Final Sunset (E-Sports, Slice of Life, 20k WIP)

Join a professional Battle Royale-FPS team, get bullied on the internet and earn enough money to convince your parents that you aren’t a failure (Male-locked, female ROs).

What is this?

This is a game that (potenially) will show you the journey of a young man who got a chance to make it in professional e-Sports. You will compete in Matches/Tournaments (Battle Royale-style, with random loot and wanky, bugged gameplay) and grow your online fame while building relationships (friendly, hostile, and forbidden) with your teammates, fans, family and other acquitainces.

The game features unfiltered conversations of early-20s people (lots of roasting, sex talk and mom jokes), russian swear words and random shooting mechanics.

Who is this for?

No idea. I’ve written it and thought it was a shame to put this into my already full trash folder.

ROs
  • Childhood/Current BFF (everyone loves those!). Attractive ex-athlete blonde with a cheerful, extroverted personality. Only problem? She’s already got a boyfriend.
  • Team Owner. A filthy rich businesswoman eleven years your senior. Enough said.
  • ??? (secret for now)
When will this update?

No idea. I won’t promise to finish this or post regular updates like I do with PoMA. In fact, I may just abandon it and start writing something else. I’m mainly posting this now to see if there is any interest in a concept like this.

Demo (20k words)

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A game truly meant to represent the most oppressed and down trodden in society…gamers

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He’s done it again! My BOI Niki is gonna cook again!

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sad is male locked so nothing for me, wish you the best for the wip

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This RO seems like a really bad idea with a huge potential for abuse of power. I know this is fiction and you might write it delicately enough and knowing all the red flags but it annoys/squicks me too much. (If you are unsure why this is such a huge deal check some of the posts on askamanager.org)

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typos and some bugs


‘mouth’ should probably be ‘mouse’

competitive ‘scene’?

have ‘been’ together

Then maybe ‘you’ need to stop

‘yebok’ with an English toggle on

would be cool to have an option here, maybe have the same “punch him” choice which then leads to the rest of ride in silence?

A’N’drei

‘kill you’ repeats
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this check is bugged, I don’t think any weapons are effective for it
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‘Blyat’ with English toggle on

don’t kno if this can be fixed, but having a shotgun in your inventroy (not as a first weapon) won’t let you use the first option, even after swapping to it

You already know my opinion on it, random loot is a bit funky but you get enough chances to get stuff to win, and if you want everything, just save scum.
I dunno how the game will/would look in the future with only 3 main stats though. I will guess Condition and/or Proficiencies will play a big role in it.
My suggestions atm are to add some sort of Codex (just for it to be there I guess) and add something to the “game”'s stats menu, seeing weapon attachments, maybe be able to see the other stats menu, stuff like that.
will maaaybe update comment if I can come up with something smart to say.

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Cant be worse than like already a shit ton of other IF Ros that have been written, like WFTW literally having a half sister RO.

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Can I bully ppl? I would love to be a gremlin, or an asshole. Hell, make me a villain. Being a toxic asshole is like 90% of internet culture and 99% of gaming culture, I should be able to be one.

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I don’t know that abbreviation but I am guessing it is some sort of fantasy-flavour? That kind of RO is messed up, too, IMO, but I just wanted to give the notice because this is more real-life, a situation that you, the reader, could someday find yourself in. (being interested in someone above you in the work-hiarchy and potentially having it be reciprocated. It has consequences.)

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Ah yes, the annual masterpiece by Nicky

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In the wise words of a certain dnd character, “just because there’s a goalie, doesn’t mean you can’t score”

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Also forgot you were Russian (I think, what country were you from that banned homosexuality and made so you had to abandon the gay routes in PoMA?)

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Can the orientation of the screen be changed on mobile?

I mean, this is a fictional story. Some people like the “power imbalance” trope, doesn’t mean they don’t understand the real-life consequences. I honestly see no problem if the MC is a consenting adult in a story. There are stories where we can be with someone who has a wife/husband. Doesn’t mean we don’t understand the real life implications of doing that.

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Defiled Hearts: The Barbarian gives you the option to romance the man who murders your father and sells your siblings into slavery. Infamous gives you the option to romance the functioning alcoholic who is a judge on a competition reality TV show, who rigged it so you got on said show, and is constantly putting your band’s reputation at risk. This here is small potatoes in comparison.

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So when the customization will be added I want to make my character into a neanderthal

I dont like the bff i was atracted to how she was described and her personality but immediately was turned off by how toxic she is. She defends the scum bf like crazy but i was gone still try but after meeting scum and what he did and after i socked his jaw she gets mad at me then thats when i was over her. Like bro you cant see how much of a scumbag he his??? I wanted to end the friendship because your bringing toxic ppl in my life and i dont like that. Hope the other ro is a girl gamer in our scool.
Like a new transfer student that way she can start to feel how scum is getting in the way of someone who actually cares for her. And can we get some height choices :sob:

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Me too and also I like to punch this scumbag again or even beat the shit out of him for talking shit because I love how he was startled when we punched him

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Yes. Well, eventually. There’s one bullish option rn (telling people ‘go cry’ when you shoot them in the back and getting raged at for it).

Should be. Does it only launch in horizontal?

Will be able to, quite soon. But yeah, her path is intended to be toxic/a bit messed up.

Next update probs.

I mean, even if the ‘power abuse’ route was what I was going for (it isn’t; MC will have to be the pursuer in this one), isn’t it still quite light in comparison to what’s out there? PoMA has Mei who poisons you, chains you in a dungeon and carves you up for experiments, not to mention all the other toxic ROs. The only problem can be is that the setting now is more realistic? But I think it will be fine

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Ohh i see if we go the ro route wit her there should be another ro to make her unconsciously jealous nd annoyed the mc has another woman gravitating around him and is showing interest in mc . And hope we get the option to go to gym sometimes because that weak punch even hurt my feelings :sob: like damn mc at least some pushups.:joy:

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