Hey everyone, i just started my first demo and i want your feedbacks. This game now only consist of a short prologue and i want to know your thought about the game. Here is the demo; CoGDemos. Thanks!
Right now, the demo is a bit too short to really give an opinion. My advice would be to post a synopsis on your opening post, so we might have a better idea of what kind of story youāre writing.
Very small detail, but you might want to provide a few feminine ādefaultā names for the players picking that gender. Aside from Alex that can work for both, itās clear the default assumption right now is a male MC given the suggested first names.
Thank you for your feedbacks Talyrion
The transition to the classroom was a little abrupt. But superpower stories are aways welcome.
You could, I donāt know, throw some āogre battleā style questions to the player to make the story more interactive. I dunno.
Anyways whats your goal here, āmodernā supe story? (itās dark) Or light-hearted? Mysterious, or classy silver age superhero style??
Helps to get a feel kn how the world is, so we can be wholesome in an word of dakrness. Or Grimderp in a cartoon superhero show world lol, this will help we, the readers, to connect with our M.C. ( also you can addy sume options that reflect motivations, desires, and fearsā¦
Make shorter paragraphs and space them out to better read, use page_breaks and better define whats happening.
Add female names.
Too short to say anything about the content. Id call this an alpha if anything.
Definitely need summary
I donāt see any major problem in the demo itself, it looks like a fine start. A decent chunk of the paragraphes could use to be seperated into smaller paragraphes Iād say.
You should probably rewrite your opening post with a synopsis and features (Just copy pasting the standard opening post format should be fine) to get more people to try the demo.
Thank you for your feedback. What i had in my mind is a modern superpower story where both magic and technologies can co-exist together, but overall, itās all still messy ideas.
Thank you for your feedback
Noted!
Thank you for your kind words . Still searched for an idea about the synopsis, though