First of all, I would like to thank you all for your interest.
This demo is the first chapter of my novel, The Witch of Reimden.
Link: https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/s/shzblyrjksyho92/The%20Witch%20of%20Reimden.html?dl=0
This story is set in a world which resembles the medieval Northwestern Europe around the 10th century, and it is the story of a rural landlord’s young heir, who tries to save his community from a sinister witch.
The protagonist of the story, Gert of Reimden is not a superhero. He is just a landlord, an educated fellow, that’s true, but still not a hero. He has his merits and faults. Your choices in this first chapter determine his abilities and your options to solve problems and mysteries later in the game.
Please note that there is no option to change the gender or the sexual orientation of the protagonist. This decision looked like the best choice for these settings. It’s a medieval story, and while the case of Edward II of England or Isabella of France is widely known, Gert is not a monarch, just a young rural gentleman in a world, where religion and traditional values dominate everybody’s life.
Feedback is appreciated with thoughts on the game, characters, grammar, spelling, typos, low readability etc.
EDIT: Thank you all for your very useful feedback and suggestions. Much appreciate the time you have taken. This is a WIP, ofc it isn’t flawless and I really enjoyed to read your replies.
About your concerns of being “rude”; I am not a masochist, but not sugarcoat your opinion in this case is the most helpful thing to do. This chapter is cca. the 15% of the whole story and I wanted to know your opinion in this early phase, so it it is better if it’s not sugarcoated. I will try to answer your comments asap.