should be fixed now!
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Ngl mostly alright i didnt see any major speeling errors or anything like that so thats good. I will say seeing the restaurant called la table made me laugh a little bit
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thank you!! yes i thought it would be a little funny … it’s supposed to be one of those like “ultra modern” places that mostly exist to take pictures at, if u know what i mean. i thought La Table was so funny because it’s like “ooh it’s french” but really it’s just like…. “the table.” anyways yes thank you hahahah!
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Cool. I love being a homewrecker. This now my favorite pastime
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HAHAHAHAHA no sooo true
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Great storytelling! I quite liked the range of choices, and Burns was a fun character.
I will say that the couple were so strange though. Honestly, I can’t see my fluffy sunshine MC chasing either (or both) of them after all that weird staring and glaring going on, I hate feeling like the butt of the joke and you captured that well. Maybe it’s because she turned up half an hour late? But it was just so awkward and painful. I genuinely felt bad for her! It was like the ghost of my old days with my touchy-feely business bro boss was haunting me lol
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this is a good note; they def need to be alluring as much as they are like a little creepy—i might need to revise going forward to show the better parts of their personalities! thank you so much though and i’m glad you enjoyed it 
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Hi! I tried to revise this a little bit if you’re open to trying the demo again I’d love to hear what you think—no pressure though of course
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Happens even if you’re not late, just so you know. I played the workday with a few different things. If there’s supposed to be variation there, it’s not always showing.
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just did a little revision on this too to add a bit more variation! to be fair, more of the lyonses actual personalities will shine in ch. 1 and onwards, but i def want their reactions to MC initially to vary depending on how they show up to work (late, on time, sweaty or clean, etc.). thank you for this!!
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first free content patreon poll is live
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Loved the update! Excited for more!
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thank you!
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Ngl, when I got the ‘take care of you’ bit plus all the charm/ flirting, my first thought was that we’re gonna be a sugar baby lol
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ur not far off …. there will be a bit more nuance and complication BUT ur on the right track for sure
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Okay the champagne suited more silent husband does come across as really cute, enough at least for my mc to do the foolish thing and look them up again, so consider my mc successfully hooked.
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AHHH i’m so glad you liked N!! they’re a very special character. i think you’ll enjoy them as they start to develop more too
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I had a feeling this is about selling drugs or something illegal. And there is already a crack on the marriage between the two. The mc was trying to get away when T started staring at their spouse coldly when N started complimenting their name.
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who can say!! mwahahaha only time will tell
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I made a rule for myself to keep my current list of WIPs I follow exactly where it is because I didn’t want to juggle keeping up with any more… but the description of this one was so enticing and up my alley that it was bugging for me for days. I had to break my rule and check it out! It did not disappoint. There’s a certain “bounciness” to the way you write that I genuinely felt the MC flittering from this place to that in such an engaging and lively way. And the characters are a breath of fresh air. Thank you for sharing and I can’t wait to see where you go with this
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