CLOSED : After the first round of beta tests, I failed to get feedback from most testers. I was under the impression there would be more feedback. At this rate there’s really no point in a second round, so there won’t be one. Sorry to all who were waiting!
Hello!
My game is currently titled “The Necromancer”, but it is subject to change. I haven’t gotten around to brainstorming anything better just yet.
It’s currently in the revision phase, resting at about 126,000 words of code and text combined.
The story is about your journey to a place where Necromancy thrives. Your unique magic makes you the perfect person for this post, but also a great target. You will unveil a prophecy that makes you question your own desires. Along the way you will be escorted by interesting (hopefully) comrades, some more loyal than others.
Things to look at:
- I have very little experience with nonbinary genders (is this the right term?), and if I am not doing it correctly please let me know. I tried to include some transgender options, and one completely undefined. If I wrote anything offensive, please tell me.
- I tried to have some acknowledgement for transgender players when they choose their romance path. Please let me know if it’s realistic enough or too cheesy.
- Do you feel that there is value to making different choices?
- Are the stats too impacting or not impacting enough?
- Does Donovan seem to be his own person? Is he interesting enough?
- Do the endings feel forced or rushed?
- Do you feel as though you’ve gotten to know the characters?
- Does the relationship with the player’s (your) father feel unnaturally strange and distant? Or does it not matter?
- While I’m not looking for grammar mistakes, if you see anything big that can’t be left as is, please let me know. I’ve been known to overuse commas, but I did try to be careful with my use of them in this story.
- I am also looking for pronoun errors. I’ve found some already, but it’s hard to feel certain I’ve found them all.
- So, I did a “find and replace all” without taking good measure to protect other words. I used the word “magi”. I’ve been finding a whole bunch of errors. If you see anything with a capital “M” in the middle of some strange word, please let me know.
So, I believe I have to give each person their own link while using DashingDon. Please send me a private message if you’d be willing to beta test.
As a note, I feel that this story could use a lot of work. So I am terribly sorry if it falls short of any expectations.
Thank you in advance! 
CLOSED : After the first round of beta tests, I failed to get feedback from most testers. I was under the impression there would be more feedback. At this rate there’s really no point in a second round, so there won’t be one. Sorry to all who were waiting!
