The only feeling that held you were the sting of tears in your eyes. then finally the hot,salty feeling of the tears coming down your eyes. Your greatest fear was realized a life without your parents.Maybe if you went out their you would be with them right now. As you sat in the police car with the golden box in your hand. You opened the box to reveal a drummer boy with the words “Christmas time” written at the bottom. Ok so space between hot, and salty, no the in the tears, coming from your eyes not coming down your eyes. Comma after realized space between parent. And Maybe, out there not their.
You been taken a beating since you got here and its time for it to stop. You have to win for the respect and dignity. You have to win.The biggest kid in the orphanage Billy, was next to fight.He walks up to you and laughingly says “I’m going to mess you up, kid. You could leave now you know”.You spit in his face.“Well have it your way” he says after wiping the dry sod of his face.He throws a strong left hand at you. Space between face. And He, you have been taking a beating, space between win. And the, orphanage has a comma after it, space between fight. And He comma after says, space between know". And You, space vetween face. And He
You push his fat arm to the left.Almost simultaneously swing your right arm all the way back and hit his face with brute, blunt force. Billy’s head sudden jerks back with the rest of his body to follow.His blood and tooth coming out mid-air.Billy hits the ground with a thump. Left. And almost need space, you before almost, suddenly not sudden, comma after back, follow. And His need space, air. And Billy need space
You wipe the dry blood of your face You look at the vividly bright sky. You would kill to come out of the cramp space to the warm inviting sun.You hear your name being called over and over it must be Mick. He yells… off not of, face needs a period after it, spave between sun. And You, both overs needs commas after them
"Josh there’s a guy downstairs he wants to see you " he said almost enthusiastically.You bring your battered body down the old, wooden stairs. After name it needs a comma, says not said, enthusiastically. And You need space
He whispered in your ear “hey Josh I like the way you beat that kid to a pulp. Here’s the deal I’ll take you in and you will fight for me.” You nod in an agreed silence. Comma after ear
You open the old rusty fridge to find a container of spoiled milk. Comma after old
Ok… so there are WAY too many spelling and grammar errors email me your stuff and ill edit it later this weekend ok? Email: WiReDcHiMpAnZeE At gmail dot com
Maybe sooner than this weekend
thank you grammar isn’t my strong suit t includes woman but it is a lot it includes woman coding too
K got it ill work on it later possibly tommorow
Ill probably work most of it on my birthday, lol
Cake check
soda check
computer coding for hours on end check
Mmmm, cake.
Dont work on your birthday it should be a time for family not by a computer.
Nah my family isnt even around half the time and im estranged to half of them, like my brother
Plus i work best on fridays
I know right , in school all day get inspiration to draw, get home all I want to do is work but it’s the weekend and your board go figure
Got a good chunk dpne today, made ALOT of corrections… so far so good
Hey separate the" a "and the "lot "right now that’s why there are so many corrections