Ohh can’t wait to see what you cook up with them! I wish you lots of luck and ideas for this book of yours!
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Also, the new update is very confusing to read, maybe running your text through grammarly or any other correction app might help.
I really like the idea of building our estate from ground up tho.
Wish you all the best for this 
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I think you need to double check that everything works as intended at the start. I feel there’s entire paragraphs of text that aren’t were they should be (at least when choosing “stand your ground” and "I had to make sure it was real).
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Sorry everyone, I’m genuinely trying my best to address all errors and such here. It’s far far more difficult than I initially imagined and expected and my storytelling worldbuilding projection is proving to be way above my ability to make this an IF game.
I hate to disappoint anyone, but I think I’ve been far too ambitious and I’m not able to scale it down without losing any complexity. Therefore, it breaks my heart, but until further notice please don’t use the link as I cannot fix this and give it the justice it deserves.
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Chill dude, take your time. You are not oblidged to make this work asap.
Go for a walk, watch that show you’ve been wanting to watch for a while, eat what you want. Then, when you feel like writing, then sit down with a clear and fresh mind.
I know you can do this 
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Amazing dialogue and interactions, got an immediate sense of the MC. Pacing was a tad fast, need more descriptions of surroundings and NPCs to be as evocative as you’ve got the MC.
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Appreciate the advice and support my friend. Think I got myself in a spiral and need to just step away, work on some of my other writing projects and then come back with a clear mind once I’ve studied up on ChoiceScript some more and try again.
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Thanks Judy, it was something niggling in the back of my mind that I was a touch ‘racing’. Need more grounding to make the world as alive as our MC.
Thanks for the feedback!
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