I’ve begun work on my first WIP Timeline 2:False ancestry. In it, you play as a high school quarterback, before your life is unceremoniously flipped on its head. Now you are becoming a monster, whether physically or metaphorically is for you to decide. You have to fight for your right to return to your human life. Someone or rather something is killing people in your town and it’s only with your new abilities can you stop it. Will you rise to your task and return to being human, or fail and become cursed to your new life as a monster?
Details
Play as either Male or Female.
Play as either a Werewolf, Vampire, or Human
Investigate the creature terrorizing your town.
Deal with your new changes and the twists in the relationships around you.
Manage your human life with your team and your new life as a monster.
Interact with six distinct romance options, each having their own role in the story.
Main Love interests.
Rachael Lazaar.
Vice captain of the cheerleader team, overall great friend despite everything. She is a bit weird with how she acts sometimes, you wonder how much of her is the real her and how much is an act.
Samantha White
Captain of the Volleyball team, president of the anime cub and your childhood friend. The one thing that you can say for one certainty about her, is that she is a massive weeb.
Irene North
Captain of the cheerleading team, your biggest Rival and your second biggest defender. You are also her babysitter when her parents are out of town, what is hers is yours and what is yours is hers.
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Side Love interests.
Side love interests are love interests with their own storyline, but overall aren’t important to the main storyline.
found this wip random as i was checking cog website like it could get intresting some grammas (like ashford slaps me on the chest as a female mc feels a bit wrong?^^) but that has time cant wait for more will do 1 or 2 more runs later on
Agreed. This definitely felt like a harem anime or VN. First the “girl next door”, next the mysterious new transfer student, followed by the childhood friend, and then wrap it up with the queen bee. Ashford is the rebel troupe, to bad he’s not gender variable too.
Has a whole lot of potential but definitely needs some polishing and grammar edits.
I feel like there’s a lot happening in a short time frame in game that just makes things very confusing.
And I feel like there are scenes that are meant to not have to much screen time are dragged out versus things/scenes that pass by to quick that deserve explanation.
For example, in the prologue ? when MC is in the office we learn about the exploding car but you don’t talk about whose car it is nor why the team blew it up. There’s a single sentence that talks about some dude who molests another guys sister but again there is 0 clarification.
Has a whole lot of potential but definitely needs some polishing and grammar edits.
Indeed it does, but I will try to fix things as I go along and I improve, I been writing this since last year and I have nothing to really show for it.
For example, in the prologue ? when MC is in the office we learn about the exploding car but you don’t talk about whose car it is nor why the team blew it up. There’s a single sentence that talks about some dude who molests another guys sister but again there is 0 clarification.
Ah, this isn’t something that I really thought about it and it can be expanded more on as the story goes on as that was the original plan but I see what you mean. I will try to make some quick edits here and there to make the scene more clean overall. (Edit, I will fix it eventually. Working on act 2 rn)
but the the molestation is the reason the team did it and they targetted the molesters car.
Why isn’t everyone voting for Irene, shes clearly the best option in the game. (Don’t take this statements too seriously, its just strong agenda at play. All Ros will be written equally but some are more equal than others.)
she is not bad (first impression wise and not much so far to tell) but i honestly have something against divas^^ cant stand them in real life and i only tolarate them in some Wips if they are well writen but for that the story still to short that it can be a choice (no offense just i need first to see more from her if there is something hidden behind her) samatha i think will go yandere i fear what i dont shy away but could also mean trouble for my mc what already happend in the past if did read correctly^^ Rachel is still a mystery for me and i like that a lot there is something hidden behind switching personas and i want to see where it leads^^ ashford i will see how it goes.
in the end i will play anyway more runs to get all routes once atleast but i need first to see more of all of them before i can really pick my fav but rachel leads so far
just my opinion about them so far you did write them well so far so i am still open where it will all lead
Thank you for the kind words, the prologue is mostly focused on introducing the world and some of the ROs, each act is focused on one and act 1 was Rachael’s. Act 2 will be maria and hopefully she actually gets a vote then, but I will always try my best to write all of them to the best of my abilities and I hope people enjoy them.
about maria i really rack my brain since my post early where she was but i just cant remeber was she the cheerleader or something? ah well i have to read later again when my nap is done need some sleep long day ^^ ah now i rember she was the latin girl, to be honest her impression was so far ok but from all ro she is far boring for me (ok that sounds rude but just not memorbale enough for me to consider her) but that can change when more acts come out with more content from her.
cant wait for the others acts.
