You wake up in a hospital, alone and frightened, unable to remember how you got there. The desolate hospital is eerily silent, and unsettling. You set around to look for clues as to how you got here and how to leave, in the process learning some unnerving secrets … As you play the game, you will uncover more about the hospital and its mysterious past, as well as confront enemies and search for a mystery man in your quest to return home.
As of this post, the first two chapters of the game are complete, and the third will be done within the month. This is a reworking of a project earlier created as a Google Form (now abandoned). The game is meant to be atmospheric survival horror, consisting of linear sequences as well as open exploration based sequences. The tone aims to be eerie and always keep you wondering what’s coming your way, but never too serious. One of the cool things about the game is that it has collectibles like notebook pages and hidden secrets that generally build the atmosphere and add to the mood.
Right now, the game is done upto a certain point in Chapter 3. Attempting to look through the window or finding a way into Room 103 will end the game. I’ve managed to iron out most errors. Please tell me if you come across any.
Feedback and C+C of all kinds is appreciated. This is my first foray into ChoiceScript (or scripting) in general, outside of HTML coding which I’ve learnt in school, but I’ve been writing for a few years and am considering a career as a novelist. So I’d like to hear feedback on how my game is right now and how it can be improved, both in terms of writing and code.
Why in zip format? there are many people here without a PC using phones and tablets. A zip file its a pain in the ass to be opened in mobiles also why I need a copy of your game? That is awful for you lol somebody could copy your files to alter them a few and say the game is theirs or publish without your permissionn
Also, your coded its full of errors and half even its covered in quick text. I could fix them but I don’t change files without your permission for moral principles. But a troll could destroy your reputation changing text put porn images, then give a fake link using your name beware lol.
Upload the “web” folder with all its contents, then get the public link to the “index.html” file, and post it here.
Get rid of the backslashes around quotation marks. If you want, you can use italics and bold. If forward slashes are meant to be line breaks, go ahead and make them *line_break
Break the text up more with paragraph breaks (double returns). You can also put the contents of a letter in its own paragraph, and use italics.
The key lets you into room 139, but the next page says room 137 looks like a hurricane hit it.
chapter2 line 146: It is illegal to fall out of a *choice statement; you must *goto or *finish before the end of the indented block.
@HoraceTorys I thought the backslashes were meant to let the quotation mark show? That’s what the guide on the site says. Without them it shows up as a question mark. Fixed most of the errors. I’ll take it down and follow your advice with the next release which should be sometime this weekend.
@poison_mara I’m actually distributing my game to some friends who don’t work with ChoiceScript as well, so I assumed they’d need the rest of the files too, so I put everything in a zip folder and uploaded it. Anyway, thanks for the advice. About the code errors, yeah, this is my first time working with ChoiceScript and like I said I have next to no coding experience. Can you get back to me with what specifically you mean? And what do you mean by it’s ‘covered in quick text’?
Only if you are writing a variable in code do you need backslashes before quote marks (reread that section). If your quotation marks are showing up as question marks, it’s probably because they are “smart quotes” used in from Microsoft Word.
These are dumb quotes: " ", they are straight lines.
These are smart quotes: “ ”, they look like little tadpoles.
You should use a text editor like Notepad++, it won’t mess with quotation marks, and will probably solve your indentation problem, too.
Quicktest is a file inside choicescript that allows you to test your game errors automatically as Horace has said you got a lot of indentation problems then give errors if you want I fixed them or help you pointed out I would help you.
And about the game, I like it, but is confusing without a draw map you could add images to stats with one. Also game needs more custom using amnesia you could make girls and boys remember different things and different backgrounds like being a rich family orphan, an army soldier with crisis after the war. It haven’t to be long scenes, but add tons of flavor and replay value. If you need help pm me.
I went through the txt files and read it, not bad. But like Mara says don’t zip and upload anyone could take your work, however I believe people on this forum respect writers and most if not all wouldn’t do that.
The indent problems are mainly because I used to use Notepad and switched to Notepad++ halfway through. Also I’ve taken down the zip file and have followed your advice, I’ll edit/post again soon with the new link.
EDIT
I don’t have access to a paid dropbox account unfortunately, but I have taken down the zip file so there’s that. Anyway, I’m looking for alternatives. Any suggestions?
Make sure you’re running the file in Firefox (chrome and IE won’t work).
Make sure the compile.html is in the folder above ‘web’.
It also probably won’t work if you’ve changed your folder names or directory structure, for e.g. changed the name of the ‘mygame’, ‘web’ or ‘scenes’ folders.
Could you try the second compile link in that first post (experimental gui), AND/OR send me a link to a .zip of your game (including the compile directory) via PM?
