The Followers (Revived!) - Help testing chapter 3 (Updated 20/10/16)


#1

Updated 20/10/16

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Hello COG forum users! For those that don’t know me I am Maxmansung, intermitant user of these forums. I’ve been pretty inactive for the past half year or so working on a university project but now I’m back and most likely annoying you in your WIP ideas (sorry…)

Now my project is back on track and I need your help -

I’m currently working on a game in ChoiceScript called The Followers and would really appreciate some help with feedback. The game itself will most likely span 160,000 words overall.

Updated link (now on Dashingdon):
https://dashingdon.com/go/861

The game is now around 75,000 words in length and has multiple branches that you can head down although I don’t know how many people will find. I would be interested in running a poll to see what ending people got on their first playthrough.

Please let me know what you think, criticism is greatly appreciated so please don’t be afraid.

Those that make it to the end of the main part, I need your help checking half of the final half of chapter 3 (the branches mean that the game expands a lot in that chapter)

[details=Old Poll]

[poll]

  • Nature Spirit
  • Ancestor Spirit
  • Demons
  • Nothing
  • Shadows (very difficult)
    [/poll][/details]

Best WIPs - 2015
Ideas for Deities/Monsters
#2

Everyone is here to read games, so please feel free to share.

Here are some instructions on using Dropbox written by Andy Why. Also I encourage you to visit the wikia:
How to set up your game in Dropbox.

First, download Dropbox.
https://www.dropbox.com/1

Now, follow this link to create a public folder.
Note: Don’t create a public folder manually. If you did already, rename it to something else before clicking the link.
https://www.dropbox.com/enable_public_folder7

Finally, copy your web folder to the newly created public folder. That’s it! Carry on writing your book from it’s new location.

Sharing your game:
To let other people play your game, find your index.html file (public/web/mygame/index.html)

Right-click the file and find the option ‘copy public link’. This may be listed separately, or might be hidden in a ‘dropbox’ sub menu. Either way, left-click it.

Now, open a browser and paste the weblink. Your game will begin. Alternatively, you can paste the link in an email to send to a friend.


#4

Nope doesn’t work all it says that its either moved or deleted. And heck ya ill be interested to your story, I’m open to read anyone’s story and help them critique it. :stuck_out_tongue:


#5

Thats what I keep finding. I have reposted the dropbox links with but neither of them work still.

I dont know if anyone else has encountered these issue and can help?


#6

I have no experience with dropbox sry :frowning: wish I could help. I could probably ask someone…


#7

Appologies, I have uncovered the reason dropbox is not working as JumD helpfully pointed out. I need to start paying for the service.

I will now sign-up for a month trial to get some feedback on the current progress as it seems the easiest method.

Thank- you for all your help, I will post a link when it is working


#8

Ahh sucks you have to pay for dropbox though… Good luck with everything and ill be here waiting for the demo :slight_smile:


#9

Yup i was there before

that should help you, only problem you won’t be able to use pictures


#11

Sooo… having now played through the game a few times since its posted I’ve noticed a few spelling mistakes, a few grammar errors but mostly that the first few pages arent as interesting as they need to be and some pages don’t flow very well…

Maybe it’s a bit early for playtesting but hopefully will be able to give me an idea of if the concept is even worth the effort


#12

I find the concept intriguing. The fact that you start out as, well a cloud of dust is pretty cool, which only adds on to the fact that you can progress on becoming a greater being(don’t know if that’s the correct word for it, but oh well).

It’s a refreshing idea… I will make sure to follow this WIP as it progresses.


#13

Thanks for your response. That’s an interesting point about the terminology used for “god”. It may be better for me to use a term like “Supreme being” or “higher power” possibly.

I’m glad you enjoyed the concept. Any major issues you’ve found with the current structure or style?


#14

I liked the idea even before playing, and even more now that I got “Followers believe there is nothing beyond this life”.

I’m intrigued how the game will shape up, need to keep a close watch.


#15

I chose to be attached to the floating wood, and got a bit confused. Is the first human you meet on the boat, or in the water, and why are they shot with an arrow? Also, after I get them to believe in me, they said it said they were separated from a hunting party. At sea?


#16

“Sitting by your stream you watch as the small animals pass by. A stream is an interesting place to see such things and helps slow the madness that all spirits eventually succumb to.”

Well that escalated quickly.


#17

:open_mouth: Finally… You have no idea… I’ve been waiting 2 years for a Choice of Gods game to come out. Ever since the poll they had where they asked the next game we would want to see. And now? It’s here. :’) Thank you my friend… Thank you.


#18

“Humans are not like Gods, they have cannot comprehend your existence. However you can benefit from each other, giving each other a purpose.”

They have cannot should probably be just they cannot.


#19

Played the demo… it is very interesting and original too. The writing is spot on and as a reader it actually drew me in. I would love to see this demo released, so good luck ill be waiting for an update :slight_smile:


#20

I’m modeling my spirit off the Emperor of Mankind. :slight_smile:


#21

I don’t have any constructive criticism, I just wish to say that was fun!
I got sad when I came to the end.


#22

I really like this so far! Really interesting and a unique idea. I’d love to read more.