I have been playing COG for a long time and now I am thinking of making my own game.
Your Father is Lord of a small town Haven in Kingdom Eastvalley in continent Midtsiden. War is coming for Haven and the events that will come with it will lead mc to become a ruler of Midtsiden.
Updates
17 Dec
Added conversation with father, mother and all council members.
Fixed some typos.
23 Dec
Added a scene where you could select in which skill you are good.
Added new skill Knowledge
Added a new option outside the wall scene where you could choose a book reading too.
Added a new unit who good with swords
Added reaction option with father scene in the female side.
made a few corrections here and there.
10 Feb
Added the first scene of chapter 1.
Added character description for all characters in the stats screen
It is my request to every reader that please from now on read both the male and female part. There is not much difference in the prologue but chapter 1 is going to be completely different for both parts.
If you guys have any suggestion or If you feel about some things that should be or shouldn’t be in the story then please tell me about them and if any typo, spelling mistakes and bug you find during the game then please tell me about it.
I honestly liked the little bit you had! Your writing skills are not bad at all and I saw only a few grammatical errors. I love the world building and how you wrote the descriptions for the MC. Overall not bad and I wish you good luck!
It is in an early stage, but I enjoyed it. I liked how your twin’s gender changes depending on which one you choose, and the peaceful interaction we have with them. I really liked how we get to choose to have Haven be known for farming and even have a plant sigil on the banner!
Regarding your writing, there are grammar and spelling errors, but right now I would just break up the first page’s paragraph. I would also change the wording of the hair color selection so that we know in advance that we’re choosing our hair color.
I also found these errors:
When choosing a custom sigil:
prologue line 551: increasing indent not allowed, expected 2 was 3
When choosing a custom banner color:
prologue line 627: increasing indent not allowed, expected 2 was 3
When choosing a custom family name:
prologue line 654: increasing indent not allowed, expected 2 was 3
Your work has its potential. Idk if it’s just me, but I felt the intro was rushed, but then again it’s still new so im looking forward to see more of your work.
hey man great story so far cant wait for you to see more of it my only thing i sorta wondered about was these choices how come theres two options about archers can you add one abourt swords like home to the best sword academy or something where there the best at sword play idk up to you whether you do or not
Like the mc will have a build up of character (like an interaction with the mc’s father and mother or as a family before the journey of mc tgt with its father towards the capital)
