shut up and take my money!
this is pretty good, no major bugs to report at this moment, keep up the good work!
May I ask what means of transportation remain from the old world? And what new/modified ways humans use to get around this post apocalyptic setting?
Always good to see a setting where myths and legends come to life. Great concept. Hoping fot more in the future! 
alley → ally
unless → if
Other than that, when you choose to wait, that next page (with the MC closing his/her eyes) nothing happens when I clicked “Next Chapter”. I assume that is the end of the WIP.
Good read so far, I really like it! 
I really, really like this read. However, I had an error at the name imput. Somthing about an *if statement.
Depends on the region. In a place like Florida, where the story currently is, it tends to be beasts. Horses and the like in order to get around. In the mid-west and higher urban areas, fixed up cars tend to do the trick. And finally, there is always the tried and true method of walking.
Yep. That was the end of the WIP. Just forgot to tag on the *finish command.
I think I figured out what was wrong. I’m working on fixing it now.
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Regarding the sexuality choice, currently, I have to want to flirt with either of them, or at least want to flirt with either of them. What if neither of them is my type, or I don’t want to flirt with someone I’ve just met? And no, the “You don’t feel the need to flirt with anyone. You’re all business right now.” option doesn’t count, since I still have to want to flirt, or I’ll be set as asexual.
So does kid mean “fresh-faced 18-year-old” or “literal 12-year-old”, because if it’s the latter, does it mean Frank is the only male RO?
If you want to remove options that have already been selected from a choice, you can use *hide_reuse or *disable_reuse.
Click here for typos
You know that the people of the bar probably don’t think much of you, all but confirmed with they do nothing more the 'hmph!" before everything returns back to the conversation filled bar it was before.
This could probably be phrased better… I guess you could have something like “a supposition which is all but confirmed when they do nothing more than ‘hmph!’…”. And you don’t need “back” if you already have “returns”.
At the bar, a rugged looking mercenary is sitting at the bar, drinking down his beer with paced ease.
You don’t need “at the bar” twice, or “down” with “drinking”, and I have no idea what “paced ease” is supposed to mean… 
You are attracted to females
That’s not what I chose…
Orientation: Male
(In the stats screen) Should this be “Preference: Males”?
Well, you’re hands are tied.
Should be “your”.
However, if you were the solo applicant so far, you aren’t sure how good her chances are.
Should be “sole”.
How long she’s been waiting?
Should be “has she”.
Ask her how much longer plans to wait.
Should be “she plans”.
Is that everything? It’s stuck loading… 
ll in all, it looks like an interesting concept, although it still seems to be pretty early. 
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Hmmm, fair point. How about if I change the choice to “You don’t feel like flirting”? As for the point of flirting with both, I’ll be honest, I probably leave it as is for now as it works for what I’m going for, but I may come back and change it later. I’ll mark that as undecided.
It means more the fresh-faced 18 year-old who looks like he’s never been in a serious fight, with a bit of a baby face. Technically, you yourself are young as well, about 20-year-old, but you have some experience under your belt while he’s on his first adventure.
It was initially that. I changed it to Orientation after a bit of thinking, but I’m starting to regret it.
Yeah. Mentioned it earlier, but I forgot to tag *finish so it’s stuck trying to load the next chapter, which isn’t properly uploaded yet.
Other than that, I’ll get to work on those typos. Thanks for pointing them out.
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it cool to play i hope this keep on work on this
I’m not certain exactly what you’re saying here… Currently the options are:
- Flirt with one of them. (Gay/Straight)
- Flirt with one, but acknowledge attraction to the other. (Bi)
- Don’t flirt, but still want to flirt with one of them. (Gay/Straight)
- Don’t flirt, but want to flirt with either of them. (Bi)
- Don’t want to flirt with either. (Asexual)
The sorts of options I’m talking about adding are things like:
- Although I prefer men, I have no wish to flirt with this one.
So, perfectly romanceable? 
Good to know.
Well, orientation and preference are different things; my preference is males, but my orientation is gay.
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So far I absolutely love what it’s about!!! I’m curious as to if there will be some kind of like general magic the characters could use? Such as maybe runes or something like that. Examples: drawing a rune on someone to accelerate the healing process if their wounded badly, drawing rune around a campsite to alert the characters something is near their site. Or perhaps enchantments that relate to a type of magic you use such as; enchanting a characters weapons with a spirit to turn that weapon into a kind of “holy weapon” that would hurt demons more, or if you use fire to make it a flaming weapon. Or perhaps something fun each power could have like fire elemental, ice elemental, spirit guide that could posses people, all to either help fight or for just fun things like lighting a fire, cool down a room, make people do something silly? Just my thoughts I love it so far though!!
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Content is good, maybe you can add something to fill the story.
Good reading until I got to this point…
Bug!
Haha. Sorry, that’s just where it ended. The past week’s been a bit hectic and I haven’t had much time to work on it.
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Take your time, its can wait until you finished everything that you need to do.
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