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I’m new to writing, and I Iove IF games, so I’ve started making my own. I’ve only been working on it for a week, and I learned how to use choicescript those first couple days. I’m just looking for some feedback and seeing if this is something people would be interested in reading if I keep going. I havent thought of a title yet, I feel like itll come to me when the time is right.

Edit: The MC is the captain of Space Battleship en route to fight some rebels. It has some depictions of violence and alcohol use

Please let me know what you did and didn’t like about the game.

Currently it’s 1 Chapter, 6500 Words, and I plan on updating every week or so that I can.

To play the demo, go here: CoGDemos

AI Disclosure:

No — This project does not contain the output of Generative AI
Yes — This project contains the output of Generative AI

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June 2026 Writer Support Thread
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Hey Boss, I’ve taken a peek at your demo but i think it would be worth having something of a synopsis/description about your story in the main post. Just so your potential readers know what they’re stepping into :blush:

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Agree with the previous poster and im curioisty is peeked and willing to see more of the story.

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Thank you, I added that

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For those that gave it a read, is the character creation too much of a momentum stopper?

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Nah it was real short and the options presented in that moment worked for it.

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okay cool, thanks for the feedback. How did the characters feel? I’ve never written dialogue before this so this is me taking a swing at it.

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Will half to make another play through to give a better thoughts on it all but as for the characters for a opening start I think you got a good start for them and how there primary personalities our. An i enjoy the interplay between them and looking forward to how things get expanded and how the game gets polished out. From what I played the other day there is something off but not enough for me to recall sonce ive been sick. Though I will say im looking forward to the confrontation with our admiral my first captain has been a little rebellious/questioning lol

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Thank you for the feedback, I’m working on chapter two. I think im finding my footing a little better

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