I still absolutely love this game.
@Havenstone Thank you for adding: the option to teach the Band to read, the summer achievements, the choice of what to do with phials of aetherial blood, and the option to give wealth to the yeomanry at the end of Chapter 2. The implementation of the literacy training did an excellent job of realistically dealing with being in the wilderness. The Cut the Line achievement is not triggering when I destroy the Phalangite supply caravan. Will Theurge-Bane be a possible cognomen in the sequels? I can imagine the rebellion liking that one.
I also would prefer the numbers instead of words.
Gorbel licks his lips. “Well and good. Come when you…” He pauses. “Come on the eighthth week of winter. I’ll have the warehouse space then, and my guards will be back from a trip to Aekos.”
A spelling error probably related to the switch away from numbers.
At the moment, of the band’s six mules, one are reserved for the sick. You change that to a total of:
Subject-verb agreement issue. If needed, it could maybe be avoided by saying “…of the band’s # mules, the sick have reserved #”
Zvad loses one outlaws on his raid of a noble House’s winter barn.
Another subject-verb agreement case.
When the MC convinces the Archetelone’s guards to defect, even an openly skeptical MC talks about the rebellion being the will of the Angels.
Hurrying into one of the larger caverns, you find your followers on the verge of a rout. Only Kalt seems to be keeping them from scattering to the winds. He grips the shoulder of one wavering bandit and speaks in a voice loud and cutting enough to be heard over the babble. “Run, and you die. They’ll pick you off one by one. And then they’ll take the elders and children. Your only hope is to stand with me—here, together, now!”
My MC’s Band had chosen to disperse and all of the children were already gone.
Before Breden questioned you that first time by the river, you hadn’t realized how deep your rage went. Now it rushed back in full force, familiar and glorious. “You think I fear a helot rebellion?” you demanded, your voice harsh to your own ears. “I want to see the Hegemony burn, Breden. What the Pelematou just did to Poric—it was an abomination. It has to be stopped. And no, ‘my kind’ aren’t going to do it. But maybe your kind will.”
“Will we now, Alya?” Breden said softly.
“Xthonos, I hope so! And I swear I’ll do whatever I can to help.”
Even a skeptical MC swears by Xthonos instead of Rhupos here. I am grateful that the other instances of that happening have been fixed from what I’ve seen.
I like that noble MCs now have the option to plunder the noble houses at the Fourth Harrowing. If a noble MC does plunder the noble houses at the Fourth Harrowing and if the MC chooses to keep both family blades, then I think something should maybe be said at the end of Chapter 4 about the fate of the father’s blade.
On the subject of who to suspect during the food poisoning in Chapter 4, given that the MC is told that the MC’s father is not eating, that moves the MC’s father to at least the top 3 list of my MC’s suspects in the whole Band. He is certainly spiteful enough to try to poison everyone.