Yes, Abyss asked for telekinesis earlier in the thread. I felt like it’s overly used and I didn’t feel inspired to write a story with telekinesis options. This is also why I have the password for an extra two esp types. I also plan to use different passwords to unlock other things but that’s for planning later.
There is a character in the story who uses telekinesis, Narita, but she’s not a competent user.
Okay, thanks for clarifying that for me. I was really confused as to why a game with mental abilities didn’t include telekinesis, but I understand your reasoning and I can’t wait for the new unlockable things. Thanks again.
Hi there, have not had a chance to read far, not sure if you want this sort of feedback but just took a few notes as I was reading. Hope it’s helpful (if you don’t want this sort of stuff just let me know though).
Only five percent of the Earths (Missing apostrophy)
Truth or lies. Also your (should be you’re)
force yourself into someone’s mind yet as you they can. (mind yet, as they can)
Your skills right now do not enable you to use any telepathy without physical contact; skin to skin, not through clothing.(A little awkward? Maybe something like- Your current skill level only allows the use of telepathy via skin to skin contact. Clothing will block your abilities)
A common advantage of a trained ESP user, is (needs , )
However the users must never attempt to initiate this with a much stronger ESP user as it will cause unbelievable pain to the weaker user.(a bit awkward?- Maybe something like "An important consideration is that a weaker ESP user should never attempt to initiate telepathic contact with a stronger individual, as this will result in unbearable pain to the lesser talent)
Today she is supervising you removing dust from the walls, floors “and” the hand made wooden furniture your grandfather made. (replace , with and)
Your room has no door, your father removed it when you first made this your room. (Why? if it’s important, maybe comment why he removed it otherwise just say the room has no door)
Your bed is located by the wall next to the opening to your room. It’s a single bed with a pull out draw which you use to store clothes, toys and books in separate compartments.
(Maybe compress to- A single bed with a pull out drawer for storing your clothes, toys and books, is located against the closest wall.)
You smell something heavenly wafer (waft)
You’re careful to move slowly and silently. So much that a normal walk to the living room from your bed room only takes about a minute. It’s taken you roughly 10 minutes to get near enough to to see. (Maybe rephase? To move silently, your progress is careful and painfully slow, causing what should have been a minute walk from your position to the living room, to take ten times that. Finally you creep near enough to see)
“Are you eavesdropping Jalissa!” she accuses. (Should be a ? I think)
he nods knowingly to you then turns to Aunty Marina. (either “knowingly to you, then” or “he gives you a knowing nod before turning back to Aunty Marina” maybe?)
Aunty Marina has also invited your cousin Sandra and her guest as well. (Sandra who has brought along her partner to the dinner as well- Maybe? I just originally read that as Sandra being another guest with your uncle being the first one rather than Sandra +1)
Besnik is a tanned man with dark red hair. His hair is tied up in a low ponytail near his neck. (Maybe condense to Besnik is a tanned man with dark red hair tied into a low ponytail against his neck).
Sandra finishes Besniks sentence all excited. (sentence excitedly)
birthday, thats your special day Jalissa <,> but I (needs comma)
He moves slowly over and gives her a hug. He shakes Besnik<’>s hand (needs ')
Jana is skilled with the bow. Although she didnt own one (Although she “doesn’t” own one)
Suddenly a large smashing sound (loud?)
Also, maybe some explanation as to why your friends would steal a knife to give to you as a present? Are they poor, bought it from someone unknowingly, theft is commonplace etc? (Not sure, this might be answered later in the book though?)
@Jacic You need to have a spoiler command for every paragraph for it to work.
Whoops sorry- will fix
Love the game but I don’t like how we only have 5 choices while I lobe the abilities others can use telekinesis and teleport makes are abilities seem a bit under powerd still a grate game tho
Hi everyone, thank you for your input. I’m sorry for not replying sooner. I’ve got the flu and haven’t had a lot of spare time to reply.
@chesternite no worries. Sometimes I feel like I can’t get my ideas written out fast enough and can’t wait to release them. I’ve got a list of things to write for the new unlock stuff but that wont be for a while. 
@Jacic Thank you for your feedback and taking the time to point put all those edits. 
I’ll take a look at those bits you mentioned. I haven’t done a read over to fix the prose yet and some parts could use some paraphrasing. (Only discovered those writing techniques during the CScomp this year).
@Ravenrebirth thanks. Yeah it’s only going to be five for a while, it’s taking a long time to write lots of different paths with the current type starters. I was going for an underpowered MC in comparison to the other esp users.
I’m still working on the next small update for task day (mentorship). 
Progress of late has been slow (RL issues). Hoping to knock out some paths today. Hopefully will update soon. Thanks all for your patience
Hello!
I just popped by to read your latest story and say thanks for playing my game.
The Gift: Uprising is well put together. Even though it has a few flaws, I was actively interested. I feel like my choices mattered. However, there are a few places I’d like to have a choice where one isn’t offered (I didn’t like that the boy got to steal my puzzle). The amount of choices you did allow me to make had me feel in control of the story, though, so that’s always a plus! Here’s to the next chapter!
Also, during the story I took a few notes. I decided to paste them down below if you’re interested in a player’s thought process while playing your game. Then again, maybe my mind doesn’t work like others. Haha.
Anyone who ventures down below, please note that there are spoilers - major ones, actually. Be sure to play this excellent game before continuing!
Intro
Comments: I love the incorporation of the password system!, but maybe the option to insert a password should come after “In the Beginning”
Grammar: “You decide your role in the uprising , or idly stand by and watch it happen.”
“Information on how the world came to be, current day jargon , and the bestiary can all be found in the stat menu.”
Centenary Birth Centre
Comments:
Awesome tension on the birth scene. It made me laugh at that girl. 
Interesting choice to not include an option for no gender. Then again, it probably wouldn’t make sense.
I chose the female gender and the name Layla Fawx. Very pretty names.
Perhaps there should be other choices besides “Clever, Merciful, Honest, Brave, Devious, and Perceptive”? Why can’t the parents be evil as well as kind? Haha.
I chose Clever and Perceptive, though.
Nice descriptive words. Paints pictures of the parents excellently.
Oh wow… I didn’t see that coming. Give up the newborn or go against orders? Ouch! Great tension, though
I want that patch! It sounds awesome!
I gave Layla up. I think she would have been forcibly taken and bad stats would have been inflicted otherwise.
“High-security science laboratory”? Sounds awesome!
Why is it counted that I had the mother abandon the child? I was looking out for her!
Not very subtle foreshadowing, but it’s nice to know that I’ll see my family again. Also – once again excellent descriptions in this scene. I can really feel the parents remorse. It’s beautiful.
Grammar: “The mother , exhausted , holds out her arms to receive her first born.”
Discover
Comments
Good depiction on how governments manages issues. The term “The Nuclear Massacre” made me chuckle.
What’s so bad about the people with physical mutations? Why are they forced to live a shunned life?
I chose to have the gift of Telepathy. It seems that it would allow you to shape the future by manipulating people, and psychometry would only really be helpful under certain circumstances,
Grammar:
“At the age of five , you learned about this horrible disease”
“In its aftermath , sixty-five percent of the population are born immune”
“Unluckily , ten percent of the babies born these days are dead on arrival (DOA).”
“You , however, have been born with Extra Sensory Powers (ESP) - otherwise commonly referred to as a gift ; only five percent of Earth’s current population is born gifted.”
“The information you gather from mind reading is only accurate half the time, as you’re not able to differentiate between a memory or thought / truth or lies”
“Your skills , right now , do not enable you to use any telepathy without physical contact - skin to skin, not through clothing.”
“However , the users must never attempt to initiate this with a much stronger ESP user . It will cause unbelievable pain to the weaker user.”
"This has its limits , though , and drains the user’s life force.”
Childhood Memories
Comments:
It’s probably best I don’t have any memories of my family. It would only sadden me.
It’s interesting that you capitalized “Black Coats” and named the medical scientists that in the first place. It’s as if they’re evil.
Why are boys and girls treated the same? Perhaps to prevent fights the Black Coats didn’t incorporate sexism.
It’s also interesting you put the children into white coats and that you are going for lack of personal identidy but the first name of each child is put on the front of their lab coats. Shouldn’t it be a number instead?
Poor test tube baby. Haha.
The punishment system is well set up. Strict, as it should be. The ones there all have capabilities to do well, if they don’t they should be punished.
Nice description and name on Astaroth. He seems likes he’s compensating for something. 
Why is Astraoth carrying spoiled food? Just for effect? Surely they can afford fresh food.
So the Black Coats disguise the orange liquid as an accent to a pool? Very clever – especially with children who have never seen something so extravagant.
Ms. Claude sounds rather malicious and arrogant. Lovely!
What makes the color Yellow significant? Hmmm…
I decide to place my pillows next to the Northerners. They don’t support slavery.
They welcome me openly! Awesome, I made a good choice.
That green haired boy sounds awesome.
Then again, curiosity did kill the cat.
A fellow group of readers? Very nice.
Are you sure “righteousness” is the right word? Avian seems like the type of guy to admire that story, not think of it as being holy. Then again, maybe he worships freedom.
Yeah, he’s definitely going to die. Or become a confused villain.
I understand making the puzzles difficult, but why would the Black Coats demote reading by keeping their books in poor condition?
Perhaps they aren’t as funded as I initially thought.
I chose to work on my puzzle-solving skills.
Oh, screw that kid. That was my puzzle!
Why was there not a choice to fight with the kid? I definitely would have stuck up for what was mine!
Then again… it did bring along a love interest. Hmm…
Excellent description on that girl. I’m in love!
Oh, but she’s been abused… interesting.
I’m glad I made a friend.
And no, I’m not playing in that pool. I’m not an idiot.
Shocking a person who’s already on the ground? Nice tactics!
Grammar:
“When you turned three years old , the Black Coats moved you into West Wing.”
“It didn’t matter if you are a boy or a girl - everyone is treated the same”
“From the age of five once a week you are subjected to tests. Once a week and from the age of five, you were subjected to tests.”
“It appears that they’ve decided to use shock sticks to motivate everyone to get a move on.”
“Perhaps one from the North, East, or South ; it depends on who they will set you with this time. Last fortnight it was South Wing.”
“You know they treat you coldly because you haven’t become close to any of the kids from West Wing.”
“In the far corner, there are four small tables littered with puzzles and books.”
“In the other there is a large, shaggy, green carpet”
“Then, Ms. Claude, head of the facility comes forward to stand before everyone.”
“"The flock knows freedom is theirs for the taking.”
“That’s it - I’ve had enough for one day. Time to eat! You think to yourself.”
Back in West Wing x
Comments:
Again – nice punishment system! Punish the ones who don’t comply is the only logical course of action.
Oh no! I wonder what’s grabbed me.
Nice onomatopoeia, though.
So I’m not special? Alrighty, then. Guess I gotta prove myself.
Maybe Sera cares for me?
Oh… maybe that pool was an activant of ESP? Oops…
4 Years Later
Comments: Since I am Telepathic, I decided to upgrade “ESP” once, “Endear” once, and “Intellect” once. I feel these skills will serve me well.
Extra Sensory Power: 43%
Endear: 19%
Intellect: 14%
Vigor: 10%
I thought that one girl was my friend? Oh well – guess I’m friendless.
At least I’m good at avoiding the Black Coats.
I’m not smart enough to read or write? Huh…
At least people listen to me and I can steal information.
“line_break line_break Although you lacked any real friends it’s safe to say that you became your own best friend.” It seems you tried to break the line, but you were unsuccessful. Might want to look into that.
Thank you for telling me that I would unsuccessfully avoid fights. Perhaps you should hide that information and let the reader figure it out?
I chose resting, haha.
I managed to keep my life force at 100.
The Offer
Comments:
I notice that you keep shifting in verb tense – from past to present. Is that intended?
Who’s this girl shocking me and acting with innuendoes? I’d like to get closer to her. Sounds like BDSM.
Why is she in such a hurry? Is she being a naught girl and going against orders?
I appreciate the colors you chose. The red door obviously signifies importance.
No way, girl. You aren’t shocking me again! Let’s see where my ESP gets me.
Bingo! Light switch activated!
Wait. So she trusts me, but she keeps shocking me? Definitely BDSM.
There should be an additional option called “What’s in it for me?” if you are telepathic.
Nonetheless, I chose to help so she doesn’t shock me again.
I can tell she’s telepathic because she touches my soldier. I wonder why my telepathy worked on her. Or did it?
I chose to negotiate with her.
I chose to become an apprentice. My family can wait.
She’s right. I don’t believe her backstory. She is trying to manipulate me.
Wait. This girl’s life was in danger? I wonder what she did to get that way.
This girl doesn’t sound the brightest. I wonder if she should be in a position of leadership.
Doesn’t matter, actually. If I can get power, in turn, I can eventually overthrow her.
Wait – I’m working in a team? Well, shoot. I work much better by myself.
Grammar: “Hmm… you want me to share some of my life wisdom with you?” Anna asks, surprised.
Task Day
Comments:
I think there should have been a training montage up to this day, but oh well.
These scientists sure do love their test tubes.
Awh, that’s the end? I was looking forward to cutting that mean lady’s head off, though! 
Oh well, I’ll just have to look forward to the next update!
Hi @Eleckar, I haven’t updated in a bit as RL and phone lag held me at bay. I’m currently awaiting my notebook to arrive
Thank you for having a play through and leaving that review. Made me smile. I have addressed some of the grammar and tenses that you spoke of in the updated version but it still has too many continuity errors. So I’m clearing them up first.
I may look at adding a fight scene againt the one who take the items. The password system was meant for those who are playing again. It unlocks more content. When I’ve finally finished writing all of it, hopefully they’ll be heaps of easter eggs.
I only decided not to have the non binary as I was noob to CS and wasn’t sure how to. It’ll be something I may add in the future. Heavily leaning towards a yes but as you mentioned, it may not make sense with what I have planned for later so I’ll have to see.
I was trying to keep the beginning quick, without having to click too many times. I may add a couole more in the future then if more people feel the same.
Haha, it’s okay. That caught a lot of people by surprise. On the next play through, try to keep the child
I made it like that because people kept expressing that they wanted to meet their families again. It’s something I had already planned but hey, a little spoiler here and there can’t hurt, can it?
They’re shunned because most appear physically different. They experience a severe form of racism… Age 12 is when MC may get to meet them (depending on previous choices made). It’ll go into more depth then.
I’m pretty sure I’ve edited the explanations in the updsted one I’m working on. So if it’s a little confusing just ignore it for now.
People with names have records (family information stored somewhere), those without do not. Those kids are the ones who are given numbers.
Astaroth smells rancid and carries his food around. It often spoils and he forgets about it. (Too busy taking joy in others pain).
Yeah, Avian does worship freedom. Right now he would see all of you as birds, caged against your will, with your wings clipped.
Nope, you’re right. They’re well funded. It’s just the good stuff is saved for the high achievers. Can’t be letting the good stuff go to those who might ruin it.
Sera is lovely and does care, but only as much as a stranger can for another. There is only one gift that should really be weary of that pool.
Oh no! You found that… i found it too last month. I had a little revamp of that part. There was spme weird bits in it. Haha okay, maybe I should change it to “trying to make friends” ?
Yeah, i got a little confused with the tense. I remember editing that in the one I’m working on. Hopefully it’ll make more sense when I update.
Haha, Anna wants that leadership but it’s sorely out of her grasp. That’s why she needs your help exposing her boss. She said she knows that the kids should be treated better. Hmm, should MC believe her or not?
Sorry about that. I haven’t added the “other” paths for task day yet. Currently only an apprentice going for mentorship can be accessed. Those updates will take a while to clear up before I put them up.
Thank you again for leaving me with your thoughts. It’s been a pleasure and I hope you have time to check it out again after I get a chance to update it.
Very great demo, It will be really cool to see the MC develop their ESP ability, but for the meantime goodluck with coding I heard it was a pain in the butt lol.
I’m not sure if someone has already asked this(sorry if someone has…)but I was wondering if there will be romances in your game?
Thank you:)
Yes, yes it is. At least for what I’d like to achieve. The more I do, the better I get. So that’s the upside.
Yes there will be romantic options in the future. It’s okay, I have had this asked before. Maybe I’ll make a poll later asking which characters are most liked as romantic options. These are the characters I have planned out of those possibly met —> Adele, Oriel, Jana, Pinellas, Sakeri, Dusty, Avian, Kalon and Bayani.
Very good! Can’t wait for the next update
It seem interesting are you still working on this would love to play all your ideas with this
Hi there. Thanks for giving this a try. Yes still working on this. Progress is slow but I’m hoping to have enough content for an update soon.
Happy to hear this is still going I like this wip
Hey, could a regular please update my title for me and change the words in brackets to (UPDATE 20.FEB.2016). Many thanks in advance.
If anyone with higher powers see’s this, please edit my first post to remove the update notices as I’m unable to continue to add the changes in there. Please and Thank You
So, I’ve decided to just update what I have so far. I’ve added to the jargon, bestiary and made some small changes to some of the earlier parts. Added a menu to the stat menu and changed some of the achievement names. I’ve run through a grammar and spell check through all the documents so hopefully there are minimal errors now. There shouldn’t be any errors that break the game. (Randomtest is yet to find anything).
TASK DAY
Potential Mentors: The second version of task day for the Mentorship task is the only version I have up atm. This is the because it took forever to code and although I’m sure that there are no continuity errors, maybe one of the lovely forum members might encounter this and be able to point it out for me. Please bare in mind that I’ve still yet to code in the timing results for the last battle and I haven’t added any hits to the lifeforce yet.
Anna’s Team: I’ve only written a small portion onto this path. I’m currently working on this part.
Zeredah’s Beta Team: I’ve also written a small portion onto this path. I’m working simultaneously on this path with the above mentioned.
Market Path (Family): I’ve finished the Market scene and you’ll be able to finish the day. There will be more to come before the end of this chapter.
I’ve also cleaned up a lot of code. I’m not sure what else was added but there was some other smaller things done. Anyway, constructive feedback is always welcome.
Enjoy 
P.S
Also, is no one finding the Elias Apprentice path? I noticed that no one on the forum has mentioned it really and when I ran the random test some of the path hits were under 20 for that part… Just wondering if it’s too hard to find.
New mission for readers, ehh? (find Elias path) Gotta try it, been sooooo long.
Ha, ha yeah. He was sort of always there but I never noticed that people might not be finding his path.
Many thanks for the updated title
The first of many:
The difference is that each individual has their first name is sown onto the front.You have heard rumours that if you reach adulthood, there are no restrictions on clothing attire.
Using if, makes it sound a little… try "once’?
Sometimes they are easy and other times the tests left you feeling weak and drained of energy.
*over here, there’s opposing tenses.
Okay, so I assume that to be recruited as an apprentice, you ESP has to be a certain level? Cause I still haven’t figured out the steps. Hehe…
Okay, so I’m able to get JagLinn, Sera, Claude’s group and even be rejected. Can’t seem to get Elias, though.
Also, many of the newer pages have grammatical errors, mostly your/you’re and similar stuff. I like the new Task Day though.