This is very exciting! I can’t wait for more.
I have too many things I want to say.
Feel free to say them! (Even the bad ones…)
This seems really awesome, and if I may ask, how gory do you plan on making it?
18 plus gory and 67890 pounds of blood @insane_Inferno
I love this wip its dark and grimyits amazing
Oh, the irony.
Nice story, by the way.
You want something actually constructive?
I enjoy the way this is written. Although it seems just a tad over the top, it was still an immensely wonderful (and different) read - so, thank you.
I look forward to seeing where this story goes next; I will definitely be following this story.
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Well I suppose the suitors wouldn’t be lining up to hop in bed with someome bleeding from every orifice, but hey I won’t judge. Lol
Only 67890 pounds? There’s always room for more.
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I don’t say this often. But this us SO my kinda game. Twisted.
There are so many little things one can do. The potential for mind bending is rather staggering (something I personally love to do as a psychology enthusiast).
SO hoping and waiting for an in possibly flexible performer. Reclining in the sun legs twisted into the shape its own disfigured chair while doing a crossword puzzle “These things always tie me into knots for hours! Hey I know!Why don’t you try?!” Leaving the MC unsure if it means the tied into knots part or the puzzle. Then jumps the MC and proceeds to twist them into the shape of a balloon animal.
Long story short. Luv your work.
Though a little more clarity in MC choices would be lovely. I second that cote (pretty sure it was mentioned). Good stuff either way.
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Well, one of your possible traits is to bleed non stop, does that give an idea? 
I don’t know how much, but I guess by the end of chapter 2 I will have shown just how violent the game can be?
@jonnyboy666 thanks! 
@Eleckar thank you! 
But what do you mean by “over the top”? 
@MrPockets nuu! The bleeding is from every skin pore, not orifice! I laughed too much at the confusion, sorry 
And who knows, maybe someone likes to get messy!
@Snoe maybe you will find (soon) a worker of your tastes! I have a lot of characters to introduce in next chapter, and I think you will like a set of sisters 
And yes, I will work on the MC creation! 
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I know one of these 
subtle wink wink nudge nudge
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Hahaha guess who is it
Santa Claus and his elfin helper…
The bleeding from every pore does paint a good picture on the gore, but my favorite has to be either the hole in the chest or the living porcelain doll.
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Well, if you want me to be a tad more specific, in next chapter we are going to see someone popping eyeballs and other things I can think of.
To be honest, my favorite trait is the “hollow” one, but alas, I can’t favour any of them, it wouldn’t be fair
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@lycoris AH! Even better! Sorry for my misunderstanding. 
That sounds awesome, if you want help with anything gory I could help.
Love the game so far, the mood is set out to be ominous and I think it goes in favor with what you are set to accomplish. I am reminded of Kuroshitsuji (Black Butler: Book of Circus) and The Devil’s Carnival while playing this, which in my opinion is an honor but if you don’t think that…it’s fine.
I think I’ll PM you the error I found because I tried to do spoiler [spoiler] words [\spoiler] and it didn’t work for me, I swear it looked like everything was right though… shrugs shoulders I don’t know.
They’d be great at pool parties I’d imagine.
@Lycoris I have a very strong feeling that Furor would be into a blood dripping MC and also Dagger wouldent mind the blood i think 