I will possibly change some things, that number included. But thank you for pointing that out!
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Just finished the demo and color me intrigued. A bit early for me to be sure on this one but I see some potential here, I think I’ll be keeping an eye on this one.
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I really like this. The idea of playing a disabled MC. This whole thing is intriguing. Looking forward to the updates in the future.
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5% is actually a pretty large percentage for people being born with rare powers, its 1 in every 20 people.
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This is now in my top 5 favorite WIPs
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I see…Means I’ll have to tweak some numbers then.
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Really like the story so far. It is probably nothing. But the island with forest some what gave me the impression of it being the same forest as the one were the foster family had lived.
But so far looking at a good story…
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Thank you for the comment. And the island that basically only has the forest is not the same place where the foster family lived. The MC has lived in Dawnrow for most of their life.
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Small update!
I added in Dylan and Danja’s drawing, so feel free to check them out if you wish. Also added the word count and changed some numbers. Now, you may also choose to have heterochromia in the eye section (excluding demon route).
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I really enjoyed this demo, especially the prologue. I will definitely be watching this thread.
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Great demo, can’t wait to read more.
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I love the demo so much and your drawing of the Ros are so beautiful 
cant wait to see all of them 
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Super excited for this one!
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It’s interesting
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Love the demo. All I can say is good luck. Writing a game with 6 races and 5 lost senses might be overwhelming. The story is really interesting.
Keep at it.
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Goosh it seems like an interesting game already, maybe the most unique themed story i’ve encountered for a while (i mean, supernatural prison? Daamn). Also, i really like the idea of an MC with the types of difficulties mentioned,original(and i’m just too intrigued in how you are gonna write different paths for them, cheers for you pal:ok_hand:t6:
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So… all in all, i really hope u continue writing this story to the very end, bc i’d honestly cry if we’d lose such a game😢
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It’s only the beginning but I love it Btw, I chose to be deaf but for some reason, it wouldn’t let me
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Oh my, thank you for this! I did some editing yesterday because I saw that one scene was not where it was supposed to be and I guess I did something wrong during it. I will look into it right away.
EDIT: Fixed it!
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When you’re describing the scenery or location you used second or third person view and when interacting you used first person right? Because it would be weird if a blind person could describe another person’s appearance so accurately.
Also in this page is the inmate the player or another person? Because at this point the gender haven’t been established so the pronoun should be ‘them’ not ‘her’
If it’s actually another person then I’m the one who misunderstood
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When describing scenery or someone, I use third person in order to give the reader a better understanding of what’s going on. When it comes to the MC who is blind, I try to be as correct as possible when writing such scenes. And regarding the scene that you have pointed out, both the ‘‘Take her away,…’’ and ‘‘Make her stop.’’ are directed at the female guard, not the MC.
Hope this clears it up. 
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