To be fair, you have an intense hatred for the majority of the characters in all my stories. 
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That is a really good stuff and a hint there is a great writer. English has modern era a problem that is want make all villains loveable and make everyone love all characters. That was never how it went literature. You have characters to love others to hate some makes you laughing others cry or othsrs just make you wonder. In Spanish at least in writing you are say to provoke emotions and feelings into people. Intense love. Hatred. Empathy mystery. Fear… Always you generate emotional reactions means you are a good writer. The bad writer is the one that doesn’t trigger emotions of desires in public. If you read something and you don’t feel anything That’s not art that’s a paper with symbols on it.
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I definitely agree! I’m not salty or anything, haha. Thanks.
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I am saying that because I had that same conversation with many authors here. Some mostly youngsters. Felt discouraged but all the fact their characters caused negative emotions as Hatred. Fear…
When They should feel proud of causing those emotional impact into readers. But I came from a culture that is based in passion contrast of characters personality. And antagonism.
Anyone that has seen a latino novela or soap opera or The Mexican lucha libre stories where heels are as famous as face xould notice. So the cultural shock i had when people thought I was criticising @JimD for instance. When I was praising his writing skills.
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Not sure if anyone has mentioned this or not, but this part actually sounds a lot like the movie “I Know What You Did Last Summer”… or, at least I think that’s the name of the movie 
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Yup, that’s the name of the movie and yes the general synopsis is pretty much the same.
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Sooooooooooo, is anyone actually falling for the whole “car going 10 mph and kills someone” bit 
? I’m sorry if I sound like a bitch right now, but that is just so… unrealistic to me! I would be more likely to believe it if it were 20-30 mph. Maybe even 15 mph! But 10 mph is practically a crawl!
Edit: Also, about the whole “chugging” the vodka part, is it wise to have the female MC exposing herself like that and people barely reacting to it? I mean the way it was written, at first I thought I accidentally chose the male MC instead of the female. And then when I went back and actually chose the male one, it was identical to the female one. Shouldn’t it be a little different? Like, have the female one wearing a bra or something, and/or having one of the other characters give her a shirt/sweater to have her cover up the fact that she only has a bra on (assuming she has one on)
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My justification is that we’re to assume she’s wearing a bra and she’s close enough with the others that it’s not really weird. Beside, I’m pretty sure all of them are either drunk or high, so it wouldn’t be that weird for her to take her shirt off. Speaking from experience, I have hung out with a lot of crazy drunk people and two girls I was drinking with (spoilered for nudity) literally pulled their boobs out to compare nipples right in front of me and they didn’t have a problem with it. It’s not entirely unrealistic (although it certainly speaks to the strength of the group’s friendship lol).
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@trevers17 Honestly, I’m still a bit of a skeptic, but mostly because I’ve never been in a scenario like or similar to that. It’s just so bizarre to me that it sounds like it could only happen in the movies 
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spoilsport…
if it changed…then I officially make a request to let my mc to free tha Twins! 
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@VioletHikari That specific instance was incredibly out there for me haha. I actually didn’t expect it to happen at all. But stuff like that definitely can happen.
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I know, I’m a prude 
, I don’t drink or smoke so I could never accurately imagine myself in a scenario like this. I just think that we should have the option to cover up or, as @E_RedMark so eloquently stated;
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You do have to take in the fact that the car hydroplaned, granted its been a hot minute so i had to actually reread bc for the life of me i couldnt remember but make/type of car as well which is an SUV. At least thats how i see it bc even hydroplaning in a 2003 mustang that has a smaller frame (compared to the newer models) is a scary experience even at 10mph. Hydroplaning in an SUV you have to imagine even if they hit something stationary like a tree there would be some serious damage to that tree from the frame of the car let alone a squishy hooman getting hit 
Also #freethenips 
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Lots of people have mentioned that. I never watched the movie but apparently I need to!
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Chapter One was very rushed because I wrote about half of it during work, lol. So I probably skipped over a few small details, like where I wanted to have Tariano start speeding up a bit before the man runs out into the road.
Also, the deluge and gravel road certainly wouldn’t help. I’ve skidded on gravel before and I legitimately thought I was going to die. The car went everywhere, almost like I was trying to do donuts.
That’s another detail I missed. I meant to have Felicia give the MC a jacket to wear. But as Trever said, the female MC would be wearing a bra, so she’d actually be showing less than she would at a swimming pool.
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Sigh…
there goes my pervy cutscene…
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We both know his statement is very subjective and not always true. Some swimsuits cover a lot and some bras … well you know. So, I guess what I am saying here is use your imagination. 
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well Doh…
of course I’m lol . But still…
The teenager in meh…is dissapointed…
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Pshh, I’m 24 in July and I’m still like a teenager, lol.
And come to think of it, I probably shouldn’t watch I Know What You Did Last Summer until I’ve finished Skeletons. Apparently the premise is already very similar, so I don’t want to take too much inspiration from it.
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You make me feel old lol
It’s a good movie, but damn . I saw it ages ago lol I don’t even remember all the details .
well you could watch it to make sure, it doesn’t come out too similar as well . But it’s your call in the end 