(feedback please) a potential WIP


#1

I only have writing now , but in is still readable don’t know how to code. I started this piece a ways back and got writers block and left it untouched for about a month until today. I was hoping to make a game with it , I have a very vague idea of the story’s plot but it is coming along . This is a game about two species of creatures that can take the forum of humans as a result of there heightened evolution. I only wrote the prologue so far but I know where the story will lead from here. You play a college student working minimum wage to pay bills on a cheap apartment that has nosy neighbors , and a variety structural problems . The place you work is the best hotel in the city of red creek , the biggest people in power and wealth eat , drink, and party on the top floor’s exclusive bar. You start on your first day their and leave only to have your life take a downward spiral for what is waiting out side. Here is the link feed back always approved and taken into consideration


#2

hey Roslyn you now you have my help with this story I try to help a little in code if I can


#3

Very interesting. My only question would be: wouldn’t a bartender at a high class hotel bar make pretty decent money?


#4

Not that much experience , and everything in town is expensive but the character had to get away fro their parents


#5

Ah, sounds like New York.


#6

Trying to make his one of the smaller towns that have very wealthy prosperous people in it , but yeah that is kinda how I picture it. The out side world is just an idea in that town , it’s like it isn’t even there. Like a theory is how people of the town look at it .


#7

Not small town like I could walk to the other side of town in about 10 minutes but smaller with more complex structures.


#8

I want everyone’s opinion on an idea for characters in games. Would you prefer a flip gender character , that has less personality but just for games sake romancable.or would you prefer a character that has a district personality but only one gender.


#9

Personally, I prefer a character with a fixed gender and more fleshed out personality to a simple flip gender character(lol! What a name)


#10

Just so you know I am not talking about the main character.but yes so do I , always seem to have a more solid role in a story. When you chose gender it feels manufactured


#11

Yeah, I know!
Anyway, flip gender character can have personality, too. One good example would probably be Aycure/Aycura, from Way Walkers: University. However, I feel that she or he could be better if he or she was only a he or a she.

(sorry cant help it! just thought that it sounded funny)


#12

your writing is amazing but that is not a cog…


#13

That was entertaining and confusing all in one.
But yes I don’t have code and I don’t know how to code . And what do you mean by that is not a cog?


#14

She was presenting a plot to a story @akatsuki9344 you do the same with your sword story she is just starting. also I vote for set genders in romantic characters always all sensibilities are in the game


#15

What do people think when they think energy beings? Opinions please


#16

I think of Q from Star Trek.


#17

same that @fantom I love next generation lol


#18

He has a funny hat…


#19

I was referring to what they might look like.


#20

I think in a light flows of energy glowing in the dark