UnNatural - A supernatural horror game - editing complete, beta testing over

@JossieE Using the word “literally” to mean the opposite of what it actually means is not “a saying” It’s just using the word incorrectly.

@Nocturnal_Stillness I am liking the plot so far, but right now it sort of feels more like a novel than of a game. Once you get out of the initial character building part and into the SRT where the game should supposedly begin in earnest, you suddenly get nearly no choices and the ones you do get seem to have little effect.

In Alpha you can talk to your two team mates, which could have been a great opportunity for affecting your relationships with them, but instead turns out to be just a few single sentence replies that lead nowhere. Then you move on to the next scene where you get a choice that is immediately invalidated when some random guy comes up to you and you automatically do everything he asks you to do. Then you automatically stand around watching a woman point a gun at him and automatically tackle him instead of the woman with the gun. It all feels horribly forced and awkward.

In Beta unit it’s a bit better, it makes sense that you’d read your emails and that that wouldn’t have any obvious consequences, Victoria not talking to you is a character building moment, great. Then Michael comes and sure you don’t get any choices once again, but it makes more sense that you’d do what he says since he’s your superior. The tackling thing is still rather odd since while you’ve known him for a little longer it’s still only been a few hours, and since you’re in beta team your character probably isn’t really that physically active.

The railroading wouldn’t be quite as big of a problem i it were more subtly done. I could tell I was being railroaded on my first play through which is a problem.

Just thought of a couple of characters:
Name: Aizen Leonard

Appearance: Tall, around 25-35 years of age. Silver hair, brown eyes. (I’ll leave the physical discription to you).

Personality: Kind to everyone, inteligent, and very self sacrificing. A father figure to all the younger members…on the surface. Under his warm and sweet demeanor is a cruel, cunning, minipulative mind. He only looks out for himself and his closest followers, and will kill a innocent if it serves his purposes.

Skills: Knows how to convince nearly anyone of anything. A master of the martial arts, and an expert marksman. He can take huge amounts of pain and phyical damage.

Backround: ??? That’s a secret…

Name: Srithican (or Srith, for short) Leonard

Appearance: (20 years of age. You fill out the rest)

Personality: An extremely sarcastic person, Srithican is not someone you want to annoy. Being the younger brother of Aizen, Shrith is manipulative (though not to the extreme that Aizen is), and changes tatics frequently to suit his needs. Unlike Aizen, however, the other members of the team know how minipulative he can be, but they usually just roll their eyes. He is dramatic, and gets bored quickly-sometimes he will save his opponent’s life just so he can beat him again; other times he will take advantage of their slightest weakness.

Skills: Has extensive knowlege of historical events, and frequently researches whatever he is getting into beforehand. He is an expert sniper, as well as an engineer.

Backround: Almost as unknown as Aizen’s. He knows Aizen’s true personality, as well as some of his plans. He acts as Aizen’s partner, but has his own plans as well.

…I sound like a geek.

Name: Jin Sakura

Appearance: One eye is red while other is Silver. Tall average build. (24 years old. meh to lazy to think of the rest)

Personality: Usually a quiet nerdy person but in combat he turns into a sadistic usually killing anyone that gets in his way. Most of the other members of alpha team avoid or ignore him. He can be somewhat unsociable and awkward at times.

Skills: An expert at close quarters combat, very skilled at using knives and swords. Although lacking in terms of using guns. Due to being a hybrid vampire he is very fast and can endure a lot of damage.

Background: Not known to many but before joining SRT he was attacked by a vampire during his childhood. Although he survived thanks to some nearby SRT members investigating he was turned into a hybrid vampire. He keeps it a secret from everyone and only a few people in the SRT know about him being a vampire.

Name:Lakota (Kota for short) Black

Appearance 18-20 Long Jet black hair yellow eyes he is half human and half fairy

Personality Calm and peaceful until some one bring up the fact that he is a halfbreed you can fill in the rest

Skill’s very smart can be very sneaky when need

Background: unknow

@Aznxa Heh… And I was worried about Ashley being a combat liability. :stuck_out_tongue:

@everyone

thanks for character ideas I’ll try and implement them into the story although some of the newer ideas may require tweaking to keep things as realistic as possible in this kind of story.

From now on I’ll state in an update whether a character has been added.

So are the whole spirit thing still in the game? To lazy to check back on other comments if you said you removed your guardian spirit thing.

Make sure you know how to filter out the not so good ideas from the good ones, believe it or not, as fabulous as we commenters are we are not infallible.

I too am curious about the status of the guardian spirits, as when they were available they seemed rather underdeveloped.

There will still be the syncing in the game. But am considering just having the one unnamed guardian spirit then will reveal more details as the game progresses.

You’ll hopefully see where I’m going with the complete update.

additional note:

In this universe halfbreeds are not possible, if someone has suggested a halfbreed please suggest an alternative background.

ANOTHER minor update.

I apologise for this but hopefully you’ll enjoy what is there.

good news should be I should be able to get the demo finished over the next two days.

link: http://nocturnalstillnesscog.webs.com/Unnatural/my%20game/index.html

So its an unnamed spirit and as you progress it evolves and gets more powerful pretty much? Oh then for the background for my halfbreed how about instead of being a halfbreed he is a full vampire but cant use his powers unless he is enraged or something? Ether that or he is just human but has a hate for vampires.

@Aznxa

Yeah at the start the spirit is unnamed and it evolves depending on your choices and you learn more and more about it.

Your character has been added by the way but you need to go to the Beta Unit to find him (not much of a scene but he gets a mention [look for J.Sakura] as one of the researchers in the unit.

Just read the story. Very soun story but, for me the begining did not draw me in. Felt like to much of being told the facts instead of discovery. Would have liked. more detail to the differnt class of the S.R.T. Plus felt rushed along. Giving a choice maybe to find out more detail. Good story look forward to more.

how bout in stead of the half breed that i said he just full fairy

I’ve been testing the alpha team first mission, and I found 2 errors.

It seems when Victor unloads his double barrel there is an error " Line 228: bad label alpha5c"

And when you shoot the person “line 225: Non-existent command ‘labek’”

@Lordirish

I’m hoping to add more information about Alpha Unit and Beta Unit as you work for them but I will consider adding a bit more information before you join them.

@Vampierkid222

I went ahead and made him full fairy and he also gets mention [again name only] in the Beta Unit path

@Colonel_Sanders

fixed those errors I put *labek alpha5c instead of *label alpha5c (it caused both issues)

Played the update…WHY THE HECK IS THIS GAME SO ADDICTING? KEEP IT UP!

Not really enough new content added in the update to properly review. Keep the updates coming, I want to see where the plot’s going. Minor nitpick-you’ll have to be careful with the fairy thing else it come off as silly.

@13ventrm

I am disappointed in this update as I had hoped to have Episode one finished by Sunday, been busy with other things so I uploaded where I had gotten to so people could see how its progressing.

In this universe a fairy is unique in regards to the other kinds of monsters as it is the only ‘unnatural’ being that isn’t classed as dangerous. A fairy is basically a mortal born with high supernatural resistance that can be trained to control their supernatural aura.

***SPOILER***

The S.R.T believe that only females are capable of being fairies as they have only encountered females, the e-mail you can read is their first evidence that men can have fairy blood.

The PC character isn’t a fairy even though they will possess a similar ability eventually, but fairy blood will be involved in some way.

***SPOILER***