Sorcerer Combat: Atomica (WIP) (Update 4/9/2024)

[Takashi_Shin]

It’s all right take your time at your own work

[UndescribedNight]

Thanks! Just a lot I want to show, y’know.

See you all on the 25th!

[Christopher_Bull]

So the Mc is doomed to die? Slightly put off already unless we have an option to avoid it. I just hope it’s not star heavy.

[JohnKittz]

Since this takes inspiration from jjk I’m wondering if watching it will help me understand this world better?

[bored93]

Most likely it will but JJK kind of tends to drag things out so it’s up to you. But I’d recommend reading the manga since the anime is… Well waaaay behind at this point

[Tylerif]

Definitely, JJK is my favorite new gen anime so even outside of this story I’d recommend giving it a watch

[Syrwell_Fallenwood]

Yes you will! Watch the film Jujutsu Kaisen 0, a prequel to the story. Then start the first season. You will love it.

[JohnKittz]

I can say after finishing jjk both show and movie this is way more awesome. We are basically gojo of America lol.

fighting Miguel, having gojo be name dropped, toji even mentioned, the fact MC knows they are strong and doesn’t care about threats, atomica reminding me of sakuna, demolishing special grades like nothing.

Dude I cannot wait for more!!!

[Kingjo17]

Is this dropped?

[Syrwell_Fallenwood]

Maybe

[Unknown0001]

I hope not but im subbed to patreon and we got no news since june so maybe. we’re way pass the release dates mentioned without any updates at all even one just mentioning the fact content was supposed to release two months ago. Im all for taking your time and getting things right but not even a small comment or anything is concerning.

[Kingjo17]

True… Any updates will do.

[KarielGrewold]

My honest advice for this would be to proof read your work before updating to new stuff (if you ever get back). Half the time I can’t even tell what is going on as sentences cut off or have words in them that make no sense.

I know this wont be seen as “constructive” criticism, but I honestly dont even want to try reading the small bit I did to get screenshots. Thats how bad the grammar is.

If you can’t seem to see the bad grammar, get someone else to help you. The way it is, it reads like really bad Machine Translation Manhwa.

[TrueRem]

As a fan of JJK who’s been following the manga since the anime dropped, I was pretty surprised to stumble upon this game. Honestly, I thought more people would have created similar ones by now. Anyways I decided to give it a try, and I have to say, my feelings are mixed. The biggest downside for me is the dialogue. Like many others have pointed out, there are tons of grammatical mistakes on almost every page, which can make it hard to follow who’s speaking at times. If the author happens to see this, it would be awesome to get some proofreading help or at least use a grammar tool to catch those obvious errors. It feels like there are so many that I wonder if you’re just worn out by the time you write! But on a serious note, I really dig the concept of being the Gojo of America with our own Sukuna. However, I’m not really connecting with the characters; they seem a bit flat.
What keeps me hooked is wondering how the main character will use their op powers to take down the next foe. Given that this is inspired by JJK, I have high hopes for it and really want the final version to be enjoyable. I also hope this sparks more creativity in the if community because the JJK universe has so much potential. Just think about what could be done with games taking place in a universe like Hunter x Hunter or Fullmetal Alchemist! Overall, it’s an okay read, but I believe it could evolve into something truly amazing. The first step is taking your time with the grammar because that is the biggest turnoff.