dint happen to me try again ???!!!
@irule9344 It’s good and has potential but I felt it was a little rushed, So if I were you I would take to re-read it and see if you can add anymore detail. I have one idea though:
When the mother hugs you, instead of rushing through the character custom, you could do this:
'Your mother hugs you.Her scent and warmth reminding you of a relaxed,less stormed filled time. You remember when you were little you:
Choice 1
Choice 2
Choice 3
Either way good potential and keep up good work.
thnx
Hello, just found this. It’s not bad, but feels rather rushed. Also, somewhat bulky as in the amount of text in some of the paragraphs. It looks like it could be really good!
when you choose the female option your mother still calls you a guy at times
I think I rule split so why don’t they close this?
Many many many missing capital letters.
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Please don’t bump seven year old threads.
@irule9344 if you ever want this opened again, you can message me or any moderator or leader to do so.