@Cat_Raider aha okey got ya 
I have to say this game is fantastic so far. It’s nice to watch the MC grow up for a change while the story is still very fluid. If I may ask how many years of he MC life is this going to cover?
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Also add me to that Logan bandwagon, but I’m going to wait until I know what is what to declare my absolute favorite. <3
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@honeymichie
Great! I also saw that around the beginning it said “Where did you find this children?” I think you meant ‘these’.
Update: Added a little portion for phase four.
Yup, I did use the frog. @Aera I’m glad I choose you as my partner since you have the weirdest ideas that seem to get people’s attention.
When summer comes I shall try the game. @anon4518890
@JTAL I knew I should have trusted my evil partner to create hilarious scenes.
@Pace675 I’ll correct the word errors them eventually, but my goal is to write, write, and write without bothering about too much about the grammar (comma, full stop points, etc.) as everything is still basically a draft point, but if it’s a spelling or a wording error then I need to have it fixed asap. Glad you’re having fun with the game.
We won’t know until we get there lols @GloriaRose
@Lubu343 Do have fun playing the game.
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@anon48296871 Lols the evil forces are strong! Wow, a ten year old can already make out? At that age the only thing I cared about is pokemon and ice cream.
Praise me more to motivate this lazy frog to write lols. @Akira
Huh? Elder Frida? @Rebelgirl yes I think so, but there is an update so it could get a little longer than seeing Elder Frida.
@Chriswa27 Yup, I hope to write more of course.
My goal for now is until forty or fifty of age. @AngelOfTheBroken
I think that is fixed at the update? I think @lightdrago3
@honeymichie Yep and thats why I am a dreamer Rolf!
loving the new content by the way 
Do please keep writing! This is a very interesting game and I like how it’s going.
Amazing WIP! I am soooo keeping tabs on this thread!
“Have you seen one?” You muttered, gripping the Grey reins. “A draconis I mean.”
gripping Grey’s reigns?
“Are all the drago sol marks look the same?”
Do?
“Of course Rubar is too daft that I might reconsider.”
so daft?
“Can they make it rain?”
I lol’ed.
Yoooo i really like this wip so far!
gotta couple things to discuss though:
- you keep changing tenses when describing something! earliest exemple is
"The man is wearing some light armour, his scabbard is strapped to his back and a broad sword can be easily seen. The man kept on pulling the arm of the crying boy. "
try sticking to one tense, otherwise your writing voice comes across as weird - when you’re cleaning the bathroom, "“To think it was only us who clean the bathrooms.” Logan gestured" instead of “who cleaned up” or “who cleaned”
- when you come back from cleaning the house, and you say “so that was to distract me?” first line “We had to destruct you to prepare the surprise.” instead of distract.
- when talking about other races, and exhausting all other options (meaning we’d already talked about all other races except shepians) i got this: "Beatrice raised her hand and stood with an air of royalty. “What are dergkans and nereids?”
but anyway! i really like this so far, and i cast my hopeful RO vote either for an epic friendship/romance with Amber (or even set her up with Bastian), and maybe Yusef?
I’ll see once you introduce more characters lmao 
Hope to add more after we make the scenes. @GloriaRose 
I will do my best. @Greytrap1
Thank you @yagamikuuno thank you
@Beezlebub reins (a long, narrow strap attached at one end to a horse’s bit) is correct than reigns (hold royal office; rule as king or queen) But I’ll double check is the right code is there. Too daft (means he is very silly or stupid or foolish) 
@The_Rock_Whisperer yeah those are grammar issues that I’m skipping to progress the game. Else I’m bound to be stuck correcting things then getting everything into motion and I could just stop writing if I get stuck in one place. Of course I expect it to have those since I didn’t double check if what I wrote is even correct English? Spelling or a little wording error I’ll correct it, but grammars? Point them out and if I have free time then I’ll correct them. The fourth question could be a bug? I’ll ask my partner about that. Oh, Amber and Yusef can’t be an item because they are siblings. 
Oh yeah i remember writing distract but not destruct? I’ll double check that part asap.
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This reads better if you drop “on” thus: The man kept pulling the arm of the crying boy.
Hmm, if this is after you finished cleaning then “who cleaned” is correct.
@honeymichie lol Amber/yusef? yeah that’d be weird! I was actually saying MC/Yusef
@LordOfLA thanks for correcting my corrections! english isnt actually my first language so i’m not really qualified lmao
Oh, I’ll fix those. Thanks for the suggestion. @LordOfLA
@The_Rock_Whisperer Ohohoho 
sorry I assumed you meant Amber and Yusef lols. Bah, no worry about English since it’s also not my native language as well, but I think my English is passable to be understood. I be more puzzled if English is someone’s native language and they have multiple grammar or wording mistakes cuz that would be weird? 
I’m almost done with writing phase 4, will announce when I post the update. Night people 
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Good luck in everything <3
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Welp, looks like most everyone is on the Logan bandwagon. +Is stuck in the Bastian Buss+
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I like them both, Bastian and Logan, but also Rubar. I do hope MC gets to have a love battle with Phel for his affections… when MC is old enough, of course. Though Rubar may be oblivious to it all…
Also, don’t know if someone else told you, but I may have found a script error with Ghular in the classroom. My MC learned about Ghular and when at the hand raising part for it, they knew the answer and thus raised their hand, but after selecting that option, it took me to the screen where you make up an answer instead.
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I agree ^^ I just hope that if that does become a possibility we could also romance Phel…But generally speaking I think I’d be happy no matter the ROs.