AWWWWWW I love the little POV at the end def going to replay with different gender combos
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My god. You made my evening. Nice day at work with my friendly coworkers (no this isnt sarcastic xD) and now even the second chapter of one my favourite new IFs! Wish you have a lot of good things in your life! 
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“Thank you for teaching me how to play your game” Lux says. Boy, you have no idea how to play my game…
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Omg this has never happened to meeeee, a chapter of one of my favorite stories coming out earlier than excepted instead of later?!?!? Aaaaaaaa I’m so excited, now I know what I’m going to do this evening, thank you 
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Super excited to see an update today on Tumblr! I love the pov at the end 
can’t wait to see their relationship evolve.
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I only noticed two minor errors in my playthrough:
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The little POV at the end was something that occured to me toward the end of writing chapter 2, but I’m glad it did. A little insight into Lux’s head now, I think, is going to benefit chapter 3!
I’m glad to have made your evening a bit better! One of your favorite new IFs is high praise, I hope you enjoyed the chapter 
Lux might have a bit of a gremlin on his hands with your MC XD. Which is awesome, because he’ll love that.
Haha, I’m glad I managed to get it out sooner as opposed to later. Thanks for taking the time to read!
The POV at the end there seems to be popular XD. If you can’t wait to see their relationship, you’ll be happy to know that judging by my plans atm, chapter 3 is pretty Lux-MC heavy. This is going to be where their friendship really takes off, which I’m looking forward to writing!
Thanks for pointing these out, I’ll fix them once I get the chance.
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Nice! I was curious about something. I checked. After I found out about it.
I really want to keep an eye out on this one.
I find it weird they think a balance to pick a cow to kill is divinity instead of physics.
Loving it!
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I’m really liking this so far, especially the MC’s family dynamics- they’re all such lovely, well rounded characters that I enjoy interacting with. All your characters actually, feel very real.
Here are some spelling/grammar things I noticed.
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He shrugs his shoulders. “I love my mother, of course, but yes, absolutely. The women she entertains are a cutthroat bunch, you say the least. And worse, they have no pride. They grovel before my mother and cleave to her for favor. It’s dreadfully boring.” (should be “to say the least.”)
Lux must catch your displeasure, because he kisses his teeth (perhaps this is a familiar gesture/term where you are, but I’m unsure how someone kisses their own teeth? Did you mean hisses through his teeth? Or maybe pursing his lips? I was confused and thought others might be as well.)
Several skylights filters in warm sunlight, and painted glass windows are set into the far wall. (should be filter)
He groans out loud and rubs at his face. He has to set this right somehow. Has to set this right. (I’m unsure of the purpose of the repetition of the last two sentences, or if the last sentence was supposed to be deleted and was simply overlooked.)
“If you will excuse my, my lord,” he says, “I must speak with my son.”
His eldest born seems to wild beneath the force of his stare. (the first “my” should be “me” and wild should be wilt)
It seems at court might give you more trouble than you originally thought. (I’m unsure if there’s something missing at the beginning of this sentence, or if “at” simply needs deleted)
His skin is leather-spotted in the way that an old man’s is, and deep wrinkles map his face. (age spots are also called liver spots, not leather-spots)
Lux rolls her eyes. “I’m sure lord Florian has heard worse,” she says, “I was hardly that rude.” (Lord should be capitalized before the MC’s name)
Shame is something she already feels all too accutely, her mother makes yre if that. (should be acutely and sure)
Congrats on releasing another wonderful chapter!
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Definitely will be following this, so far so good!
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The Faith of the Balanced is extremely superstitious, and the Ritual of the Scales is definitely an example of that. People see divinity in many things.
Thanks for playing!
I’m glad that you’re liking the MC’s family! They’re definitely one of my favorite parts of the game to write, and as time goes on Eulen and Sonya especially will be quite important. I’m also very glad that my characters feel real. That’s something ever author wants to hear! I put a lot of attention into them and I’m glad that seems to be paying off.
And ah, more typos 
. Thanks for pointing them out, I’ll add them to my list of corrections to make.
Eyy, thanks friend!
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I keep running out of hearts to give! Ugh!
So
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Enjoyed the update!
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Wish there could be a third option like being done with it, or better yet - already be plotting how to break the engagement lol
mostly gender errors and double passages
You might not be royalty, but you have something called self—respect. You are the Calista zi’il Rauz, the mc_son of Lord Alaric and Lady Eulia of Sweetsong Keep. You will not roll over and grovel at the feet of a rude boy who wants to treat you how he did.
Leftover variable not coded
You slide into the seat beside Lux. She regards you with a barely disguised glare. He glances at you out of the corner of your eye, but says nothing.
Should be he
Tutor Aldrin smiles. “Well done, my lady,” he says, “you are exactly correct!” Lux shoots you an impressed look. Lux makes a scoffing noise, but even she can’t refute your words.
Should be he and double Lux looking at MC?
Tutor Aldrin continues on with his lessons for another two hours, reciting more history from the Third Tarasi-Valetni War. You do your best to pay attention, and find the concepts extremely fascinating. All the while, Lux hardly even deigns to look in your direction. All the while, Lux throws the occasional glare your way.
Lux is really not subtle huh…
Eulen’s eyebrows raise in concern at your silence. At the mention of Lux, your mood only grows worse. The reminder of her hostility makes you grind your teeth.
Should be he
You can only hope that your lessons with him tomorrow prove to be less frustrating.
You can only hope that your lessons with him tomorrow prove to be less frustrating.
So frustrating lmao
Tutor Aldrin, you learn, has fallen ill. It isn’t deathly, you are assured, but he will not be able to teach you. Rather than attending lessons with another teacher, you and Lux are to be brought to Lady Isolde as she takes tea with several other court ladies.
You stand outside of her chambers beside Lux, waiting to be announced. You glance at him out of the corner of your eye. He’s dressed well today, in a green doublet and black tunic, and black breeches. His shoes are leather, it looks like, and he keeps a dagger at his waist, by his belt.
Her way of dress takes you by surprise. You knew beforehand that King Caius allows her a certain measure of freedom rare amongst girls of your status — the entire reason she was late to the feast where you met is because she’d been sparring, after all — but to dress so blatantly like a boy still makes you blink.
Even your own parents, who are relatively open-minded, would not let you dress so much like the opposite sex. At least, not without some form of push back.
Lux must notice you staring, because she turns to you and scowls. “Is there something on my face?” she grits out.
You blink. What?
“No,” you tell her, “there isn’t.”
Her scowl only deepens. “Then stop staring at me,” she grunts, “it’s bad enough I already have to spend my day with my mother and her groveling sycophants, I don’t need you making things worse.”
Lux, as if sensing your eyes on him, turns to you. A polite smile is fixed onto his face.
Passage for F!Lux mixed with M!Lux
Lux stiffens at her mother’s words. “I’m not late that often, Mother,” she mutters.
Lady Isolde frowns at her. “You are late often enough to cause me embarrassment.” Her eyes narrow as she takes in her clothing. “And the one day you’re on time, you’re dressed in a boy’s clothes. I don’t know why your father allows you to parade around in such a manner.”
A tension settles over the room, thick and heavy. Some of the other ladies avert their eyes. Others watch with barely contained amusement. None of them look surprised. Is it so common for their mistress to be so sharp with her daughter?
Same as above
Her expression, when you take a glance at it, is cold. There is a slight curl to her lip, a flickering of contempt in her eyes. Her hands are clasped together tightly, and you can see the white in her knuckles. She stares down her nose at Lux, as if her own daughter is an inconvenience.
Who looks at their own daughter like that?
Same
“Yes,” he says, “my father thinks so too.” He straightens and clears his throat, beginning to mimic King Caius. Gravely, he says, “‘Lux, a good king cares for the ambitions of his nobles and the bellies of his peasants, keeping them satisfied is paramount.’ That’s what he’s always told me.” Lux nods in agreement, as if nothing else could be the case. “Of course it is,” she says, “for as long as I can remember, my father has always spoken about the makings of a good ruler. Making sure there’s food in the bellies of his commoners has always been one of his greatest concerns; he doesn’t want riots. And he is wise for that.”
Her suddenly agreement, if not near friendliness, takes you by surprise.
Same
It becomes very clear early on that the earlier tension between Lux and Lady Isolde isn’t going anywhere. The mother makes snide, cutting comments to her daughter constantly. It’s done in a subtle fashion, always worded in a way style that gives her potential immunity and reasonable denial. But you pick up on all the same, as does everyone else in the room.
“If you spent half as much time practicing with a needle as you do with a blade, we might make a lady of you yet.”
“You spend so much time in men’s clothes, you’d think I had a son rather than a daughter.”
Doesn’t mix with the passage for M!Lux but should have been switched
As Lady Isolde begins to explain their designs and meanings, you’re aware of a gaze boring a hole into you. You turn just a little and see Lux staring at you with wide eyes. Her hands curl further around her tea cup and she nods at you ever so slightly.
For the rest of the tea session, her eyes don’t leave you.
Should have been M!Lux
Everyone goes their separate ways. As you prepare to return to your family, Lux stops you. “My lady,” he says, “thank you for teaching me how to play your game. It was wonderful. We’ll have to play again soon.”
I’m gessing that this part was switched with the F!Lux passages (game really wanted me to replay them 
)
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Glad to hear it 
This definitely shouldn’t be happening and it’s so frustrating that it is . Thanks for pointing it out, I’ll take a look at it tomorrow and try to find the root of the problem. I can feel the impending headache already rip.
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Patched Chapter 2 Up
Hey guys, I wanted to let you know that the patched version of chapter 2 is up. It should be free of all bug errors (if it’s not, i might actually sob) and typos. I’ve added a bit of padding to the Lux tea scene with Isolde, though it isn’t a ton. I’ve also added Elysia as a name for the f!MC, which will have specialized content throughout the game. There’s a bit of flavor text for it in chapter 1, but nothing too major yet.
Anyway, yeah! Here it is. Thanks for your patience, and I’m looking forward to continuing working on the game
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Okay that’s cool name I think I’ll use that name later when I replay the story.
Btw let us know if there is specific flavor with names surely want to try that out.
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interesting
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I’m glad you like the name! All of the pre-set MC names will offer flavor text at some point or another, but the choice of Elysia is the only one that will have actual consequences in the story. It involves Isolde specifically reacting to the MC – and their relationship with Lux – differently.
Edit: I forgot to mention that if you’re playing with the pre-set name Nadra, Sonya will name her future son after the MC. If you’re playing with the pre-set name Florian, Eulen can name one of his potential daughters after the MC.
Hopefully it’ll only get more interesting as time goes on
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So far, interesting. Our siblings are sweet; playing as a female MC, I especially liked the differing dynamics of Sonya teaching MC how to be an independent and strong young lady while Eulen was protective and encouraging. I was a little hesitant to play a game that utilizes a single, mandatory RO and you’ve done a great job (at least from the one playthrough I just did) at presenting Lux as a viable option for different personalities. Looking forward to see how this prophecy trope develops!
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