I don’t know if anyone else has this issue, maybe it’s just mobile? But when I finish Chapter 1, it just infinitely gives me a loading screen. From other comments I’m assuming there’s more than one chap xD
But! I can at least say from first impressions, I think things do need to be a bit more grounded. I understand it’s supposed to be surreal, but I think what makes things surreal from my understanding has some sort of reality based around it. Not just that, but the MC should also treat the cooky wonderland stuff happening as natural if it’s a common occurance for everyone.
I also would like to get to know the MC more I think before jumping straight into the prison. The memory diving power is a little hard to grasp at first which I think fits with the vibe you’re going for, but mostly agree with what @valence said above!
Excited to see what comes of this and hoping to read the rest soon! <3