I will start by saying that English is not my first language, French is. Recently I wanted to read a good all fashion western wild wild west genre of story with well balance romance and quests, so I was like, Hey why not write it myself :).
I am not a writer, this is my first time using choice script and also writing something intended for other eyes than mine.
Here’s what the story is about:
Begin your journey as a young rider that ran away from home to start a new life in the western world of Arizona.
Determine your ancestry heritage, play as a male or female, single or poly romance men or women. The statistics of the book will allow you to be liked or feared, you can create trust or distrust with your fellow riders, get injured or stay healthy.
You can get notorious for your actions or stay in the shadows incognito, you will gain skills that define your shooting, riding and archery abilities through the game.
Your decisions define the outcome of failing or succeeding a once in a lifetime holdup. You will get to decide to permanently join a group of outlaws or be on the right side of the law as a deputy Sheriff of a small town.
If you feel like this is a story for you, saddle up and start riding.
To play the demo, go here: The Burning Sun
Please check it out and let me know your thoughts about it.
I am trying to have the MC heritage included and I don’t want to story or some sentence to come out insensitive or inappropriate, so if you see something like that, please advise on the best way to word it.
Let me know if there is:
- Too much wordings (like too much dialogue or prologue too long)
- Not enough choices
- Not enough stats
- Plots inconsistencies
- There too many typos and grammatical error
Overall just let me know if I should stop and forget about it or… is it worth continuing