For the last few months I’ve been working on and off on a new project, which I have (provisionally) titled “Highway Marshall” (I’m very bad at choosing titles…).
Anyway, the premise is that the MC is a Highway Marshall, some sort of policemen/mercenary in a “Mad Max” type future of walled city states and barbaric deserts. You must recruit a small group and drive through a desolate Spanish landscape to find a kidnapped engineer, before he is sold into slavery.
Basically I’ve written most of the game by now, or at least a basic skeleton, though only the first half is more or less ready for testing (an average play through is about 7000 words (about 20,000-30,000 words, including code) roughly half of what I have done so far, but the other half still needs much polishing).
I’m looking for all sorts of comments, including continuity errors (can you find any changes in character gender?), typos (those who have read my stuff before know that I can be very absent minded while writing…), and any suggestion that you may have. I don’t take offence at any constructive criticism, though if you find any errors I would appreciate if you could copy-paste the sentence to make it easier for me to find the problem. Basically, any feedback would be greatly appreciated!
Otherwise, hope you enjoy!