Reincarnated to Another World - WIP (Almost abandoned)

[Nightgazer]

It’s an isekai, in CYOA form! Praises be!

[JordanQuimby]

Personally I think it would be cool to conquer the world in order to try to make it a better place.

[JordanQuimby]

Here is just a general list of ideas
You could add more races and depending on what you choice depends on how people react to you. So if you choice demon or skeleton race then people will fear you. If you choice elf then people will love your beauty etc etc.

You could add more races (you could watch Overlord for some ideas)

And you could have different play styles that affect the overall story. For example if you are. Mage and demon you can use more powerful magic then if you are let’s say a human.

[Arcane_warrior]

This reminds me of the anime. In another world with my smartphone i loved that cheesy anime.

[TheBlast]

I’m sorry but I have one major case of OCD and reading not redacted stuff is just painfull for me. Maybe later when you update it I can be able to read the demo and give some opinion on it (it’s not like its valid or anything).
As I undesrtand this topic in COG community haven’t been covered yet? Becauce holy guacamole I like reincarneted/teleported to another world manga and ranobe but at the same time it’s really hard to not fall into the pit of cliche’s.
But regardless I wish you good luck with your work!

[KIogenta22]

Interesting concept I think I will watch this closely.

[Yuh-boy_Anto]

Sounds like that kid named Toya. I’m gonna love this

[Aldebaran]

Just like konosuba, overlord and drifter. Also Gate.

[DaisyLee]

I just finished watching Saga of Tanya the evil (youjo senki), so this reminds me of that.
I would be careful with this story, as being reincarnated/sent another world has been done a lot of times (especially in anime/manga). Because of this it’ll be hard to make it not feel generic. You’ll want to add something original to make it feel different. And if that fails you’ll need some really really interesting characters (something you should have anyway).
Anyway I’m looking forward to see how this turns out.

[Ramidel]

@Illusion

and if you fail to meet the standards of either the ending would be the villain killing you or having the world destroyed

If I may suggest, this is a bad idea. Whether the villain can beat you shouldn’t be determined by whether you “qualify” to be a hero or villain. If you don’t actively take the villain route, then a threat will arise and you’ll probably have to either fight back or escape back home.

[JohnnyFive]

Can’t wait to see how this turns out. What kind of classes do you think you’ll add? Just the basics (Warrior/Thief/Mage) or more in-depth ones (Magic Knight,Assassin,Monk,ect)?

[Illusion]

@BoisterousBumblebee

I’d recommend you to reply to multiple users in a single post. (Use the quote feature.) Doesn’t clog the thread as much you see.

Anyways as others have mentioned, do get an editor.
Although that won’t help with your prose, practicing will however!
I’d like to see some more emotion in the narrative scenes.

You could also try padding on the more dull-ish scenes. For example “You ate and walked to your room” to “After a hearty meal you rushed back to your computer almost tripping over your feet. So eager to continue.”

But of course that’s just my preference as it can help to alleviate the mundanity of some scenes.

Anyways, best of luck!

I only joined here and worked at this work for two days so I didn’t know the “Quote” Thingy, but since it appears everytime I highlight something I figured it out, thank you for telling me.

I’ll go get some peoples who would correct my grammar or something because I’m just a kid who doesn’t know that much yet.

about that narrative and emotional scenes, this work is at “0.4” version, means Its not even at 1% yet, I’m planning to fix and add something like that once I reach Demo Version 1.

Thank you for helping me!

I’ll go fix those dull scenes

@Ramidel

If I may suggest, this is a bad idea. Whether the villain can beat you shouldn’t be determined by whether you “qualify” to be a hero or villain. If you don’t actively take the villain route, then a threat will arise and you’ll probably have to either fight back or escape back home.

Seems like a good idea! I’ll be doing that, thank you for the suggestion

@DaisyLee

I just finished watching Saga of Tanya the evil (youjo senki), so this reminds me of that.
I would be careful with this story, as being reincarnated/sent another world has been done a lot of times (especially in anime/manga). Because of this it’ll be hard to make it not feel generic. You’ll want to add something original to make it feel different. And if that fails you’ll need some really really interesting characters (something you should have anyway).
Anyway I’m looking forward to see how this turns out.

I’m planning to do that, I just need to learn some relationship coding first.

@Aldebaran

Just like konosuba, overlord and drifter. Also Gate.

Kind of!

@Yuh-boy_Anto

Sounds like that kid named Toya. I’m gonna love this

I’ll try to meet your expectation XD

@KIogenta22

Interesting concept I think I will watch this closely.

I’ll try to meet your expectation

@TheBlast

I’m sorry but I have one major case of OCD and reading not redacted stuff is just painfull for me. Maybe later when you update it I can be able to read the demo and give some opinion on it (it’s not like its valid or anything).
As I undesrtand this topic in COG community haven’t been covered yet? Becauce holy guacamole I like reincarneted/teleported to another world manga and ranobe but at the same time it’s really hard to not fall into the pit of cliche’s.
But regardless I wish you good luck with your work!

Hmmmmmm… OCD huh… I’ll try to finish or update this as soon as I can, you gave me some motivations

@Arcane_warrior

This reminds me of the anime. In another world with my smartphone i loved that cheesy anime.

Thats my goal > . > I based this in some animes I watched and mangas or light novels I read.

@JordanQuimby

Here is just a general list of ideas
You could add more races and depending on what you choice depends on how people react to you. So if you choice demon or skeleton race then people will fear you. If you choice elf then people will love your beauty etc etc.

You could add more races (you could watch Overlord for some ideas)

And you could have different play styles that affect the overall story. For example if you are. Mage and demon you can use more powerful magic then if you are let’s say a human.

I would, I’m just testing something for a bit

@JordanQuimby

Personally I think it would be cool to conquer the world in order to try to make it a better place.

Its called “Kind Conqueror’s Path” I’m trying to do that

@Nightgazer

It’s an isekai, in CYOA form! Praises be!

I couldn’t see any transported/reincarnated to another world CYOA and I wanted to see one, I’m done waiting so I started making it myself XD

@Robert_Snead

I’m definitely interested in seeing this develop. I’ve had my otaku phase before. In regards to possibly having less interest in the book, due to references in anime culture. I say go for it. Can’t please everyone and at the very least, fellow otakus will really enjoy this. PS. Try not to make this like SAO.

Sword art online isn’t bad (I have broken logic of all anime is good no matter what)

but this is reincarnated/transported to another world its not like Sword art online or overlord where you get stuck in games.

@Bluu9

Looks really cool! I will be watching this one

thank you!

@BoisterousBumblebee

You read the LN?! Mad props, that thing was heavy to read (The Japanese version at least, idk about the eng) it was written in a pretty complicated way I had so much trouble with it.

Anyway this probably wont be too similiar to it

Kind of, theres no way a fourteen years old kid (Me) can write something that good

@Balrog_Demorgothe

Seems like it has potential, i am looking forward to see where it goes ^^

Thank you, I’ll try to make it into your expectations

@Alfred_Melia

Looking forward to your updates it seem intresting so i hope you’ll keep it up.

I’ve got a lot of times because I’m a student (yeah, Its the opposite, I have more time because I’m studying)

[Illusion]

I’m planning to literally all add classes starting from the basics to more in-depth ones, I’ll also add some stuffs I made, thank you for the feed back!

[JordanQuimby]

Also you might want to find a editor who can improve some of the English in the game.

[Robert_Snead]

By saying SAO, I was referring to the cliches of an overpowered character.

[Illusion]

@Robert_Snead

By saying SAO, I was referring to the cliches of an overpowered character.

the protagonist or the other characters? I don’t plan that, you’ll gain your own strength by training or something in game.

@JordanQuimby

Also you might want to find a editor who can improve some of the English in the game.

I already have one… well I think I can trust him with the english or improvements.

[Nahim_Kerman]

You should try “In another world with JUST MONIKA”. It’s interesting even if you never played Doki Doki Literary club.

The author tried to subvert the tropes of the shitty Isekai genre in a genial way. Well I suspect this [reicarnated in another world] got the same feel with the advantage that it will be us in place of the dense protagonist.

I love the fact that we can choose to be the “choosen one” hero trope, the demon Lord/Lady trope or just live peacefully only eating sleeping and sightseeing.

Must add a flavor of replayibility.

Uh. I wonder if you guys know “Common Sense of a Duke’s Daughter” Is the first example I read of a “expert protagonist in another world” since the MC was a Accountant before reborn and implemented cool-ass economic secret jutsu into the game world provoking a major political crisis.

Hey @Illusion! How this class thing will be? You choose one and stick with it to the end, you select like a set of ‘Jobs’ that you can use at same time or you level up until you acess a new improved class?

It will be interesting if you plan this in a way that you can work on each one separated. So if your choosen class does good in support but bad in combat you will be forced to try different ways to solve things each time your play the same route. (Or the opposite! Just be a PUNCH!MAGE Punching your way across friends and foe FTW!) (ò.ó),"

[kingzug]

If we play as a villain are we going to be able to have a fortress (of evil) or some kind of base and do we get an army cause that would be neat because I mildly want to have an Overlord like villain route Overlord as in the show not the creature or profession

Edit: But also the profession

[Illusion]

@kingzug

If we play as a villain are we going to be able to have a fortress (of evil) or some kind of base and do we get an army cause that would be neat because I mildly want to have an Overlord like villain route Overlord as in the show not the creature or profession

Edit: But also the profession

fun thing, you would build that place up, it won’t be already there or something

I’m thinking of making a “Ruins” be rebuilt as a “Heroes Hall” or a “Fortress”

@Nahim_Kerman

Hey @Illusion! How this class thing will be? You choose one and stick with it to the end, you select like a set of ‘Jobs’ that you can use at same time or you level up until you acess a new improved class?

I’m planning to use multiple classes and have some evolutions or improved class.

@Nahim_Kerman

It will be interesting if you plan this in a way that you can work on each one separated. So if your choosen class does good in support but bad in combat you will be forced to try different ways to solve things each time your play the same route. (Or the opposite! Just be a PUNCH!MAGE Punching your way across friends and foe FTW!) (ò.ó),"

Also, you can choose good at everything but you would be “weak” at everything not as strong as someone who focuses on one.

[E_RedMark]

honestly ? the way the game ‘Talk’ to me , is kinda confusing .

for exemple , when I choose my name . It goes to ’ me’ then ‘you’ ?

that may not sound clear , so I’m gonna copy past an exemple :

Was Illusia which is unfortunately my name in real life too, why unfortunate?

Its Because putting your real name in games is a bad habbit

the others could discover your real identity because of that.

I was one of the Beta Testers of Reincarnation Online.

See this line ? ''I was one of the Beta Testers of Reincarnation Online ‘’ ? Who is I ? me the player…or you the narrator ?

other then that , good luck with your story