It is now official, sophia is my new favorite
Ultimata (Fantasy WIP)
Why did she punch him in the video?
It doesnāt make any sense to punch someone who compliments you. Iād punch her back if I was him
Sheās a tsundere, thus having difficulties to express her feelings towards him that is why she punches him (20 punching characters)
Still I donāt really like that violence, especially if someone is taking it and does nothing and people think itās funny.
He should just punch her once in defense and she wonāt attack him again if she knew sheād get hit back.
I think the idea that a girl can punch a boy and itās funny and he canāt hit her back is really bad. Especially in anime when they do it a lot.
Is there an updated link available? I saw that almost a month ago you said you would post one.
I know what you mean, yet she wouldnāt do this if she doesnāt care aboit him, in fact she loves him, but he doesnāt seem to get it in her eyes, then she just hets mad and you know the rest
There are currently two different links, though both contain the same part of the wip
I know what I said and Iām sorry that I couldnāt keep my word. There are some scenes which simply wonāt play out the way I imagined them and I already rewrote these scenes several times. Sadly, I do not know how long it will take me to get everything right, so right now I can only apologize for my false promises and hope that you arenāt too upset. However, I will try to give my best and will inform you about any new updates as soon as Iām done.
Thank you for your offer.
I could actually need a little help, especially in terms of spelling or grammatical errors. Would it be ok for you (once I rewrote these last scenes one last time) if I send you the updated demo first and you would look over it? Of Course I would also tell you which scenes were more problematic for me.
All in all, the opinion of a outsider would be quite welcome. Maybe you would even have some suggestions of how I could improve certain scenes or maybe point out some spelling errors. On this way I could correct most Errors before I post the demo here in this thread. Of course, only if you want to.
Is there anyone else who would like to read the new demo before I officially post it, to help me with finding possible errors or by giving me feedback on some complicated scenes (basically like a small Beta Test)?
Iād like to help too, but am probably without internet for the weekend. So the earliest I could give feedback would be monday. As you probably guessed Iām not native in english, so chances are iāll miss some grammatical or spelling errors. But if youāll have me, Iām happy to help.
Donāt worry, Iām glad about every kind of help.
Also, I still have to rewrite the few complicated scenes I was talking about one last time before I will send you the link, which might still take a few days. So, you donāt have to worry about your missing internet.
Thank you for your offered help @Noah, @Aleksa100, @Frogs, @Orchid, @ebacyes, @Terrell_Williams and @lokidemon007. As soon as I have corrected the few remaining complicated scenes, I will send each of you the link with the updated demo.