As a side-note, the game is also sort of a showcase/proof-of-concept for using color in CS, which dashingdon.com now supports (link to details: Dashingdon: Free ChoiceScript Game Hosting). Let me know if the colors are bothersome or they detract from the story or anything of that sort. Thanks.
P.S. Some people have asked so just to clarify: Yes indeed I am still writing The Burden. I hope to have an update out by the end of the weekend. I know it’s been a long time, but the story of the naked nobody will indeed be continued.
There’s a couple of really interesting concepts going on in this story, and I really enjoyed my quick look. Phobias deciding powers is something I haven’t seen before and has a lot of implications and interactions. Following the logic, an arachnophobe would gain the ability to control spiders? Or is it not always that straightforward? From what we saw, fear of darkness led to control over shadows and Dr Warner’s ability was directly linked to his fear as well. Another interesting thing was that Brangwen’s powers were sentient/had their own will. I have seen that before, but it’s always refreshing. Anyway, thanks for a good read.
Well, the colors aren’t annoying, they help you remember who is talking, so that’s a plus. I’m not really into having my surname picked for me though. Story seems interesting. Oh, you also kinda gave us our personalities too. I hate that. “He would always wait for you to finish speaking. He would never interrupt, regardless of the horrible things you said to him and the vulgar names you called him.” That’s also locked, it’s pretty much saying that you open up to him, but what if that’s not how my mind works? Maybe I didn’t tell him jackshit. You wanna make Julian friendly? Be my guest. But DO NOT make my MC friendly. You should focus on characterizing the personality of the MC. Anyway, I really look forward to see where this goes.
Fair point, thanks. I had thought the option of taking Julian’s hand or not would be enough to characterize your relationship with him but I did hard-set that he was looked upon as sort of a friend. In my mind, a nine year old child imprisoned in a strange place would look to someone for friendship but now that I think about it, that wouldn’t always be the case.
@dashingdon oh my god I’m so happy I can’t execute the idea myself because of my studies but you, you did good, better even than what I could have done. Keep it up,gosh my heart was pumping hard while reading it.
So curious about the others phobia and Julian and that doctor who fears death I like them.
Overcoming a phobia is rather hard, but not impossible. It has some multiple ways to cure or treat? Not sure what proper word should go, but on regards to what if the person overcomes their phobia. I say it better to let their manifested powers to dwindle or disappear since trigger for said power was the phobia it has relation to it. Removing phobia will also remove the persons’ power since the trigger to manifest the said power is now non-existent. Am I make sense? I’m trying to say it in English and I hope it comes as something coherent.