Project RVR


#1

Project RVR is the working title for a fantasy ChoiceScript game I’ve been working on for the past couple of weeks. I wanted to make something reminiscent of the old RPGs I used to play and it somehow turned into this.

https://dl.dropbox.com/u/75733713/web/RVR/index.html

It’s not very far into the game yet, and my English isn’t very good, so it’s probably written oddly in some places. If you get an error somewhere, let me know. This is currently my main project, so I should be getting around to updating it fairly regularly.


#2

I quite enjoy the setting, it seems like you have a lot of ideas for it. The exposition could have been delivered a bit more “en media res” as they put it, but I’ve definitely seen worse, and that’s mostly a matter of preference.

The opening was a bit too slow for my tastes, but I love how the characters react to even the little choices, makes them have more impact. I didn’t notice any odd wording, your English seems quite good to me. I look forward to seeing more of it.


#3

I’m def liking this game, can’t wait to play more of it, the stats at the time seem pretty bare but I like the way you dealt with the game and story. English seems good, can’t wait to see this game grow.


#4

And then the universe blew up.
This was awesome nice story and realistic characters.

Usagi !_!


#5

I just love all the tiny snippets that change depending on your origin, this is one of the few games I’ve played through more than four or five times. The English seems fine so far, I’m looking forward to seeing more from you. :slight_smile:


#6

I suppose I should probably point out that this will probably be more “interactive story” than “game”. I’m used to writing visual novels, so I can’t easily get out of the habit of making everything centered around character interactions.

@RockBou
I do plan on adding more to the stats screen. In fact, there are currently more stats already in there, they’re just hidden in a “test mode” until I can figure out how to implement them properly.

Also, I guess instead of saying that my English is “not good”, I should’ve said that it’s wonky. If not for dictionary.com, spell-checking, and someone to point out that something I typed isn’t actually a word, it would be indecipherable. I also tend to switch words around, skip words entirely, and put phrases together that don’t make sense. If anyone spots something like this, please let me know.


#7

In my playthrough I saw a s where there should have been an a but nothing besides that.


#8

@SengokuKronos
Do you happen to remember where that was? I can’t seem to find it.


#9

Nope


#10

I really like what I’ve read so far, the characterization is really good i’ve got a feel for all the characters that are introduced.

The s where there should be an a is here. “It was s stroke of bad luck that caused a violent storm to tear your ship apart and leave you with no knowledge of what happened to your fellow travelers.”


#11

@ZigZagZoom
Ah! Thank you! I was starting to go into paranoid mode about that “s”. It should be fixed in the next update.


#12

I’ve updated the stats screen a bit, and hopefully it won’t break the game. I also cleaned up the code a bit and fixed some typos.


#13

Just started and noticed an error. When picking to play as a female and wear a gown it says “line 112: Invalid string, open quote with no close quote: “maleform””.

Also happens if I choose a uniform. It seems to freeze on the next screen afterwards. If I stay in travelling clothes it is fine.

Edit: Now that I’ve finished, I’m really liking the sound of the game. The backgrounds are a nice touch.


#14

@hopskotch
It should be fixed now. Thanks for pointing that out.


#15

:slight_smile: great job.
only complain would be that its gets pretty confusing with the names since they were all Reavers and they are thrown at us all at once.
The way you present the Emperor is confusing as well. First you were talking about a God and how he almost never comes to the mortal realm and then about then the Emperor. All you really need to do is reword it so its easier to understand that the Emperor and God of Prosperity are the same person.

Looking forward to updates :slight_smile:


#16

I enjoyed the setting, and I especially adored all the possible backgrounds for the main character.

As a non-native speaker of the English language, I understand your concern for your grammar; and I, unfortunately, have to admit that you do have some mistakes. However, I’m too numb right now to play and point them out; perhaps I will do so tomorrow.

I do hope to see more of this, and I expect for you to complete it; this is too promising to let go, and I’d like to play it till the end, ha-ha.


#17

Let see… trying to find a word to describe how a feel about the story, and awsome seems over used and not worty of the story. It is really very good. It drew me in and I laughed and cried, I cried when I came to the end of the work. I could not find a problem with the flow, did not hit any errors. The only problem I have with the story is waiting for the next update.


#18

^I second that


#19

Thank you to everyone for the feedback. I’m taking it all into consideration for the next update. I also want to get a few more scenes added before I update the game again.

If anyone is interested, I have a twitter account that I update with my progress often: https://twitter.com/CS_Closet


#20

Dude awsome this is going to be great