Thanks, I’m so happy to hear that you enjoyed it!! Yes, the secrets are meant to be intriguing, to tackle your curiosity and make you search for more
Birds are prying creatures - let’s hope no one asks them what they saw
THANK YOU. YOU HAVE NO IDEA HOW MUCH I APPRECIATE SUCH THINGS.
Sorry I got way too excited. I’m just very self-conscious about my English, so I’m glad when I can improve my writing by learning something new (or remembering something forgotten).
Aaah, such an enjoyable update!
And a lot of content, too!
I feel like you’re getting better and better at describing things. The description of Riam was so vivid and makes it seem so gorgeous. I felt like stepping for the first time in a new city in one of the old-school “Tales of” RPGs. It had that unique sense of wonder.
And well, the new “bird PoVs” was just as much of a delight as the previous ones, but you already know just how much a fan I am of these.
I didn’t spot any coding issues, and I’ll leave typos and such to other people this time, so that’s good too!
I do have a small suggestion though, that is linked to a specific thing that happened in my playthrough.
My MC and S BOTH picked black Friesian horses! I feel like at least someone should comment on that! Especially since the owner of the stables wanted to get rid of both horses and said both had a bad character
I mean, the chances for this to happen were really low, right?
For example, for this part:
““You have a good taste with horses,” I hear Shoren say from somewhere right, where he now stands holding the bridle of a black Friesian in his hands.”
I feel like the narration could say something like “(…) holding the bridle of… another black Friesian?”
And well, the old man could comment on that afterwards too, like how MC and S have similar tastes.
Little details like that always bring a smile!
And oh dear, now MC and S also BOTH have a blue earring offered to each by the other one
But anyway, suggestions aside, I’m still just as in love with this as I was before. And man I can’t wait to meet A since they are the RO I’m interested in!
Aw, thank you so much!! Descriptions were always my strongest point when I wrote in my native languages, so I’m very happy that I’m slowly getting to pass that variety and inspiration onto a less known language such as English. Exiting a comfort zone is complicated, but certainly worth it, and I’m very happy to hear that it’s giving noticeable fruits!
I also love RPGs, so I’m glad I achieved such an atmosphere - the biggest struggle is always to make a description concise yet engaging, and managing that is something I’m now very proud of!
The birds are always there! This one was one of the most complicated as there was much dialogue in between, so I had to cut it in a way that you could understand what’s going on and what should remain hidden. I’m glad I got to do it properly!
Oh, that’s actually a good point!! I’ll certainly think about adding such a variation to the scene - certainly, someone had to notice that you and S decided to go for to identical horses Thanks for the comment!
Your tastes are amazingly similar to S’s, I love that so much!!
I find it nice to have the chance to share a thing or a preference with another character, it’s even funny to notice how you match. However, I’ll definitely add a line or two on the earring, just as you recommended - it will have a better effect if such things are commented by the characters themselves! Certainly in real life such things are noticed instantly
Aw, thanks a lot!! I’m so glad to hear that people enjoy this story so much, as I pour all my love into the setting, characters and plot. It’s sometimes hard to make so many variations of a single thing, but it certainly pays off at the end with such lovely comments!!
Don’t worry, dear reader - A now knows where to go, so it won’t take long for your paths to finally cross!!
Hey-hey there, long time no see!! It’s been a while since I’ve posted an update here, on this forum.
I’ve warned those who follow me on Tumblr, but this next chapter is taking me longer than expected due to a series of causes: personal issues, my return to uni and my beloved dissertation, all of it eat up my time and make me go slower in my writing/coding.
However, I still love this project with all my heart, and I’ll make sure to see it through, don’t you worry! xx
Meanwhile, while I decided to become a turtle instead of an owl, a friend of mine is nothing else but EFFICIENT. Thanks to her, an amazing artist whose Instagram I’ll link below, now SoJ counts with a beautiful cover that you can see either on my Tumblr or in-game!! I have no words for it, it is so BEAUTIFUL. I can’t thank her enough for doing this for me.
Please, if you like the art style do not hesitate to go and tell her something nice - she’s a begginning artist with little following, and she surely will be very happy to hear a nice word from you!!
As I still cannot upload images here, I will attach a link to my Tumblr and game for you to see it.
Thank you for your support and see you soon!!
Me, going through all my bookmarks:huh, Scales of Justice….what’s this one again?
Also Me after reading the first half of the first paragraph:
Edit:Agh! I meant to say more but my dumb tablet thought sending that GIF was the end. Throughly I enjoyed going through the Demo again including all the new stuff that I’ve missed (I went through it when it first came up so all the new stuff is a great welcome.) Also gotta love the dynamic of a PC who dislikes S for their own reasons but at times shows their soft side again, it make my heart explode
I came upon this wip by chance, and thank god for that. I’m absolutely loving the lore, the premise, world building, character interactions, everything. Other than a mage reborn and SoH, this is the only one that gave me the feels like I’m reading a adventure fantasy manga or LN something. Please keep up the good work
Oh hahahaha, understandable XD I’m practically at this same point, given the hiatus I took from writing due to my university workload!!
Thank you, I am so happy to see that people enjoy my DEMO even though it’s been a while since I’ve posted new content!! I am trying to organise myself so I can write again during uni, and such posts just give me the motivation to try harder
Also, I’m happy you enjoy your relationship with S!! I’m aiming to make it fulfilling regardless of the path you decide to take with it… and to make S develop accordingly to the support that you give them!! From all the companions, I think they’re the most shapeable by your choices… or not only yours
Awww, thank you so much, you warm my heart and make my day with this message
I hope I will be able to provide something new soon!! Given my workload, I am wondering whether to divide this new Chapter into two parts, which I will release separately… because the beggining of Chapter 4 is MASSIVE already, and perhaps it is worth a try so people can enjoy a couple of interesting scenes Thank to my Tumblr supporters I decided to stick to the Chapter release schedule, yet who knows, maybe Chapter 4 will be a Chapter 4.1 and 4.2…
I will see what I do with it, again, depends whether I prognose that my work will be as bad as this term, as I really don’t want to keep anyone (or myself!!) waiting
Happens with most of the wips I play and that’s why I check them periodically. I fall in love again with them every time. This one is not the exception.
The different classes are very intruiging especially the healer class, the way it is portrayed as very dngerous, it would be amazing if we somehow delve deeper in this classes.
Is this where the demon ends cause it just continously loads here and I’ve replayed it twice on different days just to make sure it wasn’t my connection or an error
Yes, if you refuse the deal, this is where it ends for you!! The continuation to this ramification is being currently written in Chapter 4, so you will see where this new acquaintance leads you when I release it/first part of it!!
Awww, thank you so much!! I really wished to do something more creative with the classes, and I’m happy to see people like my approach to Healers!! Always have seen them as a bit of an underrated class, there’s so much potential (for chaos) in them
There will be a chance to dive into the lore of your specialisation further in this/next book, so I hope that’s something you’ll be looking forward!! xx
