Lex Talionis: Exordium (Feedback)

I’m a tad confused.

I was trying to make a joke about Ryoka on how he acted towards the MC and getting his butt kicked for the first time( I was a little tired from work and college when I made that sorry for your confusion

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Yeah he can do that.

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Can’t get out of here.

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And I put the *finish command this time :joy::joy:

Chapter 3 will be uploaded soon though.

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Your eyes drift lower to her black pajamas. The fabric clings to her curvaceous form; outlining her full breast, narrow waist, wide hips, and round ass.

Mom

Disc scratch

What.

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Sweet Home Alabama plays louder

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I loved the game so far, but I’m having trouble during the training scene, after answering the first question and going to the next one i get an error message

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Everything has been sorted out. You can carry on reading.

Here’s another bug.

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I came across it, and its the result of Chapter 4 not being available as of yet. So, it’s nothing to worry about.

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This showed up

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The author knows. (see post above the one over yours) Bugs that have been reported once don’t really need to be repeated many times over unless an update was pushed through, and the bug persisted.

As a general message to everyone… Reading through the thread to see what’s been said/reported is a way to avoid repeat messages that could dishearten the authors working on their WIPs. Putting a heart on a post that mentions what you were going to say is enough to echo the sentiment without hammering the thread with the same thing many times over. :slightly_smiling_face:

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Hey I really like the WIP
The fight scenes were fun to read and I could feel a certain dynamic.
But I think the dialogues are a bit shallow. They feel kinda rushed. The best example is the fight with our rival. The fight itself was great but the conversation which let to the fight was way to short. You didn’t gave the conversation enough time to lead it built up tension. He’s just like “Hey dickhead” and you are “ok”. Then he escalates for no reason. I didn’t even undestand that he wanted to attack us until he raised his arm. I know you probably wanted to show that he’s aggressive but maybe give him at least a few more lines.

I also like the way we are more or less in MHA but from an outsider perspective. You can really tell the love to the Anime/manga! I nevertheless think it will has it’s own spin on it. I look forward to the next update!

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Thanks for the feedback.

I had or still have similar concerns about the dialogue. Though I left correcting it, given the lack of vocalized issue with dialogue.

It’s more MHA-esque, hence the ‘spin’ you noticed.

The next update will be for beta testers, and I need to decide on at least 5 more since I already have the first tester.

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If you mean 5 more beta tester I would be happy to help!

Will there be (female) ROs?

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Well, consider yourself the second beta tester.

Of course. I plan on having male and female ROs.

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Sign me up, please.

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Third.

That means there are only 3 spots left.

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Is it possible for me to bata test too? Do you have a discord?

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