Dundee shrugs. "Here’s what I think.
“I see that you know how to make the best of a bad situation—I can tell that Edith didn’t want to lose tonight, likely because she knew that I’d be in the crowd.”
There’s an " missing in the first sentence.
As the fans alternatively gasp and babble, you look around frantically, trying to make out JJ’s form in the darkness, all while a little voice in the back of your head screams: No. No, they woukdn’t—
After the Scaffold Match (I took the belt and gave it to Solitary for a rematch at RoV) I managed to get the rank of -29 and decreasing (I was at -34 before I got to -22 after I won against Solitary). While I’m still deliberating whether this means I’m 29 times better than Solitary or just extremely low-ranked due to sacrificing JJ for the title, I’d still prefer a rank in the positive numbers
Voice-over: (Dame Sagramore) The past is dead. All the matters is the future.
Highlights of Dame Sagramore’s matches in the GWA, interspersed with posed studio shots of Dame Sagramore, standing in what appears to be an airport runway, on a mound of broken glass.]
There’s a bracket at the end of the sentence.
When I can choose between Ecstasy and Rio during the live event and I choose Rio, I get a page where the text and the following summary of the show are displayed at the same time:
JJ smiles, shakes her head, and stands up again. You can hear the crowd chant her name.
Soak it in, Delgado, you think to yourself. All the cheers in the world won’t help once I get my hands on you….
BEST AND WORST OF WEDNESDAY NIGHT WRESTLING: 688
You roll the groggy JJ over and go for the pin.
JJ kicks out and rolls to his feet, although she looks unsteady.
During the final fight, should be “her” instead of “his”.
You sense movement in the ring, and turn to see JJ rising to his feet.
she looks somewhat dazed, still trying to shake off the damage she absorbed during your brutal contest, but she doesn’t look to have suffered any truly dangerous injuries.
“We fought,” JJ says. He spreads her arms wide. “That’s all I ever really, truly wanted. I wanted us to get into a ring, and put everything on the line, fight without holding back, fight at our peak physical condition, fight until one of us was down for the count.”
“Listen,” JJ says. “Listen to that ovation.” She takes your hand in her and places it over your heart.
I think it should be “hers” instead of “her”. The connotion would otherwise seem a bit… wrong