New WIP. Love the name. I’ll enjoy this. Perfectly balanced, as all things should be.
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@Beaterxys I love the name too! And I hope that it’ll be as balanced I want it to be, lol 
Sometimes I can get overboard. But I’ll give it my best!
Also, Chapter 4 will be uploaded in a few hours, so I hope that you’ll keep enjoying the game after that drops! Fingers crossed 
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I shall be glued to my screen in anticipation.
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CHAPTER FOUR IS OUT!
I have updated the demo, and I have to say, I’ve very satisfied with this! It nearly drove me nuts, but I put in all the options that I wanted to, and I think that the story flows nicely!
Please let me know what you think, and as always, if you find any bugs, please let me know!
Have fun!
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welp. here I go. im so pumped for this ughhhh
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@Dyselxic Ehehee, now I’m getting nervous Hope it was worth the wait!
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you made my day it all most my birthday in 5 days so this best read for it 
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Holy shit, what a monster of a chapter. That was awesome! The only thing to be disappointed in is that there isn’t going to be more in the demo! I’m gonna have to wait for the full game before we interact with Eledwen or get our soul weapons but I’m sure it’ll be worth the wait.
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Love the new update. Question tho, is Morkai RO path shorter than Straasa? Cus when i play Straasa RO path, they are longer than Morkai which end abruptly with Straasa looking at mc worriedly.
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PWPWOSKEIEIDJDJ i need more 
I’ll admit that i was a bit disappointed, but that’s just because I was left hanging and I expected to get to the actual soul stone picking part, but other than that, it was great! I love it! Especially that near-kiss with Morkai :<< That lil shit didn’t give me my reward.
found some typos and errors :>
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Wait so is this the last update?
@No_This_Is_Patrick Can you please tell me what your relationship stats are? I think the problem’s got something to do with that.
@Hani_Fina Of dear, that cuts off waaaay before it is supposed to! 
Can you please tell me what your relationship bar with Straasa is when that happens?
I was so excited for chapter 4 but I only finished the first two before I got too sleepy to continue. I’ll have to complete it first thing tomorrow.
List of spelling/grammar corrections:
Verb Tenses
Chapter One
Of course, you had seen neither hide nor hair of them in about two weeks, but it was way too soon to hope that they had given up on their search. Dorlas wouldn’t just let you get away so easily, you just knew it. That guy always had it out for you for some reason.
"but it is way too soon to hope that they have given up on their search. Dorlas won’t just let you get away so easily, you just know it. That guy always has it out for you for some reason.
It was a good thing you got a day’s head start on your pursuers. Your gut instinct to the rescue once again. That, and your kindly neighbor. You owed that man a lot. Hopefully one day you’d be able to repay him for his kindness.
“It is a good thing” “You owe that man a lot. Hopefully one day you’ll be able to repay him for his kindness”
Now it was time for you to go. According to your old map, it would be about another day’s ride to the nearest village. Shar’s Port. From there you could hire a boat to take you across the bay. Next stop: the border. If you could just skip countries, you’d be safe.
“Now it is time for you to go.” “it will be about another day’s ride” “From there you can hire a boat” “If you can just skip countries, you’ll be safe.”
Not even Dorlas would chase after you then. Hopefully. How you’d be able to cross the border checkpoint was another thing entirely, but you’d cross that bridge once you got to it
“Not even Dorlas will chase after you then. Hopefully. How you’ll be able to cross the border is another thing entirely, but you’ll cross that bridge once you get to it.”
As soon as you reached the trees and settled behind a close-knit bunch, the sound of hoofbeats reached your ears.
“As soon as you reach the trees” “the sound of hoofbeats reach your ears.”
Unless they’re brigands of course. Then it wouldn’t matter either way.
“Then it won’t matter either way.”
And your cheapskate mayor was willing to fork out coin to get you? They really wanted you dead then. Dead or alive, that’s a pretty final thing to say about someone. There was no home for you anymore.
“And your cheapskate mayor is willing to fork out coin to get you? They really want you dead then.” “There is no home for you anymore.”
Chapter Two
You ran and ran as if the very hounds of hell were upon you. Your poor Faith was dripping with sweat and exhaustion, and still, you pushed on. No matter how much your entire body ached, no matter how you were barely holding on your saddle, fighting tooth and nail to stay on top of it.
“You run and run as if the very hounds of hell are upon you. Your poor Faith is dripping with sweat and exhaustion, and still, you push on. No matter how much your entire body ached, no matter how you are barely holding on your saddle”
Dorlas was on your tail. You knew it. You felt it. And the desperation that came with the knowledge nearly drove you insane. You rode through the day, making no stops whatsoever, right to the point you thought you would faint and then past that too.
“Dorlas is on your tail. You know it. You feel it. And the desperation that comes with the knowledge nearly drives you insane. You ride through the day, making no stops whatsoever, right to the point you think you will faint”
But even if they agreed to that, they would ask you to do something in return, mop the floors, sweep the tables, something. And you were barely standing upright as it was.
“But even if they agree to that, they will ask you to do something” “And you are barely standing upright as it is.”
The thug’s friends. This was it. You are done for. After all this time, after the bounty-hunters on the roads, and it was this that would get you. Thieves in Shar’s Port that were after a satchel filled with a waterskin, some flint and the remains of your travel rations.
“This is it.” “and it is this that will get you. Thieves in Shar’s Port that are after a satchel”
Did you know these men. Then the pieces click
“Do you know these men?” It also needed a question mark
Other
But he hasn’t started laughing at me to my face, so you take it as a good sign.
“me to my” should be “you to your”
You don’t even have enough to pay for your donkey to spend the night at the local stables.
“Donkey” should be “mule”
If this thug has friends with him, you have no way of knowing. Not that you have any chances anyway, one thing or many.
I think “one thing” is meant to be “one thug”
“Bad move, squirt,” you hear them say menacingly, then the sound of weapon getting unsheathed fills the air.
Either "the sound of a weapon if the thug is the only one unsheathing or “the sound of weapons getting unsheathed” if the thug’s friends are also unsheathing.
Also this thug was previously refered to as he/him but is now being called they/them
Your donkey follows slowly after you.
“Mule”
“Straasa?” you murmur confused, your mind not keeping up with the situation, your mind catching on to details belatedly.
The repeated “your mind” makes the sentence awkward. Removing one of them would make it flow better
Yet one thought plagues you— what about the donkey?
“Mule”
How do you know that, you ask? Well, that is only excellent question to which you can give no answer.
“Only” should be “an”
Your quick breathing hasn’t subsided, your emotions still in disarray, frantic, telling to move already!
Should be “telling you to move already!”
That they cornered men are still alive and fighting is a testament to their prowess.
“They” should be “the”
Your first priority is to leave this inn and find your donkey.
“Mule”
It’s not what you think, it can’t be, he’s just curious what has so upset, it’s…
“what has you so upset”
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This is my second time playing in Morkai romance path and it stop at here
But so far Straasa romance path and Straasa and Morkai romance path(poly relationship) also Morkai and Daelynn romance path(also poly) run smoothly and i love it! Keep up a good work 
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Stray code
Straasa is sitting next to {name_mule}, his posture hunched over, his head hanging between his knees.
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Oh my gosh YES!!! This update is amazing!!! I absolutely love it! 
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@Takashi_Shin I hope it makes for a nice birthday gift!
@grimbutnotalways I know, right?! It was huuuge! It’s basically two chapters crammed in one! But I had fun with it 
Sorry there won’t be more until the book comes out
@Hani_Fina Thank you for all your bug finding! I think I have fixed everything! Please give it another go and let me know? THANK YOU AGAIN!
@JakRatchet @Caspiera Awesome! Thank you, I fixed it!
@Dyselxic Thank you for the bug finding, I believe I have fixed everything! But yeah, I love ending things with cliff-hangers, lol. Prepare yourself for that Also, I’m afraid you’re still a ways off from claiming your Soul Sone… That’ll actually be closer to the end of the book! You have to suffer for it first, you know? 
@Luvvguilty Yeah, I’m afraid this is it for the demo. Next stop, the rest of the book!
@SamCornick Oh man, this is excellent work! I’m so happy I could cry! You’re a gift from the universe, THANK YOU 
(You wouldn’t be interested in beta-testing for me, would you? Cause that would be awesome! )
@Vashnik THANK YOU, I have corrected it! It was missing an $ before the {name_mule}. These little symbols are gonna be the death of me…
@Alexia9848 AHHH, I’M SO HAPPY YOU LIKED! I poured my literal soul into making it, hahaha
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