First, you have a good flow and pretty writing. However, A cog is not a book, or not only. You can’t put a introduction WITH NO CHOICE AT ALL. After a long scrolling down in my mobile phone, more than 10 minutes, confused about if I am Ria, the consort, or just the tower. I just decided to post here my fresh thoughts. I didn’t even reach a choice lol. In official Cogs they’re obliged to put a choice with action in the first page to attract readers. The ria story is interesting but what I and many people want is control over story, and our character, and not read a eternal introduction without choice . Put some fake choices could help a lot. Now I would continue reading.
