Idk if it was changed to 12-13 years Naomi would’ve been taking care of the MC for 5-6 years since they’re at the end of high school and are 17-18 now, still a little weird and disturbing to be thinking of your adoptive mother that way.
Also thanks
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Can we all agree that leering your step-parent is weird regardless of what age they started taking care of you?
And don’t say it isn’t because it isn’t blood related. I much rather people admit to liking taboo topic or clicking the incest tag on pornhub. Don’t try to defend it as normal.
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It’s highly debatable, I guess. It would really depend upon a couple of factors, in-game factors and your own personal opinions on the matter. I remember this same discussion was also had with another wip called From Ashes We Rise. Regardless, this is not the place to have such discussions.
I think the best you can do here @Janus_Prospero is to remove that description altogether.
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Aside from Naomi’s description is there anything else worth addressing?
I’ll just redo the description and adjust the MC’s age.
I’m thankful I kept myself in check with the male descriptions because I know that I initially wanted to be overzealous as a gay man.
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About the description… I agree with the comments about it being rather inappropriate for an adoptive mother—the relationship dynamic is the issue, not anything to do with genetics.
However, I’d also like to note that this sort of description wouldn’t make sense for a main character who isn’t attracted to women, even if it were applied to an entirely unrelated character. At least I know that’s not what I’d ever notice in a woman.
Many games have a system where bits of attraction-type descriptions are displayed based on the main character’s orientation, put under *if blocks based on orientation. You may want to consider that as a possibility for the parts after the orientation is set.
Then you can go overzealous with male descriptions too, but display them only when the main character’s into men 
Also, as a minor note, you can reply to multiple posts at once. When you highlight a bit of text in a post you’re responding to and click “quote,” that’ll add it to your reply each time, so you don’t have to have a whole bunch of separate responses.
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I can see the issue, given how often its been brought up today 
Can’t I be overzealous with all the descriptions regardless of the MC’s sexual orientation?
I recall Samurai of Hyuga doing it.
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But the male characters are both similarly-aged school friends (or rivals)… 
The exact sort of person who it would make sense for a teenager to potentially find attractive without it being creepy… (And as @TSSL said, you could always make them only appear if the MC has the right orientation.)
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Text options are doable. Vanilla and saucy options.
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Keep in mind that Devon, the author of SoH has lost a lot of fans because of his writing regarding Junko – if you are modeling your writing on his – it is best to be upfront about that and to expect a large divide between those who like this style of writing and those that don’t/
I’m going to leave the thread now but if you need help or have questions do not hesitate to call a moderator for help.
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um i think you might need to fix the saving option since when i tryd to save the game it would let you it said Uncaught Error: SaveMod: Unable to *sm_save before *sm_init, but other then that yes this game is starting of good its interesting.
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I’ll be sure to sort out the saving option. I just need to get around to it.
Also, thank you for the feedback.
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I am aware of that. I often go with an unadulterated approach to my writing, as to ensure that I give readers an experience that they will not be able to get anywhere else. Though, I do appreciate the engagement over my work.
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I like what I have read so far, sadly do have to agree about the description for the stepmother. It would be fine to describe someone that the MC is attracted to though.
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What if the MC is attracted to the mother?
That discussion has already been dropped. Move on.
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I really enjoyed this work. I am looking forward to seeing where you go with this and looking forward to more updates.
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Thank you.
I usually try to do weekly updates.
Also, you’re welcome to give criticism and suggestions.
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I’ve liked what I’ve read so far and I have a question in terms of power how strong will we be it seems we have been blessed with quite a strong power.
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At the moment you’re powerful, however, your powers are unreliable at times for “unknown” reasons. Additionally, the ‘Potential’ stat whenever increased either stabilizes your abilities but only partially and at certain percentages you’re awarded with more power in the form of additional Talents.
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