a formal message in this thread asking for proof readers to go through and aid you in fixing the grammar mistakes.

Perhaps taking some time to go back over and re-read and fix up what you have already written, while it may slow down adding entirely new things to the story, doing a little foundational work to strengthen your stories foundation will help in the long run.

As I said this story has a lot of interesting potential, it just needs some more polish.

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Would you like me to do a Discord server about my game ?

I will close the poll the 6 january !

  • It will help me to have more regular answer, advices and more.
  • You will be able to chat freely about it, make assumptions and all.
  • You will even be able to ask me questions privately.
  • And to also somehow, one day, open for beta testers and all !

Oh and Happy New Year everyone !!! :tada: :confetti_ball:

  • Yes
  • No

0 voters

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There you go the result !

You mostly voted for Yes so I will open a Discord server for my game !

I’m not good at creating a server so it will take some time, but you will have it !

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Hello everyone !

I’m back to work after a bad event in my life !
I take back my concentration to fully work on the game, I’m still working on the species stats, making sure it will work for the future too !

I am at 11 races for now, but you will have a huge choice about it ! I don’t say yet wich species, because I hope for you to discover it with time !

Discord

Here the Discord Channel I promised !
It isnt perfect or good, but it’s still something !

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Hello. I am really enjoying the game so far and can’t wait to see where you take it. As for any problems I found: not sure if anyone has already informed you, but while having the MC attracted to females, Memphis keeps switching from she, her ,and hers to he, him, and his.

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Could you please make a screenshot or copy paste where you see this please ? So I can correct it ! ^^

Sure. I will after I get off of work. Here is everything I found in one playthrough but it may be in the other female Memphis routes as well

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I think I’ve corrected everything ! Sorry about it, I just typed he/him/his to all the places you saw, and not the variable- Thanks for telling me ! If you see that again in the next update, don’t hesitate to share it !

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No prob. Glad I could help

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