thanks I will fix that though it is in the end so you have at least read the whole game
@akatsuki9344 Yup, practice makes perfect. Just tell me if you need any 'elp.
@2Ton They call me Bagelthief because that is my username.
So, its not because you steal begals?
what is the mean of begals?
Mara o.o you dont know what a Bagel is, you need to google that!
its a yiddish bread? really
Yep its kinda like a donut but not as amazing
Yeah really bland donuts.
Mara was thinking dirty beforeā¦
is there any other grammar errors than the ones that Red grave pointed out
Maraā¦no were talking about food! not whatever you were thinking perv xD
WellI think Iāll be laying off the bagels for a while
Ok is there anything else other than the stuff already said to fix? can i continue making the game now?
You should continue making it regardlessā¦
no like continue the story like if everything i made is fixed then i should take the story forwards
Take the story forward regardless of errors you should have scenes waiting to pop out the back of your head, no one said you couldnāt plan forward 
ok well thanksā¦ i was getting bored of trying to find all the errors
Oh and on a side note, go take a look at the choicescript wiki it helps ALOT, you could also ask one of the more CS literate people on the forum here for help Iām sure that they wonāt bite. At least I hope they donāt
anyways i will be taking a break from this game, i have heard of people making more than 1 game at a time and i think it would be a good idea for me as i get bored making just one game. so yeah just wanted to tell you guys
and this one is going to be a relaxing type. canāt really explain it but its seems really fun to me, and it will have action in it. itās like a monster slaying type game