Um…Yeah. Ok. So, I’ve finally gained the confidence to actually try and make a thread about a game that I’ve been thinking about making for some time now. Basically, the premise is:
You play as a Saber/Sabré (Saber for male, Sabré for female), who has just woken up in a seemingly eery place with no memory to speak of at all. In a strange turn of events, you end up being taken in by a mysterious family who…well, let’s just say this: they communicate in quite an interesting way…
This family is known as the Valences. There are others in this odd place as well, which you will soon discover, but all with the same mysterious aura and off-ish behavior as the Valences. Not long after arriving here, you’re plagued with dreams-some horrible and haunting, some calmly sweet. But they all have one repetitive trait: the red-eyed child. One not you yourself, but another, one who is quite similar. And familiar. You don’t remember most of the dreams, but one phrase still stays with you: “Our lives are like a puzzle. We have all the pieces, but how will they go together? More importantly…what will the final picture be?”
And you can’t help but wonder how much of that may be true, especially in your current situation…
But you have a choice; what will you do now? Pursue a romance with one of the Valences? Try to discover the meaning behind your strange dreams? Unravel the secrets of this eery, new place? Insist on finding out who you were and why you were left here? Demand to know why everyone around you seems to be lying? Or will you try to do it all?
The choice is yours!
…Yep. That’s pretty much the outline of the idea…I’m not quite sure if it’s a good one, but, what the heck, I might as well try it out! I don’t have a demo up as of yet, but I will post it when I have it up and running. So far, I have basically everything thought out and will post that for the meantime, and if I create something satisfactory enough, I’ll post some pictures of the characters, too. Just a warning, though, I’m extremely self-critical when it comes to my drawings.
This is what I have written for the introduction so far. Intro.: Pain. Searing and burning, pulsating through your very being. That was the first thing you remembered. Your mind still fogged and hazy, you struggle to open your eyelids. At first, all you recognized was gray. Though, the longer you stared at it, it began to shift to the point where you finally realized that you were looking up at a faint gray sky. Dark, blurred smudges that speckled the gray sky slowly became clearer, turning into the dark forms of creatures--black colored birds that circled the sky above you. Your mind process was sluggish, but eventually you came to a sort of conclusion to what you were seeing. If there is a sky...there must be a world below it, you think. Thinking this, you decide that there's no point in just lying here. You will need to move eventually, after all. You try to move your arms, only to find that this task would be much more difficult than you ever remembered it to be. It takes some time, but you gradually find the energy to move your body into a sitting position. As soon as you move, though, a painful aching throbs in your head. Colorful spots dance across your vision and you vaguely register your hand moving to hold your head as it continued to throb with the unbearable aching. Little by little, it faded ever so slowly, until all that ailed you was a bothersome migraine. You then decide to try standing up, since, after all, nothing could be worse than what you just went through, yes? As you finally stand, you suddenly find the ground beneath you utterly useless as everything around you spins in a beyond dizzying motion. Just as everything before it, the spinning finally ebbed away, but only after you fruitlessly tried stumbling a couple steps in the direction that you were guessing was straight ahead. Then again, all that time you could've just been stumbling around in a clumsy circle, for all you knew. You blink your eyes, forcing your brain to go into overdrive as you try to recognize the scenery before you. Perhaps it could help you remember what's going on. Unfortunately, there isn't very much "scenery" to see, if you could even call it scenery. All you saw surrounding you were trees. Tall, thin, bony, leafless trees with branches that reached up to the sky like claws trying to rip apart the heavens above. The ground beneath your feet didn't quite help, either. It was bare and dark-colored, cold and frozen. There must be something here, you think in frustration. This did seem only reasonable. If there were birds, then there certainly must be other things, even in a God-forsaken place like this. Having no other ideas, you decide to do the natural thing: walk until you find something. You take a cautious step or two forward, testing your ability to move. So far, so good. You continue walking, passing by the dead-looking trees, which were now fitted with the black colored birds who all stared at you in complete silence from their treetop perches. Their beady eyes bore into you, as if trying to undo the bindings and secrets of your soul. After passing more trees than you could count, you finally notice that they seemed to be thinning out and clearing away. You quicken your pace, eager to leave the eery forest of dead trees and haunting birds behind. You almost felt like crying out in joy as you take in the sight of a large house-a mansion. It was old, almost gothic looking. In front of it was a sort of garden, full of strange and mystical plants. Sitting on the unnaturally dark colored grass was a small boy. He couldn't be anywhere past ten years, you were sure. He wore gray clothes and on his head was a wavy mess of white colored hair. He was facing downward, staring at something on his lap, making it impossible for you to see his face. This house, whoever it belonged to, could very easily be the saving grace you've been looking for. But you already knew nothing of this place, and for all you knew an even worse fate could await you in that old mansion. Debating all these possibilities at once, you decide to...
And that’s what I have of the introduction. It leaves off where you would make a choice to either go to the house, try to leave, or just stay where you are.
So, is this a good idea? What do you think of the writing? Is there anything that doesn’t make sense to you?
I realize it’s short, but I’d still appreciate it if you guys leave feedback