The people want Gil to call someone a mongrel atleast once.
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First off, may I say that I love the concept of your story. I am always a sucker for stories with a small band heroes standing as a thin line between the world and chaos. I enjoy the variety between the characters and I see that they appear to be well fleshed out so far. If I had a complaint, and I believe it has been mentioned before, is the length and detail of sone of the writing. I appreciate the color and detail you put into your writing, but there are times that I feel I am reading a narrative story instead of interactive fiction. I enjoy being part of the story, making decisions that impact the course of the story. There are several pirtions of the story where there are 3-4 long pages with no input of any kind from the mc. I just find, for me, that it distracts from the purpise of IF. I am not asking for it all to be one paragraph pages with choice on each page, but I think it would help the experience to break up the long pages and add some more, impactful choices for the reader. As I said, I do live the story and characters and I am looking forward to seeing where it all goes from here.
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@Dahariel Lmao! Maybe he will.
@swilson50125 Thanks for the input. I appreciate it.
Also, an update will drop within the next three days. It should be around 30K words.
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I may have added a few stats from the cheat system after dying onceš
Me & death definitely gonna get a long in the future
Very much enjoyed the story so far. And definitely looking forward to more.
Well anyway Iām gonna give this a few more runs.
Keep up the great work
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my brain is buzzing I am so excited to play this but I think I need to take a few laps around the house first I am a GIANT fan of time travel so I think this game is what Iāve been looking for for the past 10 years awzesxrdyctfvgjybhkjn youāre a magician and you read my mind to make the best game havenāt started playing yet but 10/10
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@ChaosBringerXV Thanks for playing and the screenshot. Balancing is the most arduous part for me. May I ask if was male or female?
@Greytrap1 Thanks. Hope you like it. An update should drop within the next few days, and it has a bit of what can be considered a first taste of time travel.
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I didnāt even notice the update. Thanks for updating our chill Death. Also I appreciated the fact now the Mc can act indifferent. I wonder if dying and meeting Death has any long term effects later. Like Death can meet us in the living world if we died once later in the story or someone notices the mc has been resetting the world like Undertale characters do.
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Male MC.
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I found a bug incase it hasnāt been reported yet? A loop if u will? After encountering death and having my stats increase by 3 I then proceeded next and been brought back to town hawthorne where everything seems a miss convo repeats here, that been said its good premise but I canāt seem to form a bond with the characters due to the dialogues seemed one sided ā¦ 
its like im reading a book and the choices doesnāt really affect much but donāt worry I think your learning quite fast 
keep going!
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@Christopher_Bull Yes, it is possible to meet Death outside of the āusual settingā eventually. Thanks!
@ChaosBringerXV Got it. Thanks!
@SpanishBrEaD Thanks for the feedback, unfortunately, the loop has to stay otherwise the amount of writing Iāll have to do for every time the MC dies is unfeasible.
Update Notes: 04 Oct 2023
The first half of Chapter 3 is out. (32000 word count). Total Word Count: 140,000 +
Since I have most of the main body of the story written, my aim is to update every 15 days. Hopefully I can keep up the pace with the edits and the bugs while incorporating feedbacks.
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The save feature isnāt functional.
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chapter_3 line 1136: It is illegal to fall out of a *choice statement; you must *goto or *finish before the end of the indented block.
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It should be fixed.
Same. It should be fixed now.
Thanks for the reports.
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Thanks! I appreciate it.
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Update Notes: 04 Oct 2023
Added a scene with Aditi I had missed earlier. That brings the word count to 144,000.
Also, anyone who can deduce the identity of Lydia Constantine and Callum gets a prize. The prize is my eternal respect. XD
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Thanks for the report. Itās close to the end. I had actually forgotten to upload the new startup file. It should be fixed now.
oh my god
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Lmao! That might be the right thing to feel.
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Afraid? Hell no.
I want that power, I had too much fun smacking ancient Sumer around.
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