Working on a game project for class


#1

Hello, everyone.

This is my first time being on this forum and I need some help in regards to making my game look fluid for a class activity that only needs 3 scenes. Here’s what I have so far and tell me what you think.

The Battle Against HADES
By Ron Butler

You arrived on the battlefield as enemy soldiers from HADES made their way into Brazil. You receive a call on your monitor device. It’s Miranda. She asks for your help as she and her troops are being ambushed. Your decision:

*choice
#Come to Miranda’s aid.
By coming to Miranda’s aid, her troops will fight harder, knowing that your presence in the heat of war spurs them on to victory.
*finish

*choice
#Send troops to help Miranda.
By sending troops to aid Miranda, this gives you time to come up with whatever plan that you have in mind to stop Aurelius Thanatos.
*finish

*choice
#Tell her that you’re under fire as well.
Things are looking just as bleak for you as it is for Miranda. You’ll have to fight your way through the crossfire to reach Miranda and her troops in time.
*finish

HADES’ forces are fleeing now that you have arrived to even the odds. It looks like the day is won until you see a HADES hovercraft appearing out of the sky and blasting everything in its sight. Inside the hovercraft was Aurelius Thanatos who was manning the hovercraft and was going to make matters into his own hands. You decide to:

*choice
#Storm the hovercraft.
Lead an all out assault to take down Aurelius Thanatos and bring an end to HADES. The troops’ morale is high as you inspire them to continue fighting until the very end, regardless if they live or die.
*finish

*choice
#Fire weapons at the hovercraft.
Have the troops fire cannons and heavy artillery at the hovercraft in order to take it down.
*finish

*choice
#Call out Aurelius Thanatos.
Just as Aurelius Thanatos is about to fully destroy the city, you make a desperate attempt to call out Aurelius Thanatos for a one on one confrontation.
*finish

You battle Aurelius Thanatos in his hovercraft. The fight last about an hour and the hovercraft crashes in the center of the war zone. You escape from the wreckage with some bruises as you are greeted by Miranda and the troops with congratulations. The war may be over, but Miranda senses someone emerging from the rubble. Aurelius Thanatos is about to fire a shot at you. What should you do?

*choice
#Return fire.
Have everyone move out of the way as you fire several shots at Aurelius as he falls back into the rubble as it explodes.
*finish

*choice
#Headshot.
You move out the way and fire a few rounds at Aurelius and realize that you’re down to one shot. Aurelius continues shooting and you fire a shot that strikes Aurelius in the head, killing him.
*finish

*choice
#Miranda takes the shot.
Miranda fires a few rounds as she pushes you to safety. She manages to hit Aurelius, killing him.
*finish

*choice
# Miranda sacrifices herself.
Miranda pushes you out of the way to safety as she engages Aurelius in a shootout. Miranda manages to outduel Aurelius, but slumps down to the floor, having taking damage herself. You rush to her aid as she died in your arms.
*finish

*choice
#You sacrifice yourself.
You move Miranda out of the way to safety as you engage Aurelius in a shootout. You are victorious over Aurelius but the damage was done. As you laid there dying, you tell Miranda that you saved the world from tyrannical reign. You then died, knowing your mission was accomplished.
*finish

*choice
#You place Aurelius in captivity.
Aurelius charges at you and continues the fight. Aurelius is about to finish you off but Miranda and the troops run in and fight Aurelius. Aurelius overpowers them, giving you the opportunity to shoot bullets at his knee caps, rendering him powerless. Aurelius is defeated and handcuffed as you are rewarded for your heroism.
*finish


#2

You can get rid of most of the *choice like this:

[code]
*choice
#Return fire.
Have everyone move out of the way as you fire several shots at Aurelius as he falls back into the rubble as it explodes.
*finish
#Headshot.
You move out the way and fire a few rounds at Aurelius and realize that you’re down to one shot. Aurelius continues shooting and you fire a shot that strikes Aurelius in the head, killing him.
*finish
#Miranda takes the shot.
Miranda fires a few rounds as she pushes you to safety. She manages to hit Aurelius, killing him.
*finish

Miranda sacrifices herself.

Miranda pushes you out of the way to safety as she engages Aurelius in a shootout. Miranda manages to outduel Aurelius, but slumps down to the floor, having taking damage herself. You rush to her aid as she died in your arms.
*finish
#You sacrifice yourself.
You move Miranda out of the way to safety as you engage Aurelius in a shootout. You are victorious over Aurelius but the damage was done. As you laid there dying, you tell Miranda that you saved the world from tyrannical reign. You then died, knowing your mission was accomplished.
*finish
#You place Aurelius in captivity.
Aurelius charges at you and continues the fight. Aurelius is about to finish you off but Miranda and the troops run in and fight Aurelius. Aurelius overpowers them, giving you the opportunity to shoot bullets at his knee caps, rendering him powerless. Aurelius is defeated and handcuffed as you are rewarded for your heroism.
*finish[/code]

Also, expanding the explanation of consequences of choices might be a good idea.
Hope ^ that makes sense, I’m a bit sleepy, as it’s past 2am here :slightly_smiling:

Off to bed!


#3

Thanks. That will help me a lot. Also, do you think it looks good just from a rough draft standard?


#4

Here’s what I have now after I made some edits:

The Battle Against HADES
By Deron Butler

You arrived on the battlefield as enemy soldiers from HADES made their way into Brazil. You receive a call on your monitor device. It’s Miranda. She asks for your help as she and her troops are being ambushed. Your decision:

*choice
#Come to Miranda’s aid.
By coming to Miranda’s aid, her troops will fight harder, knowing that your presence in the heat of war spurs them on to victory. That way, it will give Miranda some leeway while she and some of her troops recover and heal for the next stage of the battle.
*finish

*choice
#Send troops to help Miranda.
By sending troops to aid Miranda, this gives you time to come up with whatever plan that you have in mind to stop Aurelius Thanatos. As the troops go to help Miranda, you wander through the alleyways of the favelas, looking for the shortest route while avoiding enemy soldiers.
*finish

*choice
#Tell her that you’re under fire as well.
Things are looking just as bleak for you as it is for Miranda. You’ll have to fight your way through the crossfire to reach Miranda and her troops in time. As you fight your way though the enemy soldiers and reach Miranda, half of your troops are either dead or injured, leaving you with limited resources.
*finish

HADES’ forces are fleeing now that you have arrived to even the odds. It looks like the day is won until you see a HADES hovercraft appearing out of the sky and blasting everything in its sight. Inside the hovercraft was Aurelius Thanatos who was manning the hovercraft and was going to make matters into his own hands. You decide to:

*choice
#Storm the hovercraft.
Lead an all out assault to take down Aurelius Thanatos and bring an end to HADES. The troops’ morale is high as you inspire them to continue fighting until the very end, regardless if they live or die. This is your big chance to take the fight to head honcho of HADES.
*finish

*choice
#Fire weapons at the hovercraft.
Have the troops fire cannons and heavy artillery at the hovercraft in order to take it down. Using everything you got, you wanted to make a statement to HADES that even with limited resources and a lot of men down, you will not go without a fight.
*finish

*choice
#Call out Aurelius Thanatos.
Just as Aurelius Thanatos is about to fully destroy the city, you make a desperate attempt to call out Aurelius Thanatos for a one on one confrontation. Intercept his manifesto and have him fight you aboard his hovercraft. You know this isn’t an offer he can’t refuse, knowing that you stand in his way of global domination.
*finish

You battle Aurelius Thanatos in his hovercraft. The fight last about an hour and the hovercraft crashes in the center of the war zone. You escape from the wreckage with some bruises as you are greeted by Miranda and the troops with congratulations. The war may be over, but Miranda senses someone emerging from the rubble. Aurelius Thanatos is about to fire a shot at you. What should you do?

*choice
#Return fire.
Have everyone move out of the way as you fire several shots at Aurelius as he falls back into the rubble as it explodes. Aurelius is dead and the world is saved thanks to you and Miranda. You and Miranda are rewarded for your bravery and your efforts.
*finish

*choice

Miranda sacrifices herself.

Miranda pushes you out of the way to safety as she engages Aurelius in a shootout. Miranda manages to outduel Aurelius, but slumps down to the floor, having taking damage herself. You rush to her aid as she died in your arms. You mourn her death at first, but you proudly salute her for all your work in defending freedom.
*finish

*choice
#You sacrifice yourself.
You move Miranda out of the way to safety as you engage Aurelius in a shootout. You are victorious over Aurelius but the damage was done. As you laid there dying, you tell Miranda that you saved the world from tyrannical reign. You then died, knowing your mission was accomplished.
*finish


#5

So, I’m not certain if you mean that you wanted it coded in the system that’s being used for CoG, but if that’s what you want it would need to be something like this.

The Battle Against HADES
By Deron Butler

You arrived on the battlefield as enemy soldiers from HADES made their way into Brazil. You receive a call on your monitor device. It’s Miranda. She asks for your help as she and her troops are being ambushed. Your decision:

*choice
    #Come to Miranda’s aid.
        By coming to Miranda’s aid, her troops will fight harder, knowing that your presence in the heat of war spurs them on to victory. That way, it will give Miranda some leeway while she and some of her troops recover and heal for the next stage of the battle.
        *goto one

    #Send troops to help Miranda.
        By sending troops to aid Miranda, this gives you time to come up with whatever plan that you have in mind to stop Aurelius Thanatos. As the troops go to help Miranda, you wander through the alleyways of the favelas, looking for the shortest route while avoiding enemy soldiers.
        *goto one

    #Tell her that you’re under fire as well.
        Things are looking just as bleak for you as it is for Miranda. You’ll have to fight your way through the crossfire to reach Miranda and her troops in time. As you fight your way though the enemy soldiers and reach Miranda, half of your troops are either dead or injured, leaving you with limited resources.
        *goto one

*label one        
HADES’ forces are fleeing now that you have arrived to even the odds. It looks like the day is won until you see a HADES hovercraft appearing out of the sky and blasting everything in its sight. Inside the hovercraft was Aurelius Thanatos who was manning the hovercraft and was going to make matters into his own hands. You decide to:

*choice
    #Storm the hovercraft.
        Lead an all out assault to take down Aurelius Thanatos and bring an end to HADES. The troops’ morale is high as you inspire them to continue fighting until the very end, regardless if they live or die. This is your big chance to take the fight to head honcho of HADES.
        *goto two

    #Fire weapons at the hovercraft.
        Have the troops fire cannons and heavy artillery at the hovercraft in order to take it down. Using everything you got, you wanted to make a statement to HADES that even with limited resources and a lot of men down, you will not go without a fight.
        *goto two

    #Call out Aurelius Thanatos.
        Just as Aurelius Thanatos is about to fully destroy the city, you make a desperate attempt to call out Aurelius Thanatos for a one on one confrontation. Intercept his manifesto and have him fight you aboard his hovercraft. You know this isn’t an offer he can’t refuse, knowing that you stand in his way of global domination.
        *goto two

*label two        
You battle Aurelius Thanatos in his hovercraft. The fight last about an hour and the hovercraft crashes in the center of the war zone. You escape from the wreckage with some bruises as you are greeted by Miranda and the troops with congratulations. The war may be over, but Miranda senses someone emerging from the rubble. Aurelius Thanatos is about to fire a shot at you. What should you do?

*choice
    #Return fire.
        Have everyone move out of the way as you fire several shots at Aurelius as he falls back into the rubble as it explodes. Aurelius is dead and the world is saved thanks to you and Miranda. You and Miranda are rewarded for your bravery and your efforts.
        *goto three
    # Miranda sacrifices herself.
        Miranda pushes you out of the way to safety as she engages Aurelius in a shootout. Miranda manages to outduel Aurelius, but slumps down to the floor, having taking damage herself. You rush to her aid as she died in your arms. You mourn her death at first, but you proudly salute her for all your work in defending freedom.
        *goto three
    #You sacrifice yourself.
        You move Miranda out of the way to safety as you engage Aurelius in a shootout. You are victorious over Aurelius but the damage was done. As you laid there dying, you tell Miranda that you saved the world from tyrannical reign. You then died, knowing your mission was accomplished.
        *goto three
*label three
*finish

Also, I have globally read your story, but some parts aren’t completely logical.

First choice:
Option A, you don’t know what you are that would make the troops fight hard.
Option B, fine.
Option C: your option shows that you wouldn’t send her help. but your text says that you do.

There is more, but like the other, it’s late here and I’m about to go and sleep.

Hope it helps in any way.


#6

Here’s what I have now.

You are Sgt. Wilson. You arrive on the battlefield as enemy soldiers from HADES made their way into Brazil. You receive a call on your monitor device. It is Miranda. She asks for your help as she and her troops are being ambushed. Your decision:

*choice
#Help Miranda.
By coming to the aid of Miranda, her troops will fight harder, knowing that your presence in the heat of war spurs them on to victory. That way, it will give Miranda some leeway while she and some of her troops recover and heal for the next stage of the battle. Eventually, HADES’ forces are fleeing after you arrived to even the odds. It looks like the day is won until you see a HADES hovercraft appearing out of the sky and blasting everything in sight. Inside the Hovercraft is Aurelius Thanatos who was manning the hovercraft and was going to take matters into his own hands. You decide to:
*choice
#Storm the hovercraft.
You lead an all out assault to take down Aurelius Thanatos and bring an end to HADES. The troops’ morale is high as you inspire them to continue fighting until the very end, regardless if they live or die. This is your big chance to take the fight to the head honcho of HADES.Eventually, the hovercraft is destroyed. Aurelius emerges from the wreckage and looks to shoot you and Miranda. What would be your method?
*choice
#Honor.
Have everyone move out of the way as you fire several shots at Aurelius. He falls dead into the rubble as it explodes. The world is saved as you and Miranda are rewarded for your efforts.
*finish
#Valor.
You move Miranda out of the way to safety as you engage Aurelius in a shootout. You are victorious but the damage was done. You laid there dying as Miranda rushed to your aid. You tell her that you had saved the world from tyrannical reign and later died knowing that your mission was accomplished.
*finish
#Fire weapons at the hovercraft.
Have the troops fire cannons and heavy artillery at the hovercraft in order to take it down. Using everything you got, you wanted to make a statement to HADES that even with limited resources and a lot of men down, you will not go without a fight.
*choice
#Honor.
Have everyone move out of the way as you fire several shots at Aurelius. He falls dead into the rubble as it explodes. The world is saved as you and Miranda are rewarded for your efforts.
*finish
#Valor.
You move Miranda out of the way to safety as you engage Aurelius in a shootout. You are victorious but the damage was done. You laid there dying as Miranda rushed to your aid. You tell her that you had saved the world from tyrannical rule and later died knowing that your mission was accomplished.
*finish
#Call out Aurelius Thanatos.
Just as Aurelius Thanatos is about to fully destroy the city, you make a desperate attempt to call him out for a one on one confrontation. You intercept his manifesto and have him fight aboard his hovercraft. This is an offer he cannot refuse, knowing that you stand in his way of global domination You valiantly defeat Aurelius with.
*choice
#Honor.
Have everyone move out of the way as you fire several shots at Aurelius. He falls dead into the rubble as it explodes. The world is saved as you and Miranda are rewarded for your efforts.
*finish
#Valor.
You move Miranda out of the way to safety as you engage Aurelius in a shootout. You are victorious but the damage was done. You laid there dying as Miranda rushed to your aid. You tell her that you had saved the world from tyrannical rule and later died knowing that your mission was accomplished.
*finish
#Send troops to fight with her.
By sending troops to aid Miranda, this gives you time to come up with whatever plan that you have in mind to stop Aurelius Thanatos. As the troops go to help Miranda, you wonder through the alleyways of the favelas, looking for the shortest route while avoiding enemy soldiers. As you move stealthily, you see the hovercraft moving in the sky. You know Aurelius Thanatos is manning the hovercraft. You decide to.
*choice
#Board the hovercraft.
Using a harpoon launcher, you glide in the air and board the hovercraft to fight Aurelius Thanatos. He turns around to face you. You engage him in a fight which causes the hovercraft to crash on the beach. You manage to defeat Aurelius or so you thought. You turned around and saw him brandishing a gun at you. What should you do next?
*choice
#Honor.
Have everyone move out of the way as you fire several shots at Aurelius. He falls dead into the rubble as it explodes. The world is saved as you and Miranda are rewarded for your efforts.
*finish
#Valor.
You move Miranda out of the way to safety as you engage Aurelius in a shootout. You are victorious but the damage was done. You laid there dying as Miranda rushed to your aid. You tell her that you had saved the world from tyrannical rule and later died knowing that your mission was accomplished.
*finish
#Follow the hovercraft.
You decide to go back and follow the hovercraft. It eventually lands and Aurelius Thanatos emerges. He has your troops and Miranda in their custody. How do you handle this situation?
*choice
#Honor.
Have everyone move out of the way as you fire several shots at Aurelius. He falls dead in the rubble as it explodes. The world is saved as you and Miranda are rewarded for your efforts.
*finish
#Valor.
You move Miranda out of the way to safety as you engage Aurelius in a shootout. You are victorious but the damage was done. You laid there dying as Miranda rushed to your aid. You tell her that you had saved the world from tyrannical rule and later died knowing that your mission was accomplished.
*finish
#Tell her that you’re under fire, too.
Things are looking just as bleak for you as it is for Miranda. You will have to fight your way through the crossfire to reach Miranda and her troops in time. As you fight your way through the enemy soldiers and reach Miranda, half of your troops are either dead or injured, leaving you with limited resources. Regardless of this, you continued fighting on until you saw the hovercraft. You decide to follow the hovercraft as it headed for the base. You soon find out that Aurelius Thanatos is attacking your base. You shoot down the hovercraft and manage to reach the base in time to fight Aurelius. After 30 minutes of fighting Aurelius, you are about to arrest him, but Aurelius escapes and is about to shoot you. You outshoot him as he explodes in the wreckage. The world is saved as you and Miranda are rewarded for your efforts.
*finish
#Tell her to meet you at a rendezvous point.
You and Miranda make it to the rendezvous point of the statue of Christ the Redeemer. You also find out that the enemy soldiers have you cornered. You tell the soldiers to keep fighting hard. They do and just when it looked like things were about to swing in your favor, Aurelius Thanatos appeared and started attacking your soldiers. This caused you to fight Aurelius for 30 minutes. You are victorious but Aurelius looked to have the last laugh. He pulls out a gun and is about to shoot you, but thankfully Miranda distracts him as you were able to fire off your rounds and kill him. The world is saved as you and Miranda are rewarded for your efforts.
*finish
#Tell her to meet you at your end.
Miranda and her troops make towards your post, but half of them were dead and severely wounded, including Miranda. You see this and tell Miranda to get medical help. Suddenly, a hovercraft falls on the battlefield as Aurelius Thanatos appears and starts attacking your outpost. You cut him off at the medical base and defeat him. It looks like all is saved until Aurelius gets up and is about to shoot you. You engage Aurelius in a shootout. You are victorious but the damage was done. You laid there dying as Miranda got up to be at your side. You told her that you had saved the world from tyrannical rule and later died knowing that your mission was accomplished.
*finish