@13ventrm@Mardam I plan to improve on the pacing of the gamee once i get the variables working for me, and the stats are still not workin for whatever reason. As for the writing being too blunt…How could I improve on that?
Ok people stats are now working! 
The expansion for the create your gang branch should be coming out later today or early tomorrow, so stay tuned!
Note: Forgot to mention, only the top 4 skills are used right now, but i will use the bottom three pretty soon.
@QondasDyablo cool, cant wait to play through it.
i have to say the game is still in early stages but i know i will love it it already draws me in and the fact that it has vendetta touches(vendetta is my favorite game/demo on here so far) makes it all the better
@TheKing Vendetta’s game certaintly inspired me to make my own game, and I liked a lot of the elements he had in his story, but I did not want to just copy it and have gangs and more modern setting be the only differences. For now the games choice feel like fake choices and and the pacing is off, but that will soon be fixed.
@QondasDyablo i know you didnt copy i was misunderstood when i said that my bad but even with the very linear choices it has tremendous potential
Revel in the details, put emphasize emotions, I found it odd that not a single emotion was mentioned during the massacre of the protagonist’s family.
@TheKing Oh no I dint misinterpret you, I just explained myself wrong. I only said that because I did not want other people to think I was copying his game. Although it is true that I gather inspiration from Vendettas game, the game I am trying to make is more influenced by video games like the Saints Row series, that’s why the original placeholder title was Los Santos, or The Saints. I also draw inspiration from The Godfather 2: The Game, which is how I came up with the take over style, as opposed to vendettas an opportunity will present itself. Overall it is more influenced by games I have enjoyed in the past more than anything. Sorry if I sounded mad or anything like that, i did not mean it, and thanks for the support!
@13ventrm Well the protagonist was mostly in shock and denial at that stage, which quickly got overridden by hate and anger at what they had done to him. Although now that you bring that up I will expand on it further, because I’m also going for a realistic and at least somewhat emotional tale of gangster’s life. Although the current outcome is only going to become available to people with a high enough intelligence, and I may add a new variable named Logic or Reasoning soon to either replace or go with Intelligence.
Hm, I think the emotions definitely need to be more present, so far the protagonist has given very little inidcation of their emotions. What did he feel about the town before the drugs come in? After? The rampant polic corruption? Living in the cramped house? How he spent his free time? Being forced into drug dealing? The beating? His first turf war? His rising through the ranks?
Without the emotions, the events just seem to have so little impact, and the protagonist seems too blank to care about particularly much.
@13ventrm Yeah I know what you mean, but at the time I wrote that I had very basic knowledge of choice script and few constructive criticism from people who had played the game. That is what I mostly ask for here. I appreciate the motivation but I also need criticism and feedback to truly be able to construct a good game. If I do it my own way I would have probably already written everything out and left it at that, but I need feedback to stop myself from creating an overly bland and indifferent story. Anyways, thanks for the feedback it will help me improve my writing. Also when you said that I should pay attention to detail, I do, I really do, it’s just that I get so many ideas that I end up overwhelmed that I sometimes have to rely on simpler toned down descriptions so as to finish something, rather than having sitting in my desktop while I keep infinitely adding to it.
Not a problem, constructive criticism is a thing always needed yet rarely given.
Update: Changed the stats screen a bit, gave a bit of a taste of whats to come of the create your gang branch, and made some additions overall to chapter 1.
Can you upload it?
@Awsome It already is uploaded.
I got an error
@Awsome During what part did the error happen?
I chose brawler then joined the gang
@Awsome i see what i did. I put a place holder and forgot to remove it. I will fix it tomorrow.
Ok thanks