um so far all leart is he/she wants get back they memories as well as apartly revenge .
Wait has there been an update? The last one is shown in 2021?
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Don’t think so, 5 chapters.
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maybe there busy they have real life stuff to do cant always work on this nonstop, plus its now 2022 so there proble be a update on chapter 6 eventually when they have the time do write it out.
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Both and neither? You seem to see a contradiction here that I don’t.
You’re neither a god nor a normal human being, but you’re a person. A fallible, imperfect being. Substantially more powerful than most and with the potential to grow to untold heights, but still an individual with their moments of weakness. Hopes and desires to fulfill, flaws and circumstances to overcome.
I don’t see a clear separation between these two elements of the character you’ve identified, neither do I think clearly deciding between the two as a fundamental question, nor that it HAS to be decided. They are coming to terms with their new nature and the infinite potential slowly revealing itself to them, meanwhile also having to fight more “mundane” battles like… determining their place in the universe, the reason they go on and fight… and such.
Soon™
Am working on it
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Oh but you speak the truth, but I am a near-sighted bum with a chipped tooth!
BD must have his way, but I will not tolerate it, NO WAY!!
Your words are that of a sage, but I consider myself a hedonistic mage.
Reading your reprimand, I’m prone to cry!
But unfortunately, I’ve drunk myself dry!
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have a pie 
for that excellent rhyme! 
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Thank you, thank you, mighty kind of you.
Thank ye , thank ye!
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nice love the Rap poem 10/10.
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take your time not good rush things.
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first chapter nitpicks
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Name: *forgotten
Kin: Human?
Weapon: *lost
Just a bump, bugged me how they were uncapped, when the rest are
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Skills: Abilities:
Templar *ressources:
Is that one of your Europeanisms?
It consumed me, slowly, I could feel It, it gnawed at me every time taking more. The presence within the endless dark was losing its patience. Yet, just as It drew near, from*
so it is capitalized at point where it’s not the starting sentence which may be brushed off as a stylistic thing but in that circumstance there is an uncapped it too
*I cracked my neck my reflex, and braced my hands on the surface.
by
Large beams of metal, were sticking out of its edge, rusted by time they were broken when I pushed the lid. Those were used to make sure the lid wouldn’t be taken off.
don’t think the comma after large beams of metal is needed since you just said a subject especially since it is the subject related to the next part
Large beams of metal, were sticking out of its edge, rusted by time they were broken when I pushed the lid. Those were used to make sure the lid wouldn’t be taken off.*
also the comma of before, jumping
It was a ruthless, dishonorable idea.
Isn’t there the ou in dishonorable in your tongue?
An hecatomb
I think this a since it’s a consonant sound. Although 'm not entirely sure on this one.
And I tire now, so I will resume this later.
to destroy doors
Wherever I am at the moment
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Someone has to.
One of the cases where the american version is closer to the french version, déshonorable. I think i’ve been a bit inconsistent with this anyway. One day I’ll have to take a look at it to make sure I use the same version all the time.
Oui!
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What word from the abyss?
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I really love this! And I’m hoping to see more of this
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Caught a cold and my brain reached meltdown. After that I wrote a bit of everything. I have 5k words for a Shattered chapter, 15k for chapter 6 of the wight king and I’m not finished yet, wrote ahead for other things.
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proble wont til the next update last one was in 2021
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hope you get better soon try taking Chicken soup its good for you body in helping it fight of the cold usually 100 percent works something about helping your antibodies fight the cold granted i not caught a cold in ages but genuary chicken soup is a local know for good when you catch a cold…
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I have crawled out of my cave to wish happy holidays to you all.
Edit: Also made an update to Shattered if anyone is interested.
(WIP) Shattered : update - chapter 2 added (27/12/2022) - #90
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The new chapter has been uploaded in this update. It’s mostly just new content since I’m not finished working on new systems and how to integrate them in the story. I think I’ll release those new systems in another version of this chapter made specifically to test it.
Anyway I hope you will enjoy it and please tell me what you think about it.
Belated happy new year!
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Great way to start 2023, thank you bl00dragon.
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