The Aethershroud Saga: The World Beyond

I’m not good with long passages, so I’m gonna do my best to keep this short. I am attempting to create a fantasy game(Swords and Sorcery style) in a modern(ish) world. I don’t have much so far (it’s only 1,201 words) The background Chapter 0 and the first chapter is all I have done, but I wanted to post it here to see what people think.

The Aethershroud Saga: The World Beyond


The file seems to have a problem

Hope that helps you. Have a wonderful night

Yeah. fixing it now. Like an idiot, I added the game and forgot to upload the files.


It’s fixed.

Bit of a critique; it was hard to know who exactly was speaking at times. I would recommend starting a new paragraph whenever a new speaker begins talking. But otherwise it was an interesting start. I hope you will continue.


No problem. I figured the dialogue might be a issue. I’ll see what I can do about making it easier to understand.


It’s off to a good start with some rich lore explaining everything well. Bookmarking this wip


Did a playthru. Enjoyed it. I’m in. Time to set up a bookmark

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